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The Beauty That is You....
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The Beauty That is You.... |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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If I could write like Byron..make my thoughts and visions flow Or paint a picture with the grace of Michaelangelo If I described perfection in the way great writers do I'd still find I could not create the beauty that is you. If I could take the light of dawn as sun begins to rise Then blend it with the brightness in a newborn infant's eyes And color it with butterflies and moisten it with dew It still would fall quite short of all the beauty that is you. I find myself still mesmerized by all your charm and grace. I know there is a God above. I see Him in your face... I pity those who cannot see your wonders as I do For they will never realize the beauty that is you. So, please, my lover, dry your tears. Let pain and sorrow cease. To me you'll always represent Life's greatest masterpiece. All pain and fear will disappear as we begin anew And I will cherish every day the beauty that is you. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
It is a joy when we see the beauty in someone and find ourselves appreciating the beauty that God has created...James |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Geez, you don't have a brother, do you? An uncle? as JM once put it, a warm puppy? sighing and smiling....and melting...she must really be something, Michael. |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Oh my! I don't know whether to be touched by the beauty of this piece or to be mad 'cause it's not for me.  This is so sweet and tender, Balladeer.--You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
It's lovely, and someone is going to be very pleased to receive this, now, I do hope you wrote it for someone special! Kathleen |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ What a lovely poem. Such graceful rhythm flowing through this piece. 'If I could take the light of dawn as sun begins to rise Then blend it with the brightness in a newborn infant's eyes And color it with butterflies and moisten it with dew It still would fall quite short of all the beauty that is you.' Sweet, sweet poet .... Byron's got nothing on you ! ! This is exquisite ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
If I could find the words like deer always imparts I'd say just how this poem is sweetness from the heart Beautiful one Balladeer! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Much beauty in these thoughts, words. So nice, Balladeer. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Michael. Just lovely! Another masterpiece to add to your growing collection! Denise |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
The beauty is in your word! Wow!! -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i certainly know that i'm not a good enough writer to describe perfection  , but i think this is probably one of the most perfect and beautiful poems i have ever read... I love it! YOU are the michaelangelo of verse and the words you paint make my heart sing.  [This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 08-20-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
If I could take the light of dawn as sun begins to rise Then blend it with the brightness in a newborn infant's eyes And color it with butterflies and moisten it with dew It still would fall quite short of all the beauty that is you. I find myself still mesmerized by all your charm and grace. I know there is a God above. I see Him in your face... I pity those who cannot see your wonders as I do For they will never realize the beauty that is you. .... So well written... WOW Do we need a Picasso or a michaelangelo... if we have a Balladeer... I guess not... regards, sudhir |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is a wonderful tribute it a loved one so well written with such beautiful comparisons. That beauty that grows with maturity is the essence of longevity and true love...Bravo!! well done!! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
'Deer - you silver-tongued devil! Lookee at how all the ladies are swooning - have you no discipline? You've gotta watch where you point that pen, you scalawag. This is another classic Balladeer poem. Smooth flowing, great similes, and romantic enough to weaken feminine knees. |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
LngJhn, I hear ya dude. That swanky Balladeer has done and did it, makin all dem ladies swoon like dat. Now, pickin up a swooned lady from da floor ain't no problem...but pickin up five or six of em, well, my back ain't what it used to be...reckon we can get a flatbed? Mike, is all seriousness, this one was absolutely beautiful. You do have a way with words. Are you positive you're not Shakespeare re-incarnated? |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is so romantic...it sweeps even ME off my feet |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
How wonderful to be able to see beauty inside and out! I too was swept off me feet reading this! No need to pitty those who don't know her...you've just introduced her to all of us with your words! Oh the feeling to be admired so much by someone! Sounds like a very special person 'deer. Wonderful poem! ~Sheri |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
How like a Balladeer to know the words that would spell womankind so... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
jeeeeeezzzzz..do you give lessons in how to capture a ladies heart?....I could use a couple of sessions for one I love so dearly. This is one sweet piece oh romantic one of the forums. Really tender and full of your heart. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, With all the raves you got above, what can I say? I liked it. |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Ahhhh swooning myself silly right now. Wow I have to ask too, a twin maybe, cousin, uncle??? Balladeer this is so beautiful and oh so romantic. ~~~ Sigh ~~~ Juls |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
If I could take the light of dawn as sun begins to rise Then blend it with the brightness in a newborn infant's eyes And color it with butterflies and moisten it with dew It still would fall quite short of all the beauty that is you. I find myself still mesmerized by all your charm and grace. I know there is a God above. I see Him in your face... I pity those who cannot see your wonders as I do For they will never realize the beauty that is you. ==================== soooo....ya wanna say it with me ... sweet Deer??... you know the words...right? OH-HOW-I-LOVE-WHEN-YOU-WRITE-LIKE-THIS!!! my oh my ....BIG OLE *SIGH* later-make me swoon-gator jm |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Beautiful my clown....you romantic little devil..*g* HUSG |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well, obviously by the quantity and quality of the responses here, we certainly do have a lot of romantics here at Passions...thank God!!!  My most sincere thanks to you all. Rainbow...your clown?  ALWAYS! |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
~Simply Amazing~ A pleasure to read. Marcy |
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ddgoose Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 250Baltimore, MD, USA |
This certainly can bring a tear to all of the females hoping that this poem could have been written for them. Oh sigh!! Maybe one of these days! Fantastic words. didi |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Now this is my kind of romantic! This is my kind of poet!. From a woman's standpoint, this gets an A+, (despite what you said in the Alley) Liz |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
Your words are like a river your lines release my heart for you sir are a poet for many you amaze beauty that is you! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Bal, this is a really beautiful piece, and I was surprised that you left out that last verse. You know the one about you singing this lovely piece while looking in the mirrow and tieing your tie. Parker |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
this is beautiful, I just love it when a man is not afraid to write of the beauty in the object of his love...it matters not how anyone else perceives her, we see her as beautiful alsobecause you wrote her so |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Parker! ROFLMAO@mirror - an excellent zinger! That'll teach 'Deer to make us men look oafish in front of these broads, errr, babes, err, girls, errr, chicks, errr..... never mind - I see his point now. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Thanks again to all the kind, warmhearted and romantic poets who responded....as far the other one, I can see that I'm gonna have to keep the shades pulled down at night!! (that WUZ a good one, bum) LongJohn, don't encourage him. It just makes him worse!! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Yanno, Dear one... people are going to wonder why I'm such an unappealing shade of green. *S* But how I do envy someone seen through loving eyes... instead of a mirror that refuses to lie! *S* Great poem! |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
OHHHHHHH OHHHH OH my God what a beautifully written poem this is ...the words, the flow, the imagery, the emotions..they are all there and they do not fall short not by one inch, not one stanza is better than the other, not one image grander than the other, this poem is truly for a lover...this is truly a wonderful piece. i give this a standing ovation *clap**clap**clap* I enjoyed this MUCH "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Sir Balladeer... these be some truly beautiful and powerful lines... infused with emotion. My pen is raised to you and yours. Peace! |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Wonderful work of poetry here... great rythm and everything flows so perfectly! Beautiful job, I enjoyed this much. Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Balladeer, I can't for the life of me figure out how this writing of yours ever got by me. Excellent, well done, and lovely. |
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