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Sudhir Iyer
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0 posted 2000-08-22 01:09 PM


This is a repost from the Poetry Workshop... I hope it is funny... if you find some depth to it... I will be glad...    
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"EXOTIC - Who? Me?"

High above, atop a
forty-inched hill,
a centimetre long,
brown skinned, winged,
working member of
the Formicidae family
guarded the fortress
of his Tribe, armed
with sharp antennae.

At the appointed hour,
another centimetre long,
brown skinned, winged,
working member of
the Formicidae family
came to replace him,
to let him take leave
of his duties, for the day.

As they exchanged poses,
the newly arrived
sighted, at a wee corner,
a tiny personal note.

Quizzed he, "what may this be?
The note read, "Exotica sighted!
Biped, huge-200 times large
without wings, without sensors,
covered with strange green
in the middle of its bulk
(I think was a leaf).
It saw our fort from faraway
almost from 300 body lengths away.
I noticed it trembling
looking at our kingdom
and my mighty spear
and later disappear.
It was quite queer
I hereby call it a MAN."


~ Same time, at another place ~

Adam rushed to Eve
rushing in huff.
"Eve", he shrieked
"Where are you?
Did God not tell you
not to eat the fruit?
Look what you have done!"

As his sound trailed off,
Eve woke up to his story
and asked "What may it be?"
"What have we done?"
"The fruit that we ate
was so sweet, how could it
possibly cause any wrong?"

To this Adam replied
"I just saw a mound
under an old tree,
very much as the one
beneath which you rest,
where armed was
Lucifer's child Exotica,
with wings and legs,
though just as big
as the finger's nail;
face full of wrath,
brown as mud itself
camouflaged in the sand,
eyes with flamed ire
red as this fruit
that you just ate."

Eve, the ever so wise,
said quietly,
"Peace my dear,
God will protect
us from the pest-
in His safe arms,
we will calmly rest.
Even if we reach our end,
greetings to Him, we will send.
In the message to God
for the sake of naming
we shall address this
angry pest as an ANT"  

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Additional Notes:
EXOTICA: Things that are curiously unusual or excitingly strange: such gustatory exotica as killer bee honey.

ANT:
Important derivatives are: along, end, ante-, advance, anti-, antic, antique, until
Variant form *anto-. Vedanta, from Sanskrit anta, end

ANT:
Any of various social insects of the family Formicidae, characteristically having wings only in the males and fertile females and living in colonies that have a complex social organization
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I had fun, did you?    




[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 08-23-2000).]

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Sunnyone
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1 posted 2000-08-22 01:13 PM



  Yes......I had a ball reading this one!!!!Sudhir, you have sparked my imagination again!!  This was wonderful and I'm going back to read it once more!


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



ggrn3
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2 posted 2000-08-22 01:31 PM


Sudhir
   I like the Sunny1, had a ball reading this one.  As always, you amaze me with your creativity.

Garfield

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3 posted 2000-08-22 01:41 PM


Exotic, a little erotic, and oh so eccentric, Yes, You!

Loved it!

sweetcollege_girl
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4 posted 2000-08-22 01:46 PM


He HE..me too. very...what's the word..witty? And yes, YOU!  

stay cool

~~Lavada~~



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For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it
For every love, there is a heart some

English Rose
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5 posted 2000-08-22 04:20 PM



Very amusing this one...I fancy some fruit (can't think why)... )


Mark Bohannan
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6 posted 2000-08-22 04:22 PM


Yes I had fun....need you ask....very cute and yes erotic....never knew I would find something exotic about an ant....just goes to show ya.LOL
Sudhir Iyer
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7 posted 2000-08-23 05:49 AM


Hey dear friends, thank you all so very much....

Some second or third thoughts on this poem, should I have called the poem: MAN MEETS HIS ANT(E)... would that have taken away the pleasure of the end...

I wonder, I ponder and hope you have an answer...

now to the deep parts...

We humans are so impervious to the feelings of little beings around us... never bothering much to think how they react to seeing us... imagine a fly buzzing around the ears wonderng if there is light at the other end of the tunnel? looking at the hair around... and thinging "by gosh! these trees are huge and dense..." well same as we perhaps seeing martians with 5 heads and 12 hands, a fifty feet tall .....

WOW that is a story line for another poem... maybe, just maybe  

regards to all and thanks once again,
sudhir

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8 posted 2000-08-23 07:06 AM


Sudhir~
I enjoyed reading this.

I found amusement in your references
to Adam and Eve and the cute exchange
of their conversational views on apple-eating.

LOL !  Adam trying to blame HER
and Eve wanting to share the credit with HIM ! !

Most clever, my friend.
~*Marge*~



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Kit McCallum
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9 posted 2000-08-23 07:59 AM


Wonderfully creative Sudhir!  I enjoyed this journey through your imaginative pen! Kept my brain humming this one did ... great fun!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Sudhir Iyer
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10 posted 2000-08-23 12:53 PM


Marge,
some eyes you have got.... they see everything... so glad you found that part...
Thanks  

Kit,
I am so glad that you liked this one... and for taking the time to read and respond... your kind words are always appreciated  

regards,
sudhir


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11 posted 2000-08-23 02:24 PM


the title, the author, who could not read this??? great job sudhir.....loved it, and yes, the author puts depth in everything he writes, even when it makes us smile at the same time  
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12 posted 2000-08-23 02:58 PM


Sudhir--Terrific!!! and I loved your after thought as well...you know, you are a creative and thinking as well as caring man...I do like what you write!
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13 posted 2000-08-23 03:53 PM


Sudhir,

What an excellent imagination you have. This was great!!  I enjoyed every word.

Michael

Sudhir Iyer
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14 posted 2000-08-24 06:04 AM


Thank You, Corazon, Thank You  

Martie, you are just too kind... thanks

Michael, I am so glad that you enjoyed... thanks a bunch

regards,
sudhir

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Nan
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15 posted 2000-08-24 09:05 AM


This is definitely a keeper.. Very cute, Sudhir - A touch of exotica - a touch of humor - even a touch of spirituality... Just to remind us all that God does indeed have a sense of humor... Nice job, my friend..
Sudhir Iyer
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16 posted 2000-08-24 04:49 PM


Ah, Nancy... all that in there???   WOW, I am impressed...  

No, just kidding... thanks a lot, thanks very much... firstly for the workshop challenge and then for this.... really appreciate it a lot...

regards,
sudhir

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