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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Sand I stare as they dry and roll to the ground symmetrical, circular, crystalline shapes In the blaze of the sun, like flawed diamonds, reflecting , the rainbow as they fall. Closer I stare and watch their dances in the ocean breeze They skip and float on the curves of their coppertone colored world Moving and flying and landing where they know NOT. Pounded by the ocean to their cosmic minute existence I want to brush them aside but, I dare NOT. Is it the beauty of the sand That I see, or the interesting places They sit on your tan , as you lay By the ocean in the breeze. James Parker Haley Feb 16, 2000 [This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 02-17-2000).] |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Being a hard core southern california beach kid myself, I can really appreciate this poem..I personally have always seen a little more than most in sand. And I think the last line is killer  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Haleyja, Enjoyed the read, but I like the water more then the sand. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
This one is very different for you. I like it though and I'm sure I know where your inspiration came from for this poem. Don't worry only a few more weeks and you can have your much deserved break. Marina |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I enjoyed reading this, Parker, and especially liked the ending...it came as a bit of a sweetened surprise. Very sensual and nice. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Beki, Well you are luckier man than I, my sand is all white and cold, and there's lots of it today. Thanks Seymour, Marina, Clair, what's that they say about men. We are very visual. In march I'm going visual. Parker |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Ahhh, James, what can I say? A beautiful piece! A single golden grain with a twinkle in its eye. Race ya to the waves! Corinne |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corinne, be wary I cheat, a little trip here and down you go. Oh and doesn't that sand get in everywhere. Maybe I can help, but after I beat you to the waves. Parker |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
OooooOOooooh....*feeling the warm sand between her toes* I love your descriptions!! I can see it all! Now I'm hankering for one of those fruity drinks...topped with a little umbrella... Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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January Flowers Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 209South Carolina |
"They sit on your tan..." I love this! Definately a viewpoint I never would have considered. Graphic. Perfectly transmitted. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This one leaves me yearning for the summer and the sand of our beautiful California beaches!!! I do believe I'm due for a tan...care to oil my back dear James??? Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Breathe, get one of those drinks for me, I'm due otta this snow storm. Thanks January Flowers, Its easy to visualize, when its write their before you, and I do love to visualize. I'm glad you liked it. devina, You don't want me rubbing oil on your body. You'd be my slave then, or maybe I'd be yours. Parker |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I'd choose the second suggestion, my dear!!  < !signature-->Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... [This message has been edited by devina (edited 02-16-2000).] |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Yes your right! Is there anything else you request of me mistress of oil. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Oh, and do you make slaves of all your men devina. Parker |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
When I was a child, I'd get wet then roll around in it and eat it with my peanut butter and jelly sandwiches. Now, It's the best place for watching the ocean. Enjoyed you poem. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Only in my poetry James ...right now it's just me- myself- and I!!!!  Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Parker dear, ahem, excuse me devina, don't mean to but in sweets, but have you read my poem in Adult concerning such lessons in oil?  Just wondering...you might check it out...It's called "Slip Slide ....er...**BLEEP*. " LOL Seriously, this poem of yours is exquisite sir! I just returning from such wonderful sands, do relate to the beauty you speak of, and the warmth, and the curiosity of it, and it on my tan.....ahhh....and those little fruity drinks with umbrella's....hehehe Yeah.....This rocks to say the least! I'll race you to the snorkel gear! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Thank you Martie, though I can't imagine sand in my peanut butter.. Is that how they make the crunchy kind. devina, come don't be coy you are a slave goddess if I ever met one, and I haven't just yet. Femme, thank you, I'll have to check out the oil lesson, and I was going to say something about the snorkel race but, oh yes this is not adult. Parker |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
cool! |
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