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Adultery by Design
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Adultery by Design |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas 
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There are some, of whom tis said Sleep in another's marriage bed And then insist There was no tryst It's all in the spouse's head In secret places throughout the town They nightly go to fool around Ignoring the price Of their vice If proof is ever found There are cheats who spend the time Penning soft romantic rhyme Laying the bait For someone's mate Adultery by design Alicat |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
can I just smile here, Ali? and definitely, A Toga Party is called for... Hugs to you. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
It's amazing that there exist such low-lifes who would do this. Sad and pathetic really. Ali, you did a fabulous job with this, penning it in a style which so well reflects the game which they take their actions to be, even though it hurts others. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ali! This is so good!!! One of your best. And I fear the subject is quite timely. We've had quite a few discussions of affairs and adultery lately. Good job!  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Geesh, Ali.... you know how to come on strong... Hope you don't offend anyone, huh?... OH well.... They can't be offended if they're not doing stuff they shouldn't be doing, can they?... Nice job here, Persnikitty...  |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
May I just say, that all the romantic words in the world.. cannot tear you away from the one you truly love. So it's not the person laying the bait that's the problem. You could lay all the bait in front of me you like, doesn't mean I have to bite... unless im very very hungry.... (just a thought)..(and it's not personal) lol |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Bravo, Ali...bravo! Very well said, and unfortunately all too true. Shame, 'tis. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
*big sigh* I have no reply to this, can't form the words....but wow this packed a punch! LY ya big fe-Lion  ~H PS the big meanies, suckerin us poor wimmen in.... :P~* |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Wow Cat...this just says everything doesnt it? Way to go [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 08-30-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Thought provoking... a woman finds herself in a marriage where the husband does not appreciate her and is critical of her. a man approaches the obviously unfulfilled wife and admires her and appreciates her. Which will she desire? Sometimes it is time to move on... If she does she can only hope the new one will not become exactly like the first one after marriage. Perhaps he just wanted the fun with none of the reponsibity a marriage requires. It happens all the time. Make sure the love is reallllllll...James ATTENTION...I don't know why I feel the need to come back and defend my thoughts...I am not trying to rewrite or imply the meaning or gender of this poem. Only expressing my feelings that were inspired when I read this poem...The poem stands upon it merits and my response does not reflect the thoughts of the poet...only me...Thank you very much...James [This message has been edited by jmlee12345 (edited 08-31-2000).] |
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English Rose Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 211Berkshire, England |
Well, Ali...unfortunately I know your words to be true..... But I have to say that the poem was great! |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
I know I am missing something...but something tells me I should be glad that I am. SO, regardless...I think that your poetry is quite intense and your pen seems to have a magic hand and mind guiding it. This poem is all too true...fantastic writing!!!! Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
I find it interesting how this conversation has unfolded.. I think the poem (an excellent expression of the human condition) and the responses show how readers can inject their own paradigms into a well crafted verse.... here ali makes no mention of gender, and yet some readers assume he means men do the baiting of 'poor innocent women'.... good job cat..! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hello Alicat, I believe this is my first visit to your place. I'm glad I stopped by. You told it like it is, and it's well done. See you again. |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
I will simply say that one should always be honest. If you are unhappy in your marrige or having difficulty with anything you MUST tell them BEFORE you do anything to hurt them I KNOW. I take my own advice here. Honesty, especially about feelings is so very important and the one your with will be less hurt in the end.....if you don't work it out first. Very good subject to write about. Jenn E |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
AliCat~ Quite the well crafted piece. Well said, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
aLLo again AliCat, I really enjoyed this poem you've shared and my compliments to you for the great expression in verse... I must admit that upon reading the posted replies I too had same thoughts as Rebel .. the gender could be male being baited by the female  Your poem has struck many perspectives and in my eyes this is a great achievement. Coco |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
An excellent poem.... I loved the way you kept this unbiased in gender terms... regards, sudhir... |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
I sure hope Sonjes is lucky, because I feel the same way as her, and that means I must be lucky, too! This is a good poem, Ali - filled with some very good insights. As for Rebel's comment about gender... In most societies, it is the man's responsibility to propose, but in reality, it is the woman who chooses the one who will propose. I have no doubts that it takes two to tango... only I'm not sure who is the lead. The recent studies of gender-specific communication skills, whereby women use an incredibly large portion of their brain compared to men, leads me to believe that most men are way out of their league when it comes to communicating their thoughts and desires to women. It's what makes the world go 'round. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Ali wow no words can communicate how this hits home. Very well written, no ifs, no buts this is stunning, almost knocked me off my chair. I wonder is it something in the air, because everywhere I look couples are breaking up! C'est la vie so the saying goes, well some life, but sunshine can't be far away I know. I'll keep looking! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Perfectly written with flair! I will never understand why anyone would commit adultery, it just sickens me, I have always believed in trust and faithfulness within a marriage for, it is a ssacred gift from God. This is One of your best! All should read this piece. Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Thank you all for your wonderful responses, witty insights, and thought-provoking questions. The form was chosen for its 'game' heritage, for some do view such as a game, unfortuned. The content was purposely left neuter and neutral, for both genders do such. I really didn't expect the reception this limerick received, but I thank you all most heartedly for taking the time to read. |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
WOW! Hard hitting and to the point. I admire your writing. |
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~DreamChild~ Senior Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 544in your dreams |
Haha! Very funny Alicat. I did get a laugh outta this one. It was a good write. |
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