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Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

0 posted 2000-08-23 10:25 AM

My own little game of strip poker...strip your heart and bare it all...  

Twelve chances, she said
she was ready to give me,
to guess the card, she held
any colour, just the number.
The trophy would be huge
She would bare her heart
And loss to do so would hand
me to accede to her every demand.

My selfish heart wanted
to win on more than count,
oce with the card guess
and even more with her heart.
I wanted to hear her say
that she loved me a lot
anything else would
destroy me - tear me apart.

Such was my predicament
when I accepted the bait
to tell the number of the card
she held close to her chest.

And I said it was an eight
she smiled and said,
one down and eleven to go!
A two then! No, she said.
A three! Again negative.
An Ace it must be then,
for it satisfies human ego.
Again it was a big no!

Four down, eight more to go.

Can't be that bad, I mused
I still had quite a chance
one out of eight should be
a piece of cake! Right?

Okay it's a Jack, the ass
that I am making of myself.
No, wrong again, my dear,
she said as if dropping a hint
Well, feeling close enough
it must be a ten. No, again.
A five, a six, a four,
none of them did score.

A seven, then it could be
the number of days in a week-
my chances were getting bleak!
Nine it must be, for you're a woman
the months of pain you endure
to a child all your love to shower.
No, close but not enough she said
But I like the way you think.

Well, now I was doomed
for the chances were bad
just one try out of two,
what was I to do?

A Queen or a King -
a choice to be made.
What did she hold?
I had to pick one
and be rather bold
Manly that I was,
I sided with the King,
with prayers wandering.

Wrong for the last time, she said,
but she hugged me all the same.
It was Queen of hearts she held,
Rather than King of spades and fame.
I was glad that I had lost
yet sad that I hadn't won
It was incomprehensible still
As the West saw setting of the sun

A kiss followed the hug
and another followed soon.
The embrace soon turned
into a dance in moon light.
Card game long forgotten
As we danced into the night -
Arm in arm, cheek to cheek,
Matching each step in harmony.

Then she said the words -
I love you my dear, always have.
The game was just a tease
You played, I am so pleased

And you lost the game
so now ante up, my dear -
Carry me in your arms
and promise to love me
as long as the sun rises
in the East and sets in the West.
That I'd lost, I felt least sorry
For my loss was indeed a victory.

The ante was divine!
The ante was the trophy!
The ante was love!
The ante was priceless!

The ante was a non-ante!


© Copyright 2000 Sudhir Iyer - All Rights Reserved
Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
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1 posted 2000-08-23 10:28 AM

Yes thats how love should be...
Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
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North Carolina
2 posted 2000-08-23 10:33 AM

Wow Sudhir this is wonderful. Lucky lady she is.

since 2000-07-27
Posts 374

3 posted 2000-08-23 10:35 AM

This was sweet, romantic and very clever.  Enjoyed!!



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Posts 2646
4 posted 2000-08-23 10:45 AM

HELP!  I know nothing of poker and gambling so it's hard for me to comment really on these poems of challenge!  (blushing!)  I liked all the teasing and the way she "played" you though!  Made for a kind of sexy card game!  And of course the title caught my eye!!!  ROFL  
Local Rebel
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since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia
5 posted 2000-08-23 10:47 AM

the Anti Ante???


well done Sudhir... you have some clever word plays here...

since 2000-08-17
Posts 433
Nahunta Georgia U.S.
6 posted 2000-08-23 10:59 AM

Strip Poker
  Catchy title.  Made me picture something else until I read this masterpiece.  Still ended up playing strip poker though (LOL).
This was just great. Can't say enough about it.


Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
7 posted 2000-08-23 11:03 AM

Sounds like the ante was fine!  Good stuff Sudhir!
Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023
United Kingdom
8 posted 2000-08-23 11:15 AM

Another challenge well met...I'm enjoying these..


Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
9 posted 2000-08-23 12:02 PM

The challenge was well and romanticly met, my friend...


Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
10 posted 2000-08-23 01:24 PM

It was fun, was it not...
congrats to local rebel to hosting a well received challenge... and thanks for the opportunity...

Thanks to all of you who replied and to all who read.... The game was worth to be played even if it was all fiction...  

regards to all,

Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
11 posted 2000-08-23 05:31 PM

Can we up the ante and play for love as you did.
Great game, you won through both. I liked the title also, it drew me in.


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
12 posted 2000-08-24 02:27 AM

aaahhhhhh  the romantic side of my good friend....well done sir.  A lucky lady for sure.  
Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
13 posted 2000-08-24 05:09 AM

Of course we can Kethry... say when...  
Thanks a lot for the praise.. I must admit the title is catchy...  

Mark, as ever I am thankful that you could visit this piece...


linda munday
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315
Adelaide, Australia
14 posted 2000-08-24 05:18 AM


Tantalising poem, with a title that grabs, and then reveals a soft, subtle love, that would be the envy of many.

Beautifully penned... and thanks for your comment re: Upon the Wind on Wings  

Your a delightful romantic, with a great talent to captivate and enthrall.

Love your work,
Linda M.

Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
15 posted 2000-08-24 07:09 AM

Wonderful story Sudhir! I pictured you there, contemplating your choices throughout ... pondering each choice with precision. How wonderful the prize of love is ... regardless of the game! Well done!  

Best wishes,

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
16 posted 2000-08-24 09:32 AM

Linda, thanks you ever so for reading and responding... to this rather lengthy one... I am glad that your enjoyed the read....

Kit, I can easily picturise you as a studious reader, in true appreciation of poetry... to read between lines and from the lines too... So proud to have you read my poem... Thanks

regards to all,

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