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If and When |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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If and When..... If and when ..... Just one grain of time would come to us If and when..... one moment to share the love safely kept If and when..... the unspoken desires were set free from thus If and when..... our hearts would allow all those tears we haven't wept If and when..... our souls would entwine as we reach out If and when..... no longer our hearts fear from which we hide If and when..... with just one brief moment two hearts were aloud to shout If and when..... now just sweet memories for our hearts love to reside If and when..... thrown into the wind as it came and went If and when..... reminders of all the paths where walks with "US" were spent If and when..... there no longer is the if then we have answered when Mark Bohannan |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Lots of unanswered questions here...ifs and whens dont have to be if you are willing to try...nice write Mark |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mark* The beauty of this lies within the knowledge that these "if's & when's" are known...that the feelings were found and not undiscovered...life is built on "if's & when's"...some are meant to be...and some are not.....making the most of what you have is most important of all....your writing shows that you know how to do just that...I had no doubt of this. Wonderful writing my brother in poetry~ |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
very beautiful Mark. If and when, this really tugs at the heart strings very good poem. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Paula--thank you and all the questions have been answered. "SIS"-my dear sweet girl...the discovery was indeed beautiful to me and just that one brief moment will forever be cherished deep within my heart and soul....and the faith and trust as a result is the most precious gift of all....thank you for seeing what is really there within my words...but then again you always do..  hugs to you sis.Rosebud-I love to pull them heart strings lol and I thank you kindly for your sweet words. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Mark, you have penned this beautifully! If only you had a Crystal Ball and the world were ours to see. Now you have me saying IF.....LOL Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Allo Mark, I read this one slowly absorbing every expression beneath the verse and I must say the end "If and when there is no longer an if then we have answered when" just clawed at my heart! Nice poem indeed Coco |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Mark this was so lovely and heartfelt!!!! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
When, not if, I read this again I'm sure I'll enjoy it as much as this first time. Keep it up  |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Marina-What do you mean "IF" I had a crystal ball....I do of sorts but it is in the form of a book. ..Just ask and you will see. Thank you for seeing the beauty of it and "IF" you are going to say "IF" so much then why not take the challenge? LOL  Coco-Thanks, I am glad you liked it and I will schedule an appointment to have the verse declawed...LOL ARH-yes from the heart it was and the romance is the friendship that will forever shine. Thank you much. lakeWalker-The promise of you coming back is the greatest compliment a poet can receive....thank you so much from the bottom of my heart. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi Mark, I did have many feelings reading this poem that you have written. Your words were carefully chosen, at least in my eyes. I like what you write. |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Mark....I love this....all of the if's or when's expressed here....nothing leftout....great work!!!! Julie :) |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Mark--I read this once this morning, but didn't have time to answer and have read it again now, twice...If I could just find the right words, when I did I'd be able to tell you how much I liked this. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
If and when my words of appreciation for these beautiful sentiments can be displayed, I shall return ... until then, please know that this is exquisite Mark! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
If I say I love you will there be a when? and if there is no when what will I do then? |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Bill-thank you so much and my words I did not choose....they chose me....as a poet you know that.LOL Now go pick up a challenge and see what words choose you.JulieAnn-Thank you so much my dear and it is so nice to see you spending time with us again. Martie-you already know that I will hold you to that...a promise is a promise and you did at that. Now quit stalling and go take a challenge.  Kit-"if" you return with more than exquisite me thinks I will have to give you a kiss. Thank you for making me smile. Karilea- Then my when becomes an if if I say it there will be a when because the SWEETNESS of my heart will send me packing again [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 08-15-2000).] |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
This has made me feel so many things. Discovering is indeed beautiful and the unique beauty of that discovery can be forever in our hearts. I think as much as a heart feels you can't help but reflect every now and again on the What If's........I am slowly learning to take discovery as it is and to realize what "it' was....I am trying to teach my heart how to smile and reflect on the beauty of it instead of the loss as it is never really lost. We do have to live for the here and now and focus on what is.......grow and learn and continue to love all who have been brought to us for whatever time that may be. OK OK I am definitley rambling here.......Sorry...... You have plesently surprised me with this, what a soft shade this has. You write close to the heart and it is very beautiful. Jenn E |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Surprise Mark! Superb ... stunning ... stupendous ... waiting! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Jenn E-I am so happy to have provoked all these thoughts that you have. You are headed in the right direction and slow is the way to go. This whole poem was about something that could have lent pain after some maddening happiness.....we saw it...we indulged slightly....and we stopped it. Sometimes restraining a love that could never be is better than losing that love by trying to force a path to it. You may ramble anytime dear....and I am so glad I surprised you. Thank you for all your wonderful thought. Kit-Mmmmmmuuuuuaaaaaaaahhhhhh! One big kiss just as promised. Thank you so much for all them thar kind words.  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Beautiful and oh so true |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Oh what an amazing poem, these 'words' will stay with me for a while. In fact I like this so much I printed it out and have hung it in our staff room. So all at the hospital where I work can read it. As always this is a great poem! You know I like it right? |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
If I know there'll be a when when I utter if will I know your sweetness then or will I wonder where is when? |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Oh Mark, this is so stirring. My heart was lost in emotion. I reflected back on so many memories through this. This is a start for me to just be thankful for what me and a special someone have and try not to dwell too much on the ifs and whens. Thank you so much for sharing this lovely gift. All the best to ya, Juls |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Mark... you ask all the right questions with this poetic pondering... sometimes we are given people in our lives to love and be loved by ... but not to be "in love" with ... these gifts of friendship and trust are a deeper more spiritual bond and will give both a path to follow and a light to guide them... I call it "while loving a butterfly" YOU KNOW...I KNOW...the person you write this for..KNOWS... "IF" and "When" has been found ... your heart is free to know your "when" ... when it comes .... me |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
A wonderful poem here, my friend... regards, sudhir |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
hoot_owl_rn-Thank you so much AND YES the whole thing is truth between me and my TRUE soul-mate. Marsha-That may quite be the most loving compliment I have ever received....I thank you for that and for you. Karilea- No longer is there an if as there will be a when If you walk with God knowing there is HIS when then this is where the love you seek will be answered with the when Juls-That is exactly where this came from on this end....thank you and I hope your answers turn out as lovely as mine did. JM-MY "SWEETNESS"--You are my life and my love and you have helped me and my special friend more than anyone could ever know. You know you have my thanks and my heart. Hugs sweet one. Sudhir-Always so happy to hear from you. Thank you so much for the wonderful....within that one word I see your heart. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Got it! Thanks Mark, right back at ya! |
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