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I Drink Tonight of Passion........Mark's If and when challange
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I Drink Tonight of Passion........Mark's If and when challange |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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"If and when Pen and quill have come and gone mixed with passions ink and gone is here to taunt makes the poets swill in which we all drink" then I drink of it tonight not swill but draught delight and fathom mixed bouquet of gold stirred with luna’s golden light As cherubs dance across the pool in rainbows sky splashed view I drink a nectar made from sweetest love each drop like dew The crickets hum in rhythm to the closing of the day and I open up my honeyed coat to you my love this way I drain the heat of afternoon and touch it to the ground transplant the blooming roses fall caress its satin gown to gather up and empty out each day does life imbibe that curling in your lap so warm is poetry divine to breathe out all the fragile hairs and brush them ‘til they glow with celestial spark and angel dust then braid them in a row Oh ‘tis harsh to think of so much gone when so much here is pulsing and dreams lay wait on cotton sheets to capture time’s composing so delicate the fiber of the minutes fragile skin that to let one pass unnoticed is the most tremendous sin So I drink tonight of Passion stirred with luna’s golden light and I whisper sweet my poet’s breath into the waning light. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 08-20-2000).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
so delicate the fiber of the minutes fragile skin that to let one pass unnoticed is the most tremendous sin So I drink tonight of Passion stirred with luna’s golden light and I whisper sweet my poet’s breath into the waning light. Are you looking in my window  Wonderfully done Martie...you took the gold for sure!! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
OOOHHHhhh Martie......thunderous applause and a wave of human poets in the stands.....you get two golds for this one girl....hey I am the judge and I will do it if I like....hehehhehe and I do like very much. You turn my words in to Martieific Pleasures and I am honored. Thank you for doing so well.  |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
"so delicate the fiber of the minutes fragile skin that to let one pass unnoticed is the most tremendous sin" -- Incredible Martie....you have an absolutely gorgeous way with words. A job well done here! *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Martie! But of course! Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lady~ You are touched of spirit~ ... make no mistake about that ! My, how impressive are your phrases. 'I drain the heat of afternoon and touch it to the ground transplant the blooming roses fall caress its satin gown' What a jeweled delight ! Poet ... your sensitivity is showing  along with your talent !  Love ya', SIS~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I came back for a second read ..... your imagery is so outstanding and I am just tickled pink(maybe blue) to know that you have done your majestic magic on my words......they are yours for sure now. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
O Miss Martie...you write with velvet words...sighs...how oh how do you do this so consistently? me applauding you, again, and again... |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
MArtie, wow an excellent response to the challenge. Perfect poetry. "Beyond all this good is the terror,The grip of a mercenary hand,When savagery turns all good reason, There's no turning back, no last stand,"I.Curtis |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Martie I have to agree with all the above comments a thousand fold...this is marvelous heart warming work...just wonderful!!! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
After taking in your words, it's so hard to find words to tell you how I feel about this poem. Every line and verse is extraordinary. You are the best, and I agree with Mark, a standing ovation from all the poets at passions. You are a writer of highest caliber and should certainly be published. This poem is but one mark of your excellence in writing. I am proud to be a friend of such a talented poet Love Liz |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I ditto whatever Liz said... You, my friend, Martie are special... very special... regards, sudhir |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Butterflies--I may have been...I'm happy that you feel I might have been. Mark--If you hadn't kept after me then this poem never would have been written...thanks for that and the inspiration and friendhship! Krista--and you also have a wonderful way...thank you. Denise--thanks so much for the read! Marge--YOu make my spirit soar! Mark--hi Mr. Blue...thanks for the second read and reply and for saying such nice things! serenity--velvet words, how nice...I think I'll take a bow Brian--I know it's not perfect but I thank you anyway for saying so sweety. ethome--Oh, I'm so glad for the heart warming...makes me smile. Liz my friend, you wonderful words have made my day...thank you so much, especially for the friendship. Sudhir--Thank you for being so special my friend, and for saying such a sweet thing. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
OH WOW!!!!!! you rolled them all into one amazing poem Martie this is EXCEPTIONAL and EXQUISITE. the imagery is just UNBELIEVABLE... and you know I'm in Heaven that you rhymed. you took this to a higher level of poetry my dear... indeed...take a bow love ya jm |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Martie, This is absoulutely wonderful, it brought so many pictures into my head. If I could write half as well as you I would be very happy. Dee |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Beautiful, Martie! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--Thank you again for all the enthusiasm you give...I was thinking of you with the rhyme. Hi Dee--I haven't seen you here before, thanks for the wonderful reply. Sunshine--Thanks so much for reading and for the beautiful! |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Timeless piece Martie. One can read this over and over and it will be enjoyed as much as it was the first time. Garfield |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
I agree you melded the two into one stunning whole. Excellent poem. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Garfield--What a very nice thing to say...thank you. Kethry--thank you so much...I'm glad that you enjoyed the poem...I sure appreciate the stunning. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Hey! Everybody! Martie wrote a poem that has rhyming words! And its GOOD! I like this one very much Martie. You have such a gift for description - |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Of all of your poems I've read so far (and that's not all but quite a few) I'll take a copy of this one sprinkled with stardust dew I'll store it in my treasure box held with moonbean ties so blue so when ever my heart needs lifting I'll reread and think of you This bit of doggeral won't match your poetry so fine but I still hope you'll see it as testement your's is divine |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
How beautiful and perfect. I so enjoyed this poem, and will read it many times also. catalinamoon |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Long John--you just make me laugh...you are too cute! Bill--This sweet poem means alot to me...thank you for it and you. catalinamoon--thank you so much for saying such wonderful things... |
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