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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA 
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Faux Pas So here I sit, beer in hand (I don't drink) Talking friendly to her, the beautiful Roxanne Should fill you in on my latestfaux pas As I think upon it, and wonder, ahhhhh Sighing now, what a night this has been Doubting, hurtful, lying within Volatile, he says I can be Yet, once in love I was with he The waiting and waiting has gotten to me Can't take it anymore, why can't he see? I needed this promise, by him to be kept But again he didn't, and I wasn't to accept His I'm sorrys , You're rights, I'll do it this time As the clock keeps on ticking, and continues to chime Walked in, I did after looking for him As the nighttime approached and the sun became dim Found, he was, at the local with drink Unexpected was I, and could just see him shrink As the moment neared and I gave my speech Not too quietly though, as around him I reached Shook hands with her then, said glad we could meet He's yours if you want him, I'm just here to repeat... To tell him he better, start coming on home If he wants this to end, and he wants now to roam, It's fine with me... she replies "we're just friends" And I said well, tell him that, he's thinking "girfriend" As we chatted a bit, and I acted on edge Well what did they expect, I was not going to hedge Not a weakling am I, but the fight was not there I didn't want him, I don't really care Just wanted his promises he made, to be met As I broke one of mine, that he'll not soon forget Embarassed he was, to the point that he went But Roxanne and I talked, 'til the words were all spent We laughed and expressed, what we both knew inside And we shook hands before she left with her ride. And I stayed and enjoyed sort of, one drink, one more beer As the bartender said you should come often here I apologized, for my outbursts before And he said that's ok, he wasn't worried anymore Decided I was really a sweet person, nice And we got along fine, but Pete paid the price He never came home...wonder where he has been But whatever will happen, this night was my win. *just one more night in my life.. [This message has been edited by MMoonchild (edited 08-29-2000).] |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
{{{{{{{hugs}}}}}}}} - you have a rough road ahead - You're in my prayers amazed you could write this with such polish |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
A good presentation of a story in a fine poetic Form. Gloom |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh Good For You!!!! Wonderful storytelling here, and glad you embarrased the bum.. catalinamoon |
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susanbartee Member
since 2000-08-15
Posts 119Channelview, TX USA |
Oh, MMoonchild, you've touched my heart again. I know this must have been very hard to write after such a long marriage has broken apart. My thoughts and prayers are with you. |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Yeats venting dear Wil..that's what I am doing ~~sighhhhhing M |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
venting is all-ways and always good Moon...these folks are some mighty fine people to vent with too...huggsz for you and your situation kid.. something you might want to consider as well... as you vent... you have such pure, honest, emotion here -- if you focus a tad on what is universal in what you're feeling to the general human experience/condition you could give great voice to the reader! when that happens it's more than venting -- it's literature and you can do it!  |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Gloom thank you ..yes a whale of a tale it was...maybe that was a wail of a tale...hmmm glad to see you Professor ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Moon....well I am not so sure I embarassed him..and I didn't go there with that idea..I went to try and reach him some how so we could talk and decide some things that he assumed I would take care of as usual..on my own..but I am refusing to be his mother anymore ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
susan thank you... local rebel..I was tempted to work on this in the third person..but the more I think about it I may just let it go for now...some other friends elsewhere think I am angry and being vindictive in my actions and I am thinking a bit on it...wondering what they would have done in the same situation and needed to get the other's attention to move along...I am almost understanding now why when something like this happens the couple chooses new friends...it's because the old take sides instead of supporting...so I won't vent anymore. I know the blame never lies on one side..but I also believe truth is important in a marriage...no matter how many years...and that friendship is unconditional last of the vents "a little lost today" M |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Maureen, you are so good, this is a marvellous poem, great for getting you through. Take care of yourself always, you are a unique and very gifted poet, You have my upmost admiration, not just for your talent but because you are dealing with this very tricky situation, a whole lot better than I ever did. You are in my thoughts, soft smiles, lots of warm hugs and, remember the only way is up! |
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