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My first haiku.... thanks Marge... Rainbow delight
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My first haiku.... thanks Marge... Rainbow delight |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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Rays obscured by clouds shine amid monsoon winds bright rainbow gives delight |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sudhir~ Clouding overhead What's that peeking through at me ? Rainbow shine of you ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Nice one, Sudhir. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Sudhir.... Your first attemt is wonderful!!! Can't wait to see the others.... Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
What a beautiful picture you painted, Sudhir! Great haiku. Elizabeth Why ME??? |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Moon comes out to play peeking from tendrils and wisps clouds parting in smiles. Love Haiku, thank you, Sudhir! Corine |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
SUD, this is wonderful... you nailed the impact of imagery needed to make Haiku work... YOU are meant for Haiku  later-5-7-5 gator jm |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Words from Eastern sky Radiate through the storm cluds Bringing rainbow smiles You brought a smile with this one Great work Liz |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
I, too, will be looking forward to more. -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Congrats Sudhir, very well done!I'm working on mine right now. Wish me luck, hehe. Juls |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Sudhir, so much hope and light here. Lovely, my friend. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sudhir...wow you do have a talent for this |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
There you go....see nothing to it...lololol.....I guess I better start trying to do the same and get my first one going.  Beautiful my friend. really beautiful. |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Sudhir With all your post, it's hard to believe that this is your first Haiku. Great first one.  Garfield |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, You did well, good haiku. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
WOW... so many wonderful people here... I feel so honoured... thank you very much... from all my heart... Marge, thanks for the very special notes and of course for your wonderful response haiku... Alicat, thanks a lot... Sunny, I am told that haiku poetry is addictive... so I hope to get another one out soon... Thanks ... Elizabeth, Thanks for the lovely compliment... Corinne... what a blessing it is to get anothee haiku in response.... thanks... Janet, thank you, thank you and again thank you... mean't for haiku... sounds great  Liz, now this is fabulous ... I just wrote a haiku to catch up and you put another one up ... how am I ever ging to catch up... I wonder.... thanks a lot Jaimie, I hope I do not disappoint you... thanks Juliet, All my best wishes are with you... see your haiku soon... thanks Claire, thanks for the way you read poetry... thanks a lot... Paula, thanks a huge bunch Mark, better get moving and come up with one... I already know it will be beautiful... thanks garfield, lots of posts, but no haiku ... gald that this changed those statistics... thanks Seymour, your approval means a lot.. thanks regards to all you wonderful peoples and thanks, sudhir |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I have'nt tried one of these yet Sudhir but I have to say from reading others that this is as good as any I've read! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
ethome, you should try them, it is fun... regards, sudhir |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Clouds o'er sunny day rain in torrents sheeting down rainbow brightness gives Good Haiku. I can't believe it's your first attempt. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thanks Kethry and such a lovely response... WOW regards, sudhir |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Fabulous job! Fun aren't they?  |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Yes, they are WhtDove... and thanks for reading ... regards, sudhir |
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English Rose Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 211Berkshire, England |
Well done Sudhir! What fun!!!!! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
English Rose... thanks... O yes it is fun... regards, sudhir |
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BSC
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Yea, Yea....Finally found time to wander around these pages and found #1....YEA!!!! Beautiful haiku Sudhir, so few words created such a lovely image. Bonnie |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Sudhir, Excellent! and..your first! I know, you know, but "rainbows" are placed in the sky as a sign to us from God. Beautiful topic and beautiful haiku. Love, Marcy |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Bonnie, you are a gem, never give up, do you?  Thanks a great deal...Marcy, thank you a lot for coming in... regards, sudhir |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
welcome to the club, budding haikuist!!! well, according to the rules, haikus are not meant to rhyme(for your information) but nonetheless i still liked this anyway WRITE ON!!! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Many thanks to Kalie for bringing this back around or I would have missed it for sure...shame on me Sud!!! This is beautiful..I am always amazed at these and you made this one glow perfectly my friend!! |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
I'm glad that everyone had a chance to see this wonderful piece you did. Thanks for sending it to Rainbows. Here is a poem for you! ____________________________ The rain is pouring down When there is no hope to be found A clearing begins to overtake It's a light ray for heaven sake Sidhir is this light A light that overtakes the night Busting through this pouring rain Drying all that is pain Bringing joy and happiness For all to see and wish Giving his light with a glow He's a part of this thing the Rainbow _____________________________ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Kaile, WOW, you did get this out of the dungeons so to speak... Thank you, and yes I will remember the rules... butterflies~, please don't berate yourself on this... thanks for coming by... I am glad you did... smiles, my friend...insect, I will keep that poem with me for the rest of my life... thanks so very much... regards to all Sudhir |
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Steve B Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 140Southern PA |
Sudhir, I must say that you and these things called haikus make quite a good match. well done Steve B“The union of the mathematician with the poet, fervor with measure, passion with correctness, this surely is the ideal” |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you steve regards, sudhir |
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