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Sir Sven's challenge: To weave the fabric of romance
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Sir Sven's challenge: To weave the fabric of romance |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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She strives to weave the fabric of romance "Talk about life, Yes let's talk about it." "Ah, but don't you see There is so much struggle In this four letter word Spelled L I F E Don't you see? Oh no, my dear Let's talk about love instead Let's talk about you and me And what in a year we will be Let's talk about our love, my dear". "But, my dear Is our love not a part of our life too? Are we not puppets in this play of love? Don't you think Shakespeare's sitting up there holding the ends of these threads, clipped to our wings, making us act this very moment as we sit here and speak? Don't you, my love?" "All right then, my love Let me tell you about love then And life in the same breath too. See there under the tender green leaf Of the white mulberry tree Can you see the worm underneath?" "Ah! The bald white silkworm. Is that what you want me to see? Is there something I don't know? Is she a flame of your former life? Oh! I am all in fear, my love, Please hold me closer to your heart". "Be still, my love, O honey of my life Don't you fear my dear! This has nothing to do with my love Or our lives, but with the story Of the caterpillar turning Into a beautiful winged butterfly. This is about the struggle of the kind hearted butterfly, who, even in her infancy, makes threads for us humans to weave the fabric of romance a fabric called silk." Silk, the lustre of the East, Silk, the gift from heritage, Silk, the saree of the bride, Silk, the skin of my beloved, Silk, the sheet on the river, Silk, the smoothness defined. It is this that the silk worm works at in it's formative years spinning a dark cocoon around itself without a care or thought, for her own self in the world , all the time feeding on tit-bits of the mulberry leaves. "This is where our love and our lives will blend, Beneath the silken canopy of the boundless sky. My love, tell me did you Like the story of the caterpillar, the silkworm, who strives, throughout her short life, just for us humans to weave the fabric of romance, and then later she comes back as a lovely butterfly to see our joy." ~ did you? ... Sir Sven, how did I do? |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
heh heh heh...I don't care what Sir Sven says...you've just woven a masterpiece, my friend... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Oh Karilea, your words have gladdened me much... but I do hope Sven likes it... masterpiece or not, is just a matter of opinion, to me I just hope it is good enough... Thanks for everything, Many regards, sudhir |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sudhir, A weave of wonder. Be well Keth "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sudhir~ Sven will love it ! He's a romantic TOO !  I did enjoy it very much. And I just LOVE mulberries ! ! And silk ! And butterflies ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sudhir, superb my friend. . . you indeed have woven the fabric quite well. . . this flowed wonderfully. . . and was not only a pleasure to read, but a pleasure to look at with such wonderful colors!!! Excellent!! ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ah, then this poem did come out well... hit me for doubting myself... I just read my poem again and felt swell, asking myself, did I do that... WOW and then I read each of your responses taking all the time in the world... really got to hand it to you for making my day... Karilea, let me thank you once more... Kethry, Thank you too! Marge, what can I say, I love your responses and poems... and the smiles that I get Sven, so glad that I could come up with something... colours, I wanted to use them to distinguish the speakers first... and then added them to the thoughts in the "free-verse block format" to make them stand out too... even If I say myself, I think not too bad... and when I read your response I feel I have been successful in doing my best... Thank you for the challenge... regards to all, sudhir  |
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