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Local Rebel challenge... Strip Poker or poker strip? a non ANTE!
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Local Rebel challenge... Strip Poker or poker strip? a non ANTE! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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My own little game of strip poker...strip your heart and bare it all...  Twelve chances, she said she was ready to give me, to guess the card, she held any colour, just the number. The trophy would be huge She would bare her heart And loss to do so would hand me to accede to her every demand. My selfish heart wanted to win on more than count, oce with the card guess and even more with her heart. I wanted to hear her say that she loved me a lot anything else would destroy me - tear me apart. Such was my predicament when I accepted the bait to tell the number of the card she held close to her chest. And I said it was an eight she smiled and said, one down and eleven to go! A two then! No, she said. A three! Again negative. An Ace it must be then, for it satisfies human ego. Again it was a big no! Four down, eight more to go. Can't be that bad, I mused I still had quite a chance one out of eight should be a piece of cake! Right? Okay it's a Jack, the ass that I am making of myself. No, wrong again, my dear, she said as if dropping a hint Well, feeling close enough it must be a ten. No, again. A five, a six, a four, none of them did score. A seven, then it could be the number of days in a week- my chances were getting bleak! Nine it must be, for you're a woman the months of pain you endure to a child all your love to shower. No, close but not enough she said But I like the way you think. Well, now I was doomed for the chances were bad just one try out of two, what was I to do? A Queen or a King - a choice to be made. What did she hold? I had to pick one and be rather bold Manly that I was, I sided with the King, with prayers wandering. Wrong for the last time, she said, but she hugged me all the same. It was Queen of hearts she held, Rather than King of spades and fame. I was glad that I had lost yet sad that I hadn't won It was incomprehensible still As the West saw setting of the sun A kiss followed the hug and another followed soon. The embrace soon turned into a dance in moon light. Card game long forgotten As we danced into the night - Arm in arm, cheek to cheek, Matching each step in harmony. Then she said the words - I love you my dear, always have. The game was just a tease You played, I am so pleased And you lost the game so now ante up, my dear - Carry me in your arms and promise to love me as long as the sun rises in the East and sets in the West. That I'd lost, I felt least sorry For my loss was indeed a victory. The ante was divine! The ante was the trophy! The ante was love! The ante was priceless! The ante was a non-ante! ~ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Yes thats how love should be... |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Wow Sudhir this is wonderful. Lucky lady she is. Juls |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
This was sweet, romantic and very clever. Enjoyed!! -jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
HELP! I know nothing of poker and gambling so it's hard for me to comment really on these poems of challenge! (blushing!) I liked all the teasing and the way she "played" you though! Made for a kind of sexy card game! And of course the title caught my eye!!! ROFL |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
the Anti Ante??? lol well done Sudhir... you have some clever word plays here... |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Strip Poker Catchy title. Made me picture something else until I read this masterpiece. Still ended up playing strip poker though (LOL). This was just great. Can't say enough about it. Garfield |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sounds like the ante was fine! Good stuff Sudhir! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Another challenge well met...I'm enjoying these..  HUGS |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
The challenge was well and romanticly met, my friend... jwesley |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
It was fun, was it not... congrats to local rebel to hosting a well received challenge... and thanks for the opportunity... Thanks to all of you who replied and to all who read.... The game was worth to be played even if it was all fiction...  regards to all, sudhir |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Can we up the ante and play for love as you did. Great game, you won through both. I liked the title also, it drew me in. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
aaahhhhhh the romantic side of my good friend....well done sir. A lucky lady for sure. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Of course we can Kethry... say when...  Thanks a lot for the praise.. I must admit the title is catchy... Mark, as ever I am thankful that you could visit this piece... regards, sudhir |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
Sudhir, Tantalising poem, with a title that grabs, and then reveals a soft, subtle love, that would be the envy of many. Beautifully penned... and thanks for your comment re: Upon the Wind on Wings Your a delightful romantic, with a great talent to captivate and enthrall. Love your work, Linda M. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful story Sudhir! I pictured you there, contemplating your choices throughout ... pondering each choice with precision. How wonderful the prize of love is ... regardless of the game! Well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Linda, thanks you ever so for reading and responding... to this rather lengthy one... I am glad that your enjoyed the read.... Kit, I can easily picturise you as a studious reader, in true appreciation of poetry... to read between lines and from the lines too... So proud to have you read my poem... Thanks regards to all, sudhir |
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