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Candle, Candle
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Candle, Candle |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Candle, Candle Candle, candle, burning slow In haunting memories you glow In yellow flame a name I know Reveals itself as waxes flow Within the candle’s mellow light A sorrow flickers in the night Within the wick a cursed plight From long ago remains in sight Every candle weeps a tear From off the crystal chandelier Remembrance of a love so dear Is crystallized from year to year It was in candle’s glowing grace That passion lit a lover’s face And made a halo to embrace The two in dimly lighted space But now from crystal teardrops flask The prism silences still cast From out of sorrow’s fated past The truth of love that faded fast In every wick a flickering lie Deceit was wicked truth denied And every flame that slowly dies Still makes me stare with misty eyes In measured time the candles fade But while they burn, still dreams are made A single flame more mystifies Than all the stars in heavens skies Elizabeth Santos |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
In every wick a flickering lie Deceit was wicked truth denied And every flame that slowly dies Still makes me stare with misty eyes In measured time the candles fade But while they burn, still dreams are made A single flame more mystifies Than all the stars in heavens skies ----------- I don't know what inspired you to write this, but I would like to grab that piece of inspiration myself... well done yet again, Liz... I have already run out of superlatives to use... to tell you how good your poems are... regards, sudhir |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, I agree with sudhir, this is lovely, Love Sy |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Elizabeth this is magic. I viewed it through misty eyes. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is a wonderful magical work Elizabeth. I love the references to love and the candle burning. It's so true too... that single fame seems to put you in a trance where you can envision so many things......excellent !! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
my my my LIz....you find the most beautiful visions in your life and share them with us so well. I absolutely love this one. The references the flow the four line rhyme mixed to the end........just a sheer delight. Thank you much for sharing with us once again your amazing talent and depth. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Elizabeth...  Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Liz.. hmmm... More and more of the mystery of you comes to the fore - and beautifully at that. I'm still waiting for a poorly written poem from you *tapping my foot impatiently*. I like the theme of the candle you held throughout so well. |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
i will agree with sudhir on this one.. In measured time the candles fade But while they burn, still dreams are made A single flame more mystifies Than all the stars in heavens skies wow this is some great inspirational writing..after your telling of a candle's history...this stanza is just precious..great job  "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--You have touched my heart with this poem, for some reason the flicker of the candle in your words makes me want to weep...I'll have to figure out why...beautiful writing, my friend! [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 08-25-2000).] |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Ditto Sudhir, my friend...he said it as well as I ever could. jwesley |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Liz, This is so beautiful. I had to go back and reread this several times. This stanza is so elegant. ---------------- Every candle weeps a tear From off the crystal chandelier Remembrance of a love so dear Is crystallized from year to year --------------- I believe Sudhir said it all. |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! This is magnificent, Elizabeth! Absolutely magnificent!! Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth~ This beautiful poem ranks right up there with 'Same Time, Next Life' in my romantic little heart. You are so beautiful ! Kisses for Tony from me ! Love you, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Liz, you shine, my friend. Beauty in word. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sudhir, Sometimes inspiration comes from experience Sy, Thank you, my dear friend Kethry, Your words are warming ethome, Thank you, candles can evoke all kinds of emotions Mark, Your words are very touching. Thank you so much Sunshine, You bring a candle to loght my day. Thanks, dear LngJhn, I have a whole bunch of poorly written poems on my hard drive under "other", but fortunately you will nevr see them. Thanks for the comments JNR4eva, Glad you liked the poem. Thank you Martie, You touch my heart, too, with your comments Jwesley, Thank you for the "ditto". Eloise, Thank you for reading and commenting. I appreciate it Denise, Thank you for the "magnificent" Marge, Thank you for the comments and for the kisses Claire, Thank you, dear heart Liz |
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