Open Poetry #9 |
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Liberation of a mechanical man |
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Eddie de Jong Junior Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 27 |
I am a man Of flesh and blood That’s how I once was made; And deep within a living heart With feelings oh so pure. But through the years With fear and pain The shields rose one by one; Until one day there was no doubt The armour could endure. I clinked along I made the moves I seemed a happy chap; But no one saw there was no life That truly could be seen. I .. clinked .. along .. I .. made .. the .. moves .. And .. then .. you .. came .. along; You saw a living creature there Inside this strange machine. You took one look And realized The pow’r that lay inside; You guided me and showed me how To throw the bonds aside. I am a living creature now With all that that entails, I laugh I cry I feel such joy I show it with no shame, Through dance and song Through mirth and tears I will express my thoughts, I might have been but am no more A mere mechanical man! [This message has been edited by Eddie de Jong (edited 08-27-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Beautiful story...always nice to be liberated...James |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Excellent write here ![]() [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 08-27-2000).] |
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Eddie de Jong Junior Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 27 |
Thanks for the empathy guys - I suspect there are a lot of mechanical men out there. |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS ![]() my what a nice concept you have here and nicely written too ![]() "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- rlt |
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Eddie de Jong Junior Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 27 |
JnR4eva - Thanks for the welcome. Hope to publish more in due course ... |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Ahhhhhh I think mechanical men are ok under certain circumstances...but give me sensitivity anyday..and you will win my heart... ~~soft smiles Eddie Maureen |
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Eddie de Jong Junior Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 27 |
Maureen, Can't imagine what those circumstances could be .... e |
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