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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-08-30 04:46 PM


Yes well, Here's a poem for those who's bordom has outshined the sun.

Saving to die:

Tis the hate O lord, that comsumes thy soul
Tis the ignorance of thee that betrays human whole
Tis the passion of thy heart that plunges thy mind
Yet in thy heart love you'll soon find.

O kinsman, O brother, your ways but amuse me
O kinsman, O brother it is the heart that kills thee
O kinsman, O brother ,
your life is but a game.
O kinsman, Or another,
it will never be the same.

O lord but thou hath no sense in reason
Tis spring, time of love, not a time of treason.
O lord if thou permit me, I must imply
that this thief,raper, killer is but a fly
buzzing and bizzing among our food
trying to but make us have a bad mood.

O kinsman, thou doth know logic of life
I will abide to thee to with hold my death knife.
Tis thee who hath love in this black hearted rat
So tis thee who will die, how about that?


comments?....none?.....some?.....ok


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1 posted 2000-08-30 04:58 PM


wow you were so great.
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2 posted 2000-08-30 04:59 PM


Oh hey thanks, I appreciate it.
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3 posted 2000-08-30 05:04 PM


Finely rhymned but I will require an explanation of the poem at this time.
Welcome to Passions.
James

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4 posted 2000-08-30 05:12 PM


Well, someone obviously got their cum-uppance here....but it was definately not you Dopey!....well done
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5 posted 2000-08-30 05:17 PM


The poem was written in a time of utter dissapointment. I was backstabbed by a "friend". This poem is about a lord and a kinsman and in the end the lord backstabs his kinsman.
The kinsman, out of compassion, tries to save a thief. The thief symbolizing the situation that was occuring in my life, and the kinsman being me, that ever so foolish human to befriend somebody that ubused of his power. The lord was my friend simply informing me that in order to abby to the agreement in which I wanted, he would have to backstab me.
Hope that helped.

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6 posted 2000-08-30 06:57 PM


I enjoyed this tale...the structure, the language, the symbolism...and look forward to reading more of your compositions.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


CocoBaci
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7 posted 2000-08-30 07:48 PM


Quite a poem you've penned here very powerful in expression.

Coco  

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8 posted 2001-09-23 01:10 PM


Finally found your first post. YES!  

Now this is so different to what you are writing now. Like really, really different. It really does display just how much talent you have in that head of yours. God knows there has to be something besides air.  
Whoever it is about certainly doesn't sound too good for you. Now if you haven't already killed them, how's about I come over and we make a day of it? lol  

Now in all seriousness *gasps* this is a fantastic piece. Nothing should be changed because damnit! You're too good. Be crap for once would you?  

~AF~

Kookaburra sits in the old gum tree, merry, merry king of the bush is he. Laugh! kookaburra LAGUH! Kookaburra how gay your life must be.

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9 posted 2001-10-05 07:44 AM


From First to last a great poet, You will be truly missed.

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10 posted 2001-10-05 10:24 AM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
I hope you enjoy your stay here.
...The laughs, the crying, the hugs, its all part of the dillio...
Brother, thank you.
**Massive Hugs**
  ~Carly.

Speak softly and carry a beagle.

"Go outside and use your own eyes. You'll be surprised to see things you've never been taught."
   ~Edouard Manet

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11 posted 2001-11-20 02:06 PM


So you knew he was going to backstab you yet you went ahead willing to get hurt? i wouldn't say it was foolish but refreshing in the thought that there are people like that out there even tho there are many it is often over looked...sort of confuzzled but from what i understood of the poem i liked it

as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u.  

passing shadows
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12 posted 2003-01-13 03:10 AM


where you been?
aRiEsAnGeL
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13 posted 2004-12-02 02:40 PM


hey....you sound like an awesome guy.I hope you like it here.I have only been on for maybe a year.My mom is passing shadows.I will talk to you soon.
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