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Nurse Crachet
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They know where I am!

0 posted 2000-02-15 03:12 PM


Can You Dance With Me

Can you dance with me
and float me away
to the moon
kissing the sun?

Can you dance with me
one on one
till I feel
the dew of morning?

Can you dance with me
one step at a time
till under our feet
the floor collapses?

Can you dance with me
like I'm your princess
and my gold slippers
are the key to our universe?

Can you dance with me
tonight for I'm free
to be whomever
you wish me to be?

© Copyright 2000 Nurse Crachet - All Rights Reserved
CMGrimm
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 685
USA
1 posted 2000-02-15 03:22 PM


May I have this dance?  
Just kidding.  But really this is a very beautiful poem.  I really enjoyed reading it.  I'll be looking for more of you in the future.  Thanks.

Chris

Wizzard
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since 2000-02-09
Posts 209

2 posted 2000-02-15 03:29 PM


A dancing nurse that`ll be who ever I want her to be.HHHMMmmmmmmm
I think I`ll take you just as you are    
Where do I sign up?
For the nurse of Passion
Thank you for sharing.< !signature-->

 Today is the first day of the rest of my life.
And the begining of a new one.





[This message has been edited by Wizzard (edited 02-15-2000).]

Nurse Crachet
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since 1999-09-27
Posts 318
They know where I am!
3 posted 2000-02-15 05:47 PM


I must confess
I'm an alias
escaping
from the Stute.

I am the one
they want
well done
so I've left
for greener
pastures.

If you know
not of the Stute
I am the brute
they will tell you.

For now I'm out
and venturing
about
with the sane
of Passions.

Thanks for your kind comments,
and Wizzard I love the rose
all the same.
Maybe you can come
visit at the stute
I know they'll drag
me back there,
cause they love me...LOL

Justin Nuendo
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since 2000-02-05
Posts 86
Ozzz
4 posted 2000-02-15 06:15 PM


Thank goodness, I got here Justin Thyme
Now she even started to rhyme !
ARGH, where’s the King when ya need him most !
She’ll soon turn these folks into ghosts !
Hey, what you’re dancing with ? LOL LOL LOL !!!!!!!!
That yar true love prince ? That’s a rubber doll !!!!!


Justin N  

Bashful
Junior Member
since 1999-10-22
Posts 28

5 posted 2000-02-15 06:28 PM


Yo nursy dear!! *blushing deeply and digging my toes into the ground* You lookin for a priince charming to dance with ya? I'd love to dance with such a wonderful nursey. *swallowing the lump in my throat* PLLLLLLLEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAASSSSSSSEEEEEEEEE don't turn down little old Bashful.
Justin Kace
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since 1999-09-13
Posts 82
Oz
6 posted 2000-02-15 08:05 PM


Justin Kace you want to know
I have to tell you this
Since from the 'stute I saw you go
You're poems haven't missed

You're writing like you're Justin Tact
Not Justin Sayne at all
Good poem here, it's Justin Fact
Take pride in it - Stand tall...

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
7 posted 2000-02-15 08:17 PM


Nurse Crachet.....it's wonderful to see you out of the stute, escape has done wonders for your literary expressions. Freedom is very becoming of you  
Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
8 posted 2000-02-15 08:28 PM


Did they teach you to waltz in the stute, good nurse, or the texas two step is my suit.  I really like your dancing attitude, and this poem.
Nurse Crachet
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since 1999-09-27
Posts 318
They know where I am!
9 posted 2000-02-15 11:33 PM


I'm blushing now,
you can't see
but I give my vow
for it's how
my mirror shows me.

Justin N: This Rubber doll I hold is yours
          from when you got him stuck
          inside your dripping wet drawers.

Bashful: How could I say no to you my friend
         I know you'll always stand beside me
         until the very sad and lonely end.

Justin Kace: Thank you for taking notice
             I'm glad you did not miss
             my new home in this palace.

Hoot_ Owl_ Rn: What a kind lady you are
               your words will take you far.
               Want to let loose in the bar?

Martie: Thank you, LOL teach us, I was head                    honcho and you can't
                   teach those old Justin's
                   new tricks, as for me
                   I'm learning now quickly.

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
Virginia
10 posted 2000-02-16 08:45 AM


This is a wonderful poem. It uses imagery, simplicity, honesty, and romanticism ... a poem worthy of your real name, not your 'stute alias. Just thought I'd let you know that your writing is maturing and you have done a wonderful job with this one! Thanks for the read, m'friend.

-doreen  

Nurse Crachet
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since 1999-09-27
Posts 318
They know where I am!
11 posted 2000-02-16 11:33 AM


Doreen, I thank you from the depths
        of my heart.
        Your high regards concerning
        my poetry are planted
        in my brain for further analysis.
        

[This message has been edited by Nurse Crachet (edited 02-16-2000).]

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)
12 posted 2000-02-16 11:56 AM


as i stare longingly into the stute
wishing i could get in there
i heard a crazy story from a coot
that some one actually escaped i swear

why would anyone wanna leave the sanctity
of the stute its warm theres lotsa joking
and all the cheerios you could ever wish for
since the little holes keep from choking

who are the inmates who are the wardens
who who who who i sound like an owl
nurse cratchet dear security man
i saw her running east with a trowel

a dirty dirty for digging trowel
you say she is the only one ever been freed
thaz cuz its so warm in the stute
and the cheerios and comradrie we all need

so if her cell is free sweet guard
wont you find me a bowl o cheerios
and ill start penning unpleasant poetry
never again quite so seriose

Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

13 posted 2000-02-16 12:05 PM


Beautiful poem, Nurse Cratchet! It has a lovely, magical air to it!  

Walt- Great poem too!  

Denise

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA
14 posted 2000-02-16 12:42 PM


Nurse C my dear
It is my fear
That your dance card is full

If not, then when
May I cut in
Please dance with this here fool

I cut a rug
And jitter bug
Better than Fred Astair

I swing and sway
Tango, ballet
I can bop with real flair

Give me a chance
At just one dance
I'll show you who's the King

I'm not Elvis
But I've got his pelvis
And it's a marvelous thing

Nurse Crachet
Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318
They know where I am!
15 posted 2000-02-16 01:35 PM


Yes Dear Andrew,

I do see the line it stretches very long
yet there are many hours, many song
that I can repeat and dance with you.
I left the stute with a distinct clue
to guide you swiftly on your way
instead you drove around town all day.

I gave you the first chance
to show me your side of romance
then you and Dr. Moose together
steal a car loaded in leather.
You came to rescue me from myself
but had more interest for what's on the shelf.

So here I came to dance
and since I got the chance
I threw off these spiked heels
and took to the floor to see how it feels.
Partner after partner danced so fine
so I guess you'll be next
when I reach the end of the line.

[This message has been edited by Nurse Crachet (edited 02-16-2000).]

E.Fudd
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since 1999-11-03
Posts 38
Dolgeville, N.Y.U.S.
16 posted 2000-02-16 05:11 PM


Why... Nurse C. , they're playing the "Acrostic Waltz"
one two three, one two three...


Institutionally speaking
While the floorboards are creaking
Only a fool could say no

Undeniably vibrant , as
Dogs to a hydrant
I'm drawn to your charms and must go

Everyone's talking
Despicably squawking
Embellishing what they don't know

Let idle tongues chatter
It doesn't matter
Good dancers are rare as green snow

Hope you've had fun , now
That this dance is done
Each step being taken real slow

Divinely you dance, glad that we had this chance
(for the others to put on this show)



[This message has been edited by E.Fudd (edited 02-16-2000).]

Parker
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129
ON
17 posted 2000-02-16 05:21 PM


Nurse Crachet, I really enjoyed this dance with you. I see have have been remis is missing your other poetry. A mistake I intend to correct.

Parker

Nurse Crachet
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since 1999-09-27
Posts 318
They know where I am!
18 posted 2000-02-16 05:30 PM


Oh my,
it's getting steamy in here,
I need a drink, Bartender

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA
19 posted 2000-02-16 06:02 PM


Says the Bartender:

I would love to serve drinks
But I'm runnin' with freaks
Andrew Scott and Doctor Moose

I hope to be there soon
With these two crazy loons
Cause they got the happy juice

Lady in Red
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 147

20 posted 2000-02-16 06:38 PM


Oh my goodness what a nice place this is !
Many dance partners, a Lady's bliss
I see Royalty over there from the Stute !
Hmmmm, he really looks very cute  
I see a resemblance with Elvis
Although I wonder if he can swing that pelvis  
Dear Crachet you took me to paradise
I think we will dance untill sunrise  

Anyone cares to dance ?

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA
21 posted 2000-02-16 07:22 PM


We made it! We made it!
Just a few bottles shy
WOW! Hey, check HER out Moose
Some candy for the eye

Say Lady In Red
Do you care to dance?
I've got Elvis' hip
And I'm one for romance

I do like your color
Red is my favorite
Reminds me of fire
And how hot things can get

I'm also a fine cook
I make the best 'Stute stew
It's like parafin gel
That just stick to you

So what do you say
Shall we dance this night?
Come melt with me
And burn in the light

Nurse Crachet
Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318
They know where I am!
22 posted 2000-02-16 07:36 PM


Hello!!!!!!!!

[This message has been edited by Nurse Crachet (edited 02-16-2000).]

Lady in Red
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 147

23 posted 2000-02-16 07:54 PM


Hmmm, a dance with you my dearest King
A slow dance, or do you rather swing ?
"It's now or never" my favourite song
And your arms seem just where I belong
Just tell me King, my crayon sweet
Are your feet made of royal concrete ?
I sometimes make a wrong step you know
And bruised in my life many a toe
But if you don't mind these little surprises
Let us dance, until the sun rises !

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA
24 posted 2000-02-16 08:10 PM


Lady In Red I'll dance with you
There is no wrong your toes could do
I'll be your king if you my queen
Each royal step a perfect scene
We'll swing and sway, we'll dip and bend
To heaven above your feet I'll send
We'll dance on clouds within the sky
We'll make the stars shimmer and sigh

Nurse C will morn the chance she had
Stuck with the others... that's so sad

[This message has been edited by Andrew Scott (edited 02-16-2000).]

HelmutB
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 964
Canada
25 posted 2000-02-16 08:39 PM


Well there are so many that wanting to dance
so I think I'm down here without a big chance
But still the poem so well it is
And yes I like dancing I think it's a bliss


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


Nurse Crachet
Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318
They know where I am!
26 posted 2000-02-16 08:46 PM


Oh, my HelmutB dear
I'll take thee hand
to the dance floor we go
for this is my final dance.

[This message has been edited by Nurse Crachet (edited 02-16-2000).]

Breathe~
Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315
Washington...
27 posted 2000-02-16 11:10 PM


I was scared to peek...
but was pleasantly surprised...
such a lovely speak...
so rhythmic to the eyes...

but as down the page I go...
perusing the insanity flow..
I soon begin to realize...
my first instincts were wise..
I am now reneging my "buts"
cuz you guys are all nuts!!...
And what The Stute now seriously lacks...
Are you peeps with coats tied in back!!!...

*GRIN*



 Freedom of expression is the watch word...


passing shadows
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displaced
28 posted 2004-05-21 03:33 AM


good write!
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