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Ixtab Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 105MEXICAlpan de las tunas |
Path down the aisles of one's dark twisting, and straight louminous soul. often marked and formed by other's words like hands sculping through the ether of our being. Once learned the secret of holding no agnst to our own heart , to no shadows in the world of dreams and to no one´s eyecrossing path Once we see a tree, and not the garmets of description or the ever dividing explanation we can see ourselves in it. once we know the sun is one for all and that life stems from the deep root of time of continuity which in itself is only here. and nowhere else. |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
I was drawn in by the title of your poem. I hate to say this, but I was left wanting more....this needs fine tuning in my opinion. Leave out "soul" and "heart" and make me see other depths of your "rebirth". Robert....not an expert by any means! if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Awesome lines... "Once we see a tree, and not the garmets of description or the ever dividing explanation we can see ourselves in it." Fabulous Work!! -jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com |
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