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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
Sally Smith should smile, she is so sad and shy, sneaking peeks at strangers as they stroll slowly by. Strangers, singing friendly songs beneath a summer sky she simply sits in solitude and shivers with a sigh. Her spirit is so sorrowful so singular is she surrendering, her shoulders slump against society. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Debbie, This seems quite excellently done... Wonderful read... regards sudhir. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Hi, I am here again... last time I said it seems quite excellently done... now a few more reads later, its time to change the opinion... It IS an excellently done poem... loved the sneaking peeks line and the shoulders slumping really leave the thought of a lonelied soul marked rather permanently... Yes and Sally Smith should smile to come out of the sorrow .... regards, sudhir |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Debbie~ Delightfully done ! An enchanting lilt it had when read aloud. I enjoyed it. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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