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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
Hopeless A thousand words all left behind With questions lasting in my mind And same dreams invade a heart Though motionless still havoc rules So hopeless still hoping for true Under one sky still so far away The past unwinds itself today Someone’s fault someone’s to face Now meaningless still so much pain Hopeless...there's hope to gain When tomorrow comes you’ll wonder You threw away a hope, a try Then close your eyes and you may see The very picture you gave me So hopeless even...hope could die If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sometimes it seems that no matter what we have to offer and are willing to do....it is just never enough. Wonderful read and very well formatted with tremendous flow. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
AVANTI.... This was wonderful, and powerful!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"A thousand words all left behind With questions lasting in my mind" Avanti, what a sad, poetic commentary, this. Lovely writing, to be sure. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
How do I keep missing these good poems?  I too enjoyed your flow in this poem, AVANTI...well-written. Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
Thankyou mark... It makes to happy that you noticed the formatting...  Thank you sunny1..> i was looking for powerful Thanx claire...for reading me I love your signature! And sonjes... I'm on cloud #9 with that remark If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Extremely powerful line... "So hopeless even...hope could die" Enjoyed this!! -jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
This is a very well written poem, such depth, such insight! Truly awesome, what can I say but bravo! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
AVANTI, I can well relate but please don't lose hope as your signature says "but what if just this one I rise?" well written piece "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thanx brian...and no! I have not lost hope ai've kept my signature in mind glad to enjoyed it ladysixstring thanx marsha...you are very kind. see you'll around If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
"Hopeless" A feeling all of us have dipped into...that makes the power and the raw ache in this piece even more powerful...to reach out to many and touch them with understanding...this is a great piece~ Bravo! [This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 09-01-2000).] |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
AVANTI, Wow.. so powerful and moving. "...So hopeless even...hope could die.." This line is amazing Well done.rp25 |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
Thanks B_d_c and rp25 for reading me I appreaciate your kind words... I am If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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Diane Yvonne Junior Member
since 2000-08-22
Posts 36Camdenton,Mo. USA |
Avanti, This is showing deep feelings, Which I can relate to so very well. you have 2 lines that really hit home for me. A thousand words left behind with questions lasting in my mind. Close your eyes, you may see, the very picture you gave me. So hopeless even hope could die. Wonderful Writing. Love and Light Diane |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
hi Avanti, I sneak thru here to take a peek at this one that seemed to slip me by... I must compliment you on the expression contained in your poem and the flow of rhyme... Clawed at my heart... Great read N thank you for sharing Coco |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Wow! What a line... "so hopeless even hope can...die" So powerful and great! But you know hope is the last to die... |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thanx all of you for reading... it means a lot If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"So hopeless even...hope could die" What an exquisite ending line to this wonderful poem Avanti! Powerful writing here, well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thanx for reading me kit If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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