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Her Bath |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Her BathShe fills her evenings sparingly late moments by the fire with words and broadcast symphonies not much does she require But nights when rolling storms begin and sleep will not arrive She draws a fragrant, steaming bath, her senses to revive And dreaming thus while still awake she thinks on other times As water whirls about her form sad thoughts steep in her mind She ponders on the verse of one whose gentle words beseech "A heart that will not open is so difficult to reach" And yes, she thinks, while bubbles brew into a warming foam What cause have I to contemplate a life to live alone? With years ahead, and few behind I am not growing old And time I spend within myself without a heart to hold Is leaving such a lingering in thought and memory What shall my forward nights become if trust cannot be free? Her bath begins in earnest then with long and soaking sighs And as the storm begins to wane and calm creeps to her eyes Her toweling finds a drowsy form but cleansed is she of doubt And as her softness slips into the gown that she'd set out Her thoughts are those of weary hope and storm's refreshing peace And hearts that freely find their way ... as sleep bids her release |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Beautiful The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
I've always been a shower person... but this if beautiful!!! -jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Absolutely beautiful, Claire! Denise |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
This is so lovely. Makes me long for a nice relaxing bath too. Juls |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Oh Claire......you've hit it again!! This is outstanding!!! |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Such soft beauty....magnificent Claire!  *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Claire, In my opinion, this is truly one of your most beautiful poems. I love it through and through. And you know what? I'm glad we're such close friends Be sweet! Michael |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Very sweet read. I dont go in for the baths myself....but you got me thinkin. Beautiful piece for sure. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
"A heart that will not open is so difficult to reach" .. .. Her bath begins in earnest then with long and soaking sighs And as the storm begins to wane and calm creeps to her eyes Her toweling finds a drowsy form but cleansed is she of doubt And as her softness slips into the gown that she'd set out Her thoughts are those of weary hope and storm's refreshing peace And hearts that freely find their way ... as sleep bids her release ..... What a brilliant piece of work this is Claire, not that I expected any less from you... still this one is full of well-crafted, beautifully penned images and wisdom... regards, sudhir |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
i agree with all the above! such a beautiful, calming poem....very much enjoyed! ~Dawn |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Helmut, thank you... L and SP, dear one. ladysixstring, thank you for reading. Try a bath every now and again, with lots of time for thought. Denise, as always, your words bring a smile...thank you! Juliet, for your "lovely" response, I thank you. I do some of my best thinking submerged. Krista, thank you, dear. I think I saw a new poem of yours yesterday that I haven't gotten to read yet...going to look for it next. Michael, I thank you for your friendly words, but you can forget it ~ I'm not sharing my bath with you. (((you)))Mark, "thinking" is a good thing, yes? Many thanks for your thoughtful remarks. Sudhir, your response is so kind, and I thank you, in earnest, for reading and taking time to let me know that you enjoyed this. poutprincess, I appreciate your thoughts about this piece...thank you! ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Claire, this was a lovely and beautiful piece, it too is one of my fav's from you. Also I like to thank you for sharing your bath with me, I really enjoyed it....  Parker |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Silky softness...Claire do you need someone to scrub your back...gently...James |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Claire, I really enjoyed this. Maybe I'll spend a bit more time soaking. Does it help with the creative flow too? Dee |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire--Your words always give me such warm pleasure, it is almost like a bath...thanks for such poet-ease. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Is there room in the bath for two..LOL..sorry the poem just made it sound so inviting. Claire, sigh, a truely beautiful poem. "Beyond all this good is the terror,The grip of a mercenary hand,When savagery turns all good reason, There's no turning back, no last stand,"I.Curtis |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Wow Claire, I will have to rethink the whole bath versus shower thing all over again!! Robert if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Sensual and with a strong message that it is ok to be alone - we don't have to have someone in our lives to validate us! A great message! Corinne |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Parker, lovely and beautiful?? Wow!! Thank you, my poet friend. (oh, and Parker, I enjoyed it too...) James, thank you. Gently is the only way...yes. Dee, thanks much for reading. To my way of thinking, a warm bath by candlelight helps with every kind of flow, and most definitely creativity. Martie, pleasure, to me, is reading "your" poetry. Thank you for such a generous comment. Brian, actually, yes, there is room. It's an antique Victorian tub that I found at a local architectural salvage shop. I'll move over. (oh I nearly forgot...thanks for reading....whew!) Robert, showers are relaxing...but there's just something so quiet about a long bath, and you can listen to music and actually hear it. Thanks for reading this piece. Corinne, so perceptive are you...thank you for the nice commentary, my friend. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
MMMMMMMMMM nice!! Nothing so relaxing as a soak in the tub...tho' add to the occasion by using an herbal bath tea (my fave is a Lavendar/Chamomile blend) the scents and oils and such make for a wonderful experience!~H |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Heather, yes, herbal baths are exquisitely sensual and soothing, especially after a long day. (or any other time, come to think of it) Thank you for reading and for your "nice" response. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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English Rose Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 211Berkshire, England |
This is such a beautiful poem......it must be..oh....ten years at least since I have been able to get into a bath...I really want one now!!! Oh well, back to the shower.! |
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American Princess Junior Member
since 2000-08-21
Posts 49USA |
Claire, How warm and wonderful this is! I am a shower person also, but this makes me want to try the bath thing again. But, one question...how do you find enough time uninterrupted to take a long bath??!! Really, just beautiful! American Princess |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
The Men in here, I tell ya, a lady takes a bath and look what happens. LOL I am a Bath queen and this poem relly hit the spot. You capture the feeling perfectly. Don't forget the candles... Jenn E |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
In Britain they have this stuff called Radox (sp?) and it's herbal type bath salts...they had Cinnamon!!! Can you imagine? The water would slowly get warmer and warmer feeling LOL, as you turned into spiced people punch!  ~H |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
welp, I know I'll never look at a bath in the same way again...this is brilliant reading! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ I just kind of figured you for a bath person ! I'm also a long, soaking bath person - the submersion is the best relaxant and inspiration there could be. Lots of candles ... ahhhhhh ! and soft music ... it sure is nice. You've written a lovely verse, my dear poet. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
You know... I've been trying to read this for some time now... the problem is that the thought of you in a bathtub... well.. I haven't been able to concentrate enough to do it yet!  I'll read it soon... I promise. Right after a cold shower!  |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Simply beautiful. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
English Rose, thank you very much for reading this, and for your nice comment. American Princess, sometimes one simply must make the time. As for me, I have very quiet weekends. Thanks for reading...glad you enjoyed. Jenn, Bath Queen...that's cute Thank you for reading, and not to worry about the candles. I always keep plenty about, in my favorite fragrances. Heather, hi...spiced people punch...why do I think of Dr. Seuss just now?? Thanks for reading! shadows, thank you, though I don't know about the "brilliant"...just some mind meanderings. Miss Marge, yes, you figured right, my friend...there are but fewer things more agreeable. Take care ~ Chris ~ the poem, Chris. Just r e a d the p o e m. You are quite evil, you know. BloomingRose, thank you for the "beautiful"... as is your pen name. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Claire, "A heart that will not open is so difficult to reach" This says it all. . . we can only open to others once we have opened to ourself. . . Just wonderful my friend. . . think that I may need to take a bath myself. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Silkdragon Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 65 |
This was astonishing. I love it so much, i have to print it out and put it on my wall. I will read all of your poetry from now on. Beautiful Erin |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
From start of verse you captured my mind N heart as I read thru the poem drawing me nearer to the close I can only say these few words ... Inspiring & Elegant is this poem of your's Coco |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Sven, indeed these words are true, my friend. Thank you ... for everything.... Silkdragon, thank you. I am flattered that you would want to print this for your wall, but very pleased to know it. Take care. Coco, so glad to know you enjoyed it. Thank you for reading and taking time to let me know. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I've added the name "MeadowMuse" to my list of "must read" posters - 'nuff said |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
a muse you are indeed this poem is just beautiful..simply beautiful the poor soul i feel for her pain and desire her heart to be free...wonderfully penned meadowmuse "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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Steve B Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 140Southern PA |
Claire ~ You are a very talented writer, I have enjoyed every one of your's I have read, I visited your site and will get to read many more... I found this one very interesting in it's content, your flowing structure is always present, I am neither old nor young, and no one ever holds the answers, but I have loved and lost love, once is hard, I dont like to count my times... but the one thing I know is that I always yearn and wish I had more fond and loving memories, and that as I now am looking age in the face, I fear doing so alone, something that was never a worry in younger days.. Your poem and words are great and you are right about there should be no price on ones freedom for love or any other reason, maybe thats why I am alone now, I wonder why having both seems so hard to find.. Steve B PS. is this about a bath?? hmmmm [This message has been edited by Steve B (edited 08-26-2000).] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Wilfred, 'nuff said, indeed. Thank you for such smiles tonight!JnR4eva, very kind words from you, and I appreciate them so much. Yes, setting one's heart free to love can be such a struggle. Steve, thank you so much for reading and letting me know you enjoyed this. I'm glad you found your way to my website...you are always welcome there. Steve, I do understand your looking toward the future in a different way now. It is a natural progression, I believe, and quite normal for us to not want to grow into those days alone. There is simply so much to share. Take care, Steve, and ummm, yes, this is about a bath, a bathing, if you will, on many levels. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
I won't take the time to repeat what thirty people before me have already said, though every word is true, but I love this piece. Being the bath person that I am, I can so relate to its soothing, healing power! This is a wonderful piece, both in structure and content. |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Meadowmuse, so gentle and serene are your words. A warm bath is a soothing way for release and relaxation ..chanson~ |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Few poets on this forum command my attention as you do, Claire. This was enjoyable throughout -- exactly the quality of writing I have come to expect from you. Simply beautiful. --Kess YOUR LIFE IS A TEST It is only a test ... If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions! |
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