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Quivering in your sight
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Quivering in your sight |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Quivering in your sight Just like rocky road ice cream I melted right away when I found you in my dreams and like a bowl of fresh strawberries smothered in delicious whip cream my desire to eat was incomplete until I could make her scream. As those sweet succulent strawberries surely took my will to resist away so it's true have you my dear when you came into my dreams to play. Cannot resist a yummy banana split as each tasty layer delightfully unfolds. Love it when you insist to kiss my lips my desires soon destined to explode. Starving to squeeze and hold you tight wondering will you please do that for me til you whip cream my amorous appetite. And as I see and taste you sweet cherry lips tonight you will remain my magnificent jello delight and surely I will always quiver in your sight. Jameslee@August21,2000 [This message has been edited by jmlee12345 (edited 08-31-2000).] |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
what a delicious way to express your admiration for this girl! i liked this alot! ~Dawn "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
all that talk of food makes my tummy quiver in anticipation... 40 minutes for lunch... I am hungry... and you seem to be have hungry eyes in love... regards, James... sudhir |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Hi James, What a luscious treat you have penned here my friend...such a high calorie delight....MMMMMMMMM |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Thank you poutprincess, Sudhir, and Paula for your hungry responses...strawberry fields forever...James |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh James ... I gained a few pounds just reading this delicious poem. Great imagery ... excuse me now, I'm hungry!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
James, A fun expression for your longing of someone. I liked this poem.... but now I have a craving for a bannana split  rp25 |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Thank you Kit and Rose for your wonderful comments...James |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
James - I saw the topic title and immediately thought I had pushed you too hard - lol. Great theme writing - you held to it consistently, and used some really terrific similes - some of them erotic - to convey your feelings. I enjoyed it. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Ooohh...my...goodnesss... |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
YUM! Now I'm hungry.... Michael Proust- "Love is space and time measured by the heart" |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
James, delicious, diet be hanged. Lovely made my mouth water. Splendidly visual, love this.  |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Hey Jimmy, what a deliculously penned piece you have here. I feel like eating Jello now! Great piece and great imagery! This is definitely one your more creative pieces, in my opinion. Nathan |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
Why Jmlee I believe you've got a sweet tooth! |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
LOL I have this automatic whipped cream maker...for my espresso bar. Tis quite an invention! *wink* Anyhoo, awesome poem, what fun!  ~Heather |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
6 7 8 9 10 That's as many seconds I need To raid my fridge for fudge sauce And an ice cream treat Oh James, charm shines thru this one I can't stop giggling it's sooo cute... Seriously though, I enjoyed this read! [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 09-15-2000).] |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
I love chocolate ice cream and I had ben and jerrys tonight..believe it or not it had fudge fish in it ha ha with carmel and marshmello...no more for another month or so ha ha ...enjoyed the poem James.. |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
What a wonderful treat and now I'm hungry! |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~This was delightful. Put a smile on my face!!~ ~Cherie~ |
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