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Of Doubt and Love (a sestina I think, but don't hold me to it!!)
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Of Doubt and Love (a sestina I think, but don't hold me to it!!) |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap 
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When days unbidden come -- when nights are long And passionless as dust – when hopeful song Falls flat upon an ear inclined to doubt, It simpler seems, perhaps, to stay without The reach of fickle Fate. The lessons of Deceit are harshly learned when styled as love; What faerie-spell is this, this demon Love? What wicked sprite hath willed that I should long For what can only wound? What creature of The Tempter's cruel design hath shaped this song That haunts me from within and from without? What ill bewitches me, that I should doubt The knowing of mine own desire -- to doubt That all I know of pain was gained by "love' -- Such favor, I can manage well without! Who dares to touch what I have hidden long In darkened soul? Who challenges my song – Who dares to question the assurance of A precept hard and dearly won? If, of Pretense, I'd suffered none – if this, and doubt Were simply words in some sad stranger's song – Perhaps I might be tempted now by love. But I am scarred – the heart remembers long – And marks this "prize" as better found without. Yet still, this yearning gentle calls, without The venom that I once accused it of; Its manner delicate, its patience long, It soothes with surety the wounds of doubt, And meets my hesitance with words of love. Its voice alluring, sweet; although this song Is better sung by two. The very song Whose spell I'd vowed to ever be without Has charmed me all the same, it seems; for love Is only strong as what it's fashioned of – And ours was built on faith, dismissing doubt – No lesser frame should hope to stand so long! Now countless blessed, who long hath lain without, The selfsame song shall have the telling of Who ventured here in Doubt, and stayed in Love. |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
NO one dares to challenge you my queen.  Great work as usual. I am running out of words to thank you for sharing this beautiful talent that you have. Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"But I am scarred – the heart remembers long – And marks this "prize" as better found without." Kess, your masterful command of our language and what seems like an internal and effortless sense of rhythm shine in this piece, my friend. Just beautiful, and what a lovely message. I hope to know it someday. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautifully done, Kess! Absolutely beautiful! Denise |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I will take you at your word that this is a sestina. . . and a superb one at that. . . again, as always, I am amazed at your command of the language and your ability to effortlessly paint such vivid and bright pictures. . . Superb. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
YYYYYESSSSSS !!!!! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Kess, you are without a doubt one of the finest writers, I've ever read. Parker |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Excellent and quite Shakespearean, too! That old question of love that haunts us all! Corinne |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
You know I really don't like you... right? You know that. Maggynificently crafted...and I really hate that you can so effortlessly make it rhyme to boot.  Grrr |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
God, this was beautiful. I am sitting here in amazement at the pure lovliness and passion within this poem. And the format, technique, what ever we call it, well that was just stunning! Thanks catalinamoon |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
You make a very difficult form seem effortless It's smooth all the way through and if you hadn't meantioned sestina, I probably wouldn't have noticed the repetition of words. In other words ---WHAT NAN SAID!!! Liz |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Well. I see the word "effortless" coming up alot in the replies here, and I would have to add my two cents in as well - only I see you making love, over doubt, a seemingly effortless endeavor. It's funny to look at where we were three months ago and where we are today... this poem says it all - and does so beautifully. I love you babe - thank you for being ALL I ever dreamed of and so much more... Michael |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
All I can say is "WOW!" Beautifully written and a gift to us all. Thanks. . . fh |
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