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Open Poetry #6

You win old friend

Kevin

Senior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

0 posted 2000-02-07 03:28 PM

The last of embers lose their glow
and fall as blackened stone
Outside the night greets fallen snow
Inside I'm all alone
The wind, it scorns, the stubborn walls
that stand within its way
And grins as it so softly calls
my mind on out to play
The shadows dance along the room
basking in the moonlight
The emptiness starts to consume
the ever aging night
Left I to sit, thinking aloud
thoughts falling on deaf ears
working to build this silence shroud
trying to hold the tears
Again the wind begins to send
its invites in each clout
I sigh and say you win old friend
For I am coming out.

[This message has been edited by Kevin (edited 02-07-2000).]

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2000-02-07 03:40 PM

Kevin, how could you resist?! This is great!

-SEA

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

2 posted 2000-02-07 03:48 PM

I like this very much, Kevin... great job!

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2000-02-07 04:24 PM

Kevin,
Good paint, good thoughts, good poem. Enjoyed the read.

Breathe~
Member

since 2000-02-05

Posts 315
Washington...

4 posted 2000-02-07 05:21 PM

I love the ever so subtle play on words here..

Enjoyed this immensely!

)

Freedom of expression is the watch word...

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

5 posted 2000-02-08 10:53 AM

Your level of understanding of the world far surpasses your age

Echo Rhayne
Senior Member

since 1999-09-17

Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA

6 posted 2000-02-08 12:53 PM

Kevin, another wonderul poem you have here! I always enjoy opening up one of your poems!

Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*

silvershaddow
Junior Member

since 2000-02-11

Posts 19

7 posted 2000-03-08 11:57 AM

A great poem. I really enjoyed it.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2000-03-08 03:48 PM

This has such a wonderful warm flow. I really like "Outside the night greets fallen snow...inside I'm alone." Marvelous writing. James

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