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Ante up!!----Local Rebels challenge
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Ante up!!----Local Rebels challenge |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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you gotta read close..LOL....hope it makes sense.  Ante up The touch... one of anxieties and fears... as we laid bets upon the table of love all of our beckoning desires. Sweet caressing of lips entwined as eyes were met in gambling grace. We pulled closer .....we embraced.....we dealt. Cards of love and lust and ante's of hearts resting on the pits of passionate yearning from the depths of our souls. An ace of hearts and one of clubs in hand of one being first bet of the night. Discarding anxieties of spades and searching for the purity of diamonds in tenders of two with two of hearts kept in folded bluff. Drawn hands shown to not as bets were placed within the casinos of love. Lights of neon dancing on beads of sweet sweat as the dealt kiss was given over to one of chance. Roulette wheels of swirls in breath were seeking tables of reddened breasts. Pouted forth in addictive desire.....with chips of longing spinning within the simple round and rounds of dancing kisses. Kiss of fate upon open red was placed. Winner!!!!!........place your next bet!! Winnings taken and set for the pits as two hearts of desire now burning in gaze. Plumments and draws hurling round and down.....golden glistening of eyes in lust now rolling the dice of dance. Shakes with kisses of love tossed into winds of velvet greens. A blow of fortune coming our way. Dice up for grabs in spinning twirls of passion as anticipation awaits the long fall on pairs. A three and a four is not needed here as the one and one of snake eyes will do. Bets placed on lucky number two and with a pair of red cubes all fears are lost. House is tossed one more winning loss and on to the slots we are sent. Bandits of burnings with a single arm of force are spinning in eyes of impacted love. One coin at first on a single line with two then three ...all lines now filled. A cherry on one and now on two....hearts not breathing but gasping in ladies lust. Three now settled and all are the same as gushes of winnings in rushes of gain come spewing forth into pockets of love's fame. Time to rejoice in just one brief moment as chips are cashed into dreams of gold. One more dollar and a single slot.......mmmmmmm.....what is one more time gonna hurt? Ante up!!!!! Mark Bohannan [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 08-23-2000).] |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
You did a great job!! and then some... "golden glistening of eyes in lust now rolling the dice of dance" -jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Damn! this is a piece of work... it's HOT!!! love this line, "Bandits of burnings with a single arm of force" nicely done... great way to meet a challenge.. lemme tell ya'... after reading this, i'd say all bets are off! the two of you WIN! in aces! ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a good apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Hmmm...this is good...just sizing up the 'ante up' competition before I play my cards!  |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
and all of this from the man who does koos koos... lol... wow!!! never expected all that... Goddess??? do we have to move this challenge to Adult? It's getting warm in here..!! |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I can deal...with this poem very nicely!! I shall now shuffle off to read it again!!! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MarkB~ Gambler that I am .... I'm betting on this round ! ! 'Shakes with kisses of love tossed into winds of velvet greens. A blow of fortune coming our way.' Mmmmmmmm ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
ladysixstring-thank you so much and I am glad you could pick a line you liked. doreen-when this cowboy plays the gambits he plays to win. Thank you so much. PdV-we will be waitin with open pockets. Thank you much. local rebel-never call out a cowboy til ya know what he's got.LOLOL.....thanks for the challenge me friend....dont forget .... I always have an ace up my sleeve. Balladeer-thank you much for the second read...sure you can handle it? Marge- leave it to you to find the kiss in the pit(s).....thanks hon and I'll take that bet and RAISE you one. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wow! Mark you really pulled an ace out of your sleeve, hit the jackpot and hit twenty one with this poem. Great work. Kethry. "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Discarding anxieties of spades and searching for the purity of diamonds in tender of two with two of hearts kept in folded bluff. Drawn hands shown to not as bet were placed within the casinos of love. Hmmmm...My money is on you sir but ummm don't forget, while you gentleman may always have an ace up your sleeve, we have one somewhere else, lol. This is sizzling and this belle as she peeks over her newly dealt hand, must say she's quiet impressed. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I've oft thought of gambling as yet another vice, but you go and place me here, it's rather really nice, to think that in a diamond, I might find a King of Hearts, hey wait! on that Roulette table, that's NOT the place to start! hummm, back for another read, I do think I've misunderstood your real meaning! Good stuff here! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mark* I think this Challenge was made for you.....problem was I couldn't keep my mind on the game......or was that the idea  Now I can plainly see why Gambling can be an addiction |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
very hot, enjoyed this much...love the way your interwove the game and the ummmm errr game |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Oh lordy - I know nothing of gambling, but I tell you what, reading this makes me want to learn, like FAST! ROFL and fanning myself with my cards! LOL This was a fine work, and I must say, you met the challenge with a bang sir!! This was awesome! Uh...someone want to teach me how to play poker now? LOL |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
 Mark Now this one is really hot. You straight flushed us out with this winning winning hand-d work. I fold. Garfield |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Mark, very well written... But to me this and all such forms of writings where long lines are told in continuous paragraph like lines are prosetic... but then I am a writer and a reader... and I loved each word of this piece of work ... prose or poetry, who cares?  regards, sudhir |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I can just see you kicked back at the table cowboy...hehehe |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
I think you won the lady's heart fair and square, even if you did use a silver dollar.. HUGS |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Hey...nicely done my friend...nothing hard to read at all... jwesley |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Kethry-NO she is a little older than that but just the same a jackpot for sure. Thanks so much....21 would never do for me. juls-for me to impress the Queen of Hearts is a compliment indeed. Karilea-you just gotta read real slow and real close. A drink or two might help.LOL Holly-now are you trying to tell me you are getting addicted to me or my work?  ...thanks hon' it is always such a pleasure to have you around.....and yes that was the intent. Corazon-thank you so much and the game is only a game when it is no longer a game.  poetFemmeFatale-sure dudette have a sit down and ante up....no not that....those right there will do to start. . Thanks so much for dropping by.Garfield- there is always the next hand ...you never know my friend. Thank you much. Sudhir-thank you much and your dedication to my works has inspired many times. and to that I say thanks once again. Paula-kicking back and puffing that cigar......and no it isnt the same brand as the presidents.....whats his/her name? RainbowGirl-A silver dollar is better spent than to toss it to the well and wish on chance. Thank you much. jwesley-glad you saw all that was there. Thanks my friend. |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Woahh, Splendidly done, deal me in, only me thinks I may need a cold shower first. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark--I'll place my bet on love...it's a sure thing! Very descriptive word picture you played here...well done! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I learning everything you say makes sense... be it poetry, prose, or simply saying my name. beautiful imagery and emotions Mark, as always..kissed with your sincerity and sensuality. both of which are your gifts... me There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Gemini-join in....wait til the heat passes before you jump in that cold shower....why waste water if you are coming back to play. thank you much. Martie-love is always a safe bet if it is played in the right game. Problem is....there are no guarantees in love or game....that's why we are addicted to it.....chance...thank you kindly dear friend JM-my gifts to you as you call them are simply the gifts of our true friendship that we both have worked on. You know you are special to me and you know my heart. Thank you so much my sweetness....hugs [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 08-24-2000).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Mark this is a wealth of beautifully crafted metaphors........very well done! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
ethome-I am so glad you liked it and even better that you were able to follow it. Thank you my friend. |
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