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Exotic - Who? Me?
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Exotic - Who? Me? |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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This is a repost from the Poetry Workshop... I hope it is funny... if you find some depth to it... I will be glad...  ___________________________________________ "EXOTIC - Who? Me?" High above, atop a forty-inched hill, a centimetre long, brown skinned, winged, working member of the Formicidae family guarded the fortress of his Tribe, armed with sharp antennae. At the appointed hour, another centimetre long, brown skinned, winged, working member of the Formicidae family came to replace him, to let him take leave of his duties, for the day. As they exchanged poses, the newly arrived sighted, at a wee corner, a tiny personal note. Quizzed he, "what may this be? The note read, "Exotica sighted! Biped, huge-200 times large without wings, without sensors, covered with strange green in the middle of its bulk (I think was a leaf). It saw our fort from faraway almost from 300 body lengths away. I noticed it trembling looking at our kingdom and my mighty spear and later disappear. It was quite queer I hereby call it a MAN." ~ Same time, at another place ~ Adam rushed to Eve rushing in huff. "Eve", he shrieked "Where are you? Did God not tell you not to eat the fruit? Look what you have done!" As his sound trailed off, Eve woke up to his story and asked "What may it be?" "What have we done?" "The fruit that we ate was so sweet, how could it possibly cause any wrong?" To this Adam replied "I just saw a mound under an old tree, very much as the one beneath which you rest, where armed was Lucifer's child Exotica, with wings and legs, though just as big as the finger's nail; face full of wrath, brown as mud itself camouflaged in the sand, eyes with flamed ire red as this fruit that you just ate." Eve, the ever so wise, said quietly, "Peace my dear, God will protect us from the pest- in His safe arms, we will calmly rest. Even if we reach our end, greetings to Him, we will send. In the message to God for the sake of naming we shall address this angry pest as an ANT" ---------------------- Additional Notes: EXOTICA: Things that are curiously unusual or excitingly strange: such gustatory exotica as killer bee honey. ANT: Important derivatives are: along, end, ante-, advance, anti-, antic, antique, until Variant form *anto-. Vedanta, from Sanskrit anta, end ANT: Any of various social insects of the family Formicidae, characteristically having wings only in the males and fertile females and living in colonies that have a complex social organization ------- I had fun, did you?  [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 08-23-2000).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Yes......I had a ball reading this one!!!!Sudhir, you have sparked my imagination again!! This was wonderful and I'm going back to read it once more! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Sudhir I like the Sunny1, had a ball reading this one. As always, you amaze me with your creativity. Garfield |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Exotic, a little erotic, and oh so eccentric, Yes, You! Loved it! |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
He HE..me too. very...what's the word..witty? And yes, YOU!  stay cool  ~~Lavada~~  "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart some |
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English Rose Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 211Berkshire, England |
Very amusing this one...I fancy some fruit (can't think why)...  ) |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Yes I had fun....need you ask....very cute and yes erotic....never knew I would find something exotic about an ant....just goes to show ya.LOL |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Hey dear friends, thank you all so very much.... Some second or third thoughts on this poem, should I have called the poem: MAN MEETS HIS ANT(E)... would that have taken away the pleasure of the end... I wonder, I ponder and hope you have an answer... now to the deep parts... We humans are so impervious to the feelings of little beings around us... never bothering much to think how they react to seeing us... imagine a fly buzzing around the ears wonderng if there is light at the other end of the tunnel? looking at the hair around... and thinging "by gosh! these trees are huge and dense..." well same as we perhaps seeing martians with 5 heads and 12 hands, a fifty feet tall ..... WOW that is a story line for another poem... maybe, just maybe regards to all and thanks once again, sudhir |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sudhir~ I enjoyed reading this. I found amusement in your references to Adam and Eve and the cute exchange of their conversational views on apple-eating. LOL ! Adam trying to blame HER and Eve wanting to share the credit with HIM ! ! Most clever, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderfully creative Sudhir! I enjoyed this journey through your imaginative pen! Kept my brain humming this one did ... great fun! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Marge, some eyes you have got.... they see everything... so glad you found that part... Thanks Kit, I am so glad that you liked this one... and for taking the time to read and respond... your kind words are always appreciated regards, sudhir [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 08-23-2000).] |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
the title, the author, who could not read this??? great job sudhir.....loved it, and yes, the author puts depth in everything he writes, even when it makes us smile at the same time |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir--Terrific!!! and I loved your after thought as well...you know, you are a creative and thinking as well as caring man...I do like what you write! |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Sudhir, What an excellent imagination you have. This was great!! I enjoyed every word. Michael |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank You, Corazon, Thank You Martie, you are just too kind... thanks Michael, I am so glad that you enjoyed... thanks a bunch regards, sudhir [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 08-24-2000).] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is definitely a keeper.. Very cute, Sudhir - A touch of exotica - a touch of humor - even a touch of spirituality... Just to remind us all that God does indeed have a sense of humor... Nice job, my friend.. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ah, Nancy... all that in there??? WOW, I am impressed...  No, just kidding... thanks a lot, thanks very much... firstly for the workshop challenge and then for this.... really appreciate it a lot... regards, sudhir |
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