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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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Yes well, Here's a poem for those who's bordom has outshined the sun. Saving to die: Tis the hate O lord, that comsumes thy soul Tis the ignorance of thee that betrays human whole Tis the passion of thy heart that plunges thy mind Yet in thy heart love you'll soon find. O kinsman, O brother, your ways but amuse me O kinsman, O brother it is the heart that kills thee O kinsman, O brother , your life is but a game. O kinsman, Or another, it will never be the same. O lord but thou hath no sense in reason Tis spring, time of love, not a time of treason. O lord if thou permit me, I must imply that this thief,raper, killer is but a fly buzzing and bizzing among our food trying to but make us have a bad mood. O kinsman, thou doth know logic of life I will abide to thee to with hold my death knife. Tis thee who hath love in this black hearted rat So tis thee who will die, how about that? comments?....none?.....some?.....ok |
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Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
wow you were so great. |
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Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Oh hey thanks, I appreciate it. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Finely rhymned but I will require an explanation of the poem at this time. Welcome to Passions. James |
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English Rose Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 211Berkshire, England |
Well, someone obviously got their cum-uppance here....but it was definately not you Dopey!....well done |
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Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The poem was written in a time of utter dissapointment. I was backstabbed by a "friend". This poem is about a lord and a kinsman and in the end the lord backstabs his kinsman. The kinsman, out of compassion, tries to save a thief. The thief symbolizing the situation that was occuring in my life, and the kinsman being me, that ever so foolish human to befriend somebody that ubused of his power. The lord was my friend simply informing me that in order to abby to the agreement in which I wanted, he would have to backstab me. Hope that helped. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I enjoyed this tale...the structure, the language, the symbolism...and look forward to reading more of your compositions. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Quite a poem you've penned here very powerful in expression.  Coco |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Finally found your first post. YES!  Now this is so different to what you are writing now. Like really, really different. It really does display just how much talent you have in that head of yours. God knows there has to be something besides air.  Whoever it is about certainly doesn't sound too good for you. Now if you haven't already killed them, how's about I come over and we make a day of it? lol Now in all seriousness *gasps* this is a fantastic piece. Nothing should be changed because damnit! You're too good. Be crap for once would you? ~AF~ Kookaburra sits in the old gum tree, merry, merry king of the bush is he. Laugh! kookaburra LAGUH! Kookaburra how gay your life must be. |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
From First to last a great poet, You will be truly missed. "Ph33r Me I eat N00bies Ph0R bReakFAsT" |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
I hope you enjoy your stay here. ...The laughs, the crying, the hugs, its all part of the dillio... Brother, thank you. **Massive Hugs** ~Carly. Speak softly and carry a beagle. |
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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
So you knew he was going to backstab you yet you went ahead willing to get hurt? i wouldn't say it was foolish but refreshing in the thought that there are people like that out there even tho there are many it is often over looked...sort of confuzzled but from what i understood of the poem i liked it as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
where you been? |
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aRiEsAnGeL Member
since 2004-03-04
Posts 53Florida |
hey....you sound like an awesome guy.I hope you like it here.I have only been on for maybe a year.My mom is passing shadows.I will talk to you soon. |
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