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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2000-08-22 10:02 PM




Place your bets on this heart
To win place or show
Ante up your last dime
Bet on the dice’s throw

Broken dreams littered round
A heart that cannot win
Gambled on a loving man
Lost in a night of sin

Shuffle the deck carefully
Fold only when you must
Dealt a hand of passion
Settle for a night of lust



[This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 08-22-2000).]

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Local Rebel
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1 posted 2000-08-22 10:10 PM


Shuffle the deck carefully
Fold only when you must
Dealt a hand of passion
Settle for a night of lust

--oh my Goddess... between you and Doreen I think you've just about gotten all the men naked... what's left to take off guys???


doreen peri
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2 posted 2000-08-22 10:17 PM


sharon... this is GREAT!!!  

"Shuffle the deck carefully
Fold only when you must
Dealt a hand of passion
Settle for a night of lust"

you've shuffled the deck and have come up with (hehe) a Royal Flush.... nice job! challenge well met, with PASSION... enjoyed this very much!  

******
I'm laughing here because i had quoted these lines and was ready to push send, finally did... then i see Mr. LR quoted the same lines (didn't see that before).... i guess there's something to be said about the reality of poetry  ... too funny...

[This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 08-22-2000).]

Balladeer
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3 posted 2000-08-22 10:19 PM


I ante'd everything I had
To try to win your heart
But, though I gave it everything,
I guess I came up short!  

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
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4 posted 2000-08-23 08:03 AM


You must be flushed with success at this clever little piece.
Be well
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Poet deVine
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5 posted 2000-08-23 10:08 AM


Thank you all for your kind replies! 'deer I thought short was only a term you used in golf..such as 'short putt'? I never associate short with YOU!  
Corazon
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6 posted 2000-08-23 10:13 AM


great poem challenge well met
juliet_2u
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7 posted 2000-08-23 10:22 AM


Sharon this is great.
Juls

poetFemmeFatale
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8 posted 2000-08-23 10:25 AM


This is the first poem I've read on this particular challenge, and it makes me want to go in now and read them all!  LOL  This was a really short but saucy piece - I liked the ideas and concepts behind it!  Steamy girl, real steamy!  **sizzzle**
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
9 posted 2000-08-23 10:26 AM


Whew...PdV, you're going to have to move them ALL to Adult after awhile...
Paula Finn
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missouri
10 posted 2000-08-23 10:30 AM


I havent even read Rebels challenge but I'm likeing it more and more
Sudhir Iyer
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11 posted 2000-08-23 10:35 AM


Saucy as vienna sausages....  

regards,
sudhir

ggrn3
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12 posted 2000-08-23 11:47 AM


deVine,
  I liked this one.  Thought it was great.  Read Sudhir's poem on this challenge.  I can picture you and Mr. Deer in this one   

Garfield

jwesley
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Spring, Texas
13 posted 2000-08-23 11:50 AM


Whoa - sounds like my kinda game.  Yummy!


jwesley

RainbowGirl
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14 posted 2000-08-23 12:01 PM


Can't think of a better way to end a game than this way...*g*

HUSG

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