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Can You Dance With Me?
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Can You Dance With Me? |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
Can You Dance With Me Can you dance with me and float me away to the moon kissing the sun? Can you dance with me one on one till I feel the dew of morning? Can you dance with me one step at a time till under our feet the floor collapses? Can you dance with me like I'm your princess and my gold slippers are the key to our universe? Can you dance with me tonight for I'm free to be whomever you wish me to be? |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
May I have this dance? Just kidding. But really this is a very beautiful poem. I really enjoyed reading it. I'll be looking for more of you in the future. Thanks. Chris |
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Wizzard Member
since 2000-02-09
Posts 209 |
A dancing nurse that`ll be who ever I want her to be.HHHMMmmmmmmm I think I`ll take you just as you are  Where do I sign up? For the nurse of Passion  Thank you for sharing.< !signature--> Today is the first day of the rest of my life. And the begining of a new one. [This message has been edited by Wizzard (edited 02-15-2000).] |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
I must confess I'm an alias escaping from the Stute. I am the one they want well done so I've left for greener pastures. If you know not of the Stute I am the brute they will tell you. For now I'm out and venturing about with the sane of Passions. Thanks for your kind comments, and Wizzard I love the rose all the same. Maybe you can come visit at the stute I know they'll drag me back there, cause they love me...LOL |
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Justin Nuendo Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 86Ozzz |
Thank goodness, I got here Justin Thyme Now she even started to rhyme ! ARGH, where’s the King when ya need him most ! She’ll soon turn these folks into ghosts ! Hey, what you’re dancing with ? LOL LOL LOL !!!!!!!! That yar true love prince ? That’s a rubber doll !!!!! Justin N  |
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Bashful Junior Member
since 1999-10-22
Posts 28 |
Yo nursy dear!! *blushing deeply and digging my toes into the ground* You lookin for a priince charming to dance with ya? I'd love to dance with such a wonderful nursey. *swallowing the lump in my throat* PLLLLLLLEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAASSSSSSSEEEEEEEEE don't turn down little old Bashful. |
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Justin Kace Member
since 1999-09-13
Posts 82Oz |
Justin Kace you want to know I have to tell you this Since from the 'stute I saw you go You're poems haven't missed You're writing like you're Justin Tact Not Justin Sayne at all Good poem here, it's Justin Fact Take pride in it - Stand tall... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nurse Crachet.....it's wonderful to see you out of the stute, escape has done wonders for your literary expressions. Freedom is very becoming of you  |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Did they teach you to waltz in the stute, good nurse, or the texas two step is my suit. I really like your dancing attitude, and this poem. |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
I'm blushing now, you can't see but I give my vow for it's how my mirror shows me. Justin N: This Rubber doll I hold is yours from when you got him stuck inside your dripping wet drawers. Bashful: How could I say no to you my friend I know you'll always stand beside me until the very sad and lonely end. Justin Kace: Thank you for taking notice I'm glad you did not miss my new home in this palace. Hoot_ Owl_ Rn: What a kind lady you are your words will take you far. Want to let loose in the bar? Martie: Thank you, LOL teach us, I was head honcho and you can't teach those old Justin's new tricks, as for me I'm learning now quickly. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
This is a wonderful poem. It uses imagery, simplicity, honesty, and romanticism ... a poem worthy of your real name, not your 'stute alias. Just thought I'd let you know that your writing is maturing and you have done a wonderful job with this one! Thanks for the read, m'friend. -doreen |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
Doreen, I thank you from the depths of my heart. Your high regards concerning my poetry are planted in my brain for further analysis. [This message has been edited by Nurse Crachet (edited 02-16-2000).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
as i stare longingly into the stute wishing i could get in there i heard a crazy story from a coot that some one actually escaped i swear why would anyone wanna leave the sanctity of the stute its warm theres lotsa joking and all the cheerios you could ever wish for since the little holes keep from choking who are the inmates who are the wardens who who who who i sound like an owl nurse cratchet dear security man i saw her running east with a trowel a dirty dirty for digging trowel you say she is the only one ever been freed thaz cuz its so warm in the stute and the cheerios and comradrie we all need so if her cell is free sweet guard wont you find me a bowl o cheerios and ill start penning unpleasant poetry never again quite so seriose |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful poem, Nurse Cratchet! It has a lovely, magical air to it! Walt- Great poem too! Denise |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Nurse C my dear It is my fear That your dance card is full If not, then when May I cut in Please dance with this here fool I cut a rug And jitter bug Better than Fred Astair I swing and sway Tango, ballet I can bop with real flair Give me a chance At just one dance I'll show you who's the King I'm not Elvis But I've got his pelvis And it's a marvelous thing |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
Yes Dear Andrew, I do see the line it stretches very long yet there are many hours, many song that I can repeat and dance with you. I left the stute with a distinct clue to guide you swiftly on your way instead you drove around town all day. I gave you the first chance to show me your side of romance then you and Dr. Moose together steal a car loaded in leather. You came to rescue me from myself but had more interest for what's on the shelf. So here I came to dance and since I got the chance I threw off these spiked heels and took to the floor to see how it feels. Partner after partner danced so fine so I guess you'll be next when I reach the end of the line. [This message has been edited by Nurse Crachet (edited 02-16-2000).] |
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E.Fudd Junior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 38Dolgeville, N.Y.U.S. |
Why... Nurse C. , they're playing the "Acrostic Waltz" one two three, one two three... Institutionally speaking While the floorboards are creaking Only a fool could say no Undeniably vibrant , as Dogs to a hydrant I'm drawn to your charms and must go Everyone's talking Despicably squawking Embellishing what they don't know Let idle tongues chatter It doesn't matter Good dancers are rare as green snow Hope you've had fun , now That this dance is done Each step being taken real slow Divinely you dance, glad that we had this chance (for the others to put on this show) [This message has been edited by E.Fudd (edited 02-16-2000).] |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Nurse Crachet, I really enjoyed this dance with you. I see have have been remis is missing your other poetry. A mistake I intend to correct. Parker |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
Oh my, it's getting steamy in here, I need a drink, Bartender |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Says the Bartender: I would love to serve drinks But I'm runnin' with freaks Andrew Scott and Doctor Moose I hope to be there soon With these two crazy loons Cause they got the happy juice |
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Lady in Red Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 147 |
Oh my goodness what a nice place this is ! Many dance partners, a Lady's bliss I see Royalty over there from the Stute ! Hmmmm, he really looks very cute  I see a resemblance with Elvis Although I wonder if he can swing that pelvis Dear Crachet you took me to paradise I think we will dance untill sunrise Anyone cares to dance ? |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
We made it! We made it! Just a few bottles shy WOW! Hey, check HER out Moose Some candy for the eye Say Lady In Red Do you care to dance? I've got Elvis' hip And I'm one for romance I do like your color Red is my favorite Reminds me of fire And how hot things can get I'm also a fine cook I make the best 'Stute stew It's like parafin gel That just stick to you So what do you say Shall we dance this night? Come melt with me And burn in the light |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
Hello!!!!!!!! [This message has been edited by Nurse Crachet (edited 02-16-2000).] |
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Lady in Red Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 147 |
Hmmm, a dance with you my dearest King A slow dance, or do you rather swing ? "It's now or never" my favourite song And your arms seem just where I belong Just tell me King, my crayon sweet Are your feet made of royal concrete ? I sometimes make a wrong step you know And bruised in my life many a toe But if you don't mind these little surprises Let us dance, until the sun rises ! |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Lady In Red I'll dance with you There is no wrong your toes could do I'll be your king if you my queen Each royal step a perfect scene We'll swing and sway, we'll dip and bend To heaven above your feet I'll send We'll dance on clouds within the sky We'll make the stars shimmer and sigh Nurse C will morn the chance she had Stuck with the others... that's so sad [This message has been edited by Andrew Scott (edited 02-16-2000).] |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Well there are so many that wanting to dance so I think I'm down here without a big chance But still the poem so well it is And yes I like dancing I think it's a bliss The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
Oh, my HelmutB dear I'll take thee hand to the dance floor we go for this is my final dance. [This message has been edited by Nurse Crachet (edited 02-16-2000).] |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
I was scared to peek... but was pleasantly surprised... such a lovely speak... so rhythmic to the eyes... but as down the page I go... perusing the insanity flow.. I soon begin to realize... my first instincts were wise.. I am now reneging my "buts" cuz you guys are all nuts!!... And what The Stute now seriously lacks... Are you peeps with coats tied in back!!!... *GRIN* Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
good write! |
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