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We Are One
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We Are One |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
We Are OneTouch tapestry, this map of me your palms spread to the seas What distance bid this journey's breath that quickens by degrees? Within a fleeting moment's kiss your soul now of my own Your skin absorbed within my skin We move and we are one And thus as one will we abide each night and of the day Each water's edge we gaze upon The songs, the words we pray As ages roll, we'll not recall when we encased two lives When separate steps our footfalls lay and separate were our eyes My heart will fill and flow your tears upon these pillows' slips 'Til brutal breath of all farewells drain out our dying lips |
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Steve B Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 140Southern PA |
Claire ~ sighhhhing...such beautiful words so so beautifuly orchestrated....  Steve B |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
(SNIFF) Oh to know true love.....I can certainly relate to this piece Godddddddddd.......this is AWESOME!!!!! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Thanks, fellas ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Claire, Very romantic and so sad. Michael by Michael Auguste "But I am so like everyone. And everyone is so like me We cork our contents, lest they flee Until our lives are spent and d |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ Truly a beauteous phrase you turn. Lusciously dipped in light melancholy. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Rapturous, enchanting, beautiful Liz |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Michael, I know you think this is sad, but my intention was to express more than sadness ... a total and complete devotion of one to another and the sensation of living fully within the being of that person. I reread it again just this morning, though, and you're right...there is a melancholia about it. I'm glad you think enough of my work to really examine it, my friend. Thank you. Marge, thank you so much for the "luscious" and the "beauteous"... two perfectly sweet words to start (or restart, as it were) my morning. Liz, and more sweet words from you... I am floating!...thank you sincerely, my friend. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Claire, your words are a balm to a healing heart. . . Beautiful as always my friend. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
If I accomplish nothing else before I die - I could ask for nothing I'd treasure more Than to share a love such as you've described There is absolutely nothing I would not give For this God I do emplore Quite aside from the sentiment - I think I've said enough on that - The writing is absolutely beautiful from the tapistry map to the brutal death of dying lips Out of a possible 5 *'s - I'd give this 10! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
...'sighing'>>>speechless this one left me Meadowmuse... Coco |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
So tenderly AWESOME...lovely read and the flow held me all the way to the end and wanting more so I went back and re-read it. Loved it much. |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
So beautifuly tender........and the devotion all pure love feels. This goes straight to the heart.... Jenn E |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
This is truly magnificent, and tender, but the word that keeps coming to mind is bittersweet. It carries the joy of love and the sorrow of endings. Bravo!!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Sven, thank you. I'm glad to know something that I have written has touched you in this way. Wilfred, your note was so nice...thank you for letting me know how much you enjoyed this piece. I think someday I may publish a book just of love poems, and encouragement like yours helps me to feel that I should. Coco, I will take your speechlessness as a lovely compliment, and I thank you, in earnest, for that. Mark, I often re~read poetry too. That you re~read mine gives me such pleasure. Thank you for letting me know this! Jenn, thank you for your kind words. It touches me that this touched you. (did I say that right??) Sunny, yes...I was thinking "bittersweet" when I wrote it, but then, I think that a lot. Thanks for letting me know you enjoyed reading. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
never a blunder never a fall Claire's poetic thunder shakes upon us all another masterpiece, Claire ... |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Oh...Im almost speechless.. This is unbeleivably beautiful. Great work!! Beth~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Magnificent and beautifully worded... a precious one here, Claire... regards, sudhir |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Wow... what a truly wonderful piece... I loved the flow and the romance . "My heart will fill and flow your tears upon these pillows' slips 'Til brutal breath of all farewells drain out our dying lips" Amazing! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire--If you were to write a book of any kind...I would want to have it...so please if you do, let me know. This poem is one of my favorites of so many of yours that I love...it speaks so from your heart. |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Such a beautiful peice! All the noise is coming from my little cornor of the web~ Applause~ Applause~ Applause~ If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink Vlh. visit my site~ http://www.hsanet.net/user/dkm/hellomy.htm |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
M.A., I didn't realize anyone else had read this one... thank you so much for leaving this sweet little verse for me to find. Beth, thank you for reading...I appreciate you letting me know you enjoyed this piece. Sudhir, thank you, my friend...I always enjoy sharing poetry with you. (and smiles) LM, such nice words...thank you very much. So glad you enjoyed it. Martie, I will certainly let you know, and I thank you sincerely for your encouragement. Tori, gosh, thanks for all the applause! What a treat ~ you are so kind ~ ~ Claire |
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