Open Poetry #6 |
Into My Pillow |
CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Into My Pillow Raindrops tap loudly on the rooftop winds rattle my window panes Lightening flashes across the sky suddenly illuminating thousands of sad memories I hope to forget. For a moment I thought I saw you peering lovingly at me from the doorway, but as the next bolt of lightening re-illuminated the room I realized I had imagined it And then, there was only the rain and the lonely desperate sounds of my weeping With my face pressed hard into my pillow. Christopher M. Grimm |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
I'm not usually one to write sad or depressing words...but some circumstances and occasions do warrant an occasional tear of grief. Sometimes I find that writing about things, whether something that happened in my life or in the life of a friend or even a casual acquaintance can sometimes help others to understand their grief, or maybe just help to realize we are all just human. Anyway, enough rambling. I hope you all enjoy. Chris |
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infinat3 sadn3ss Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 85somerset england |
wonderful , i have been there before , keep at it even if you think that your poetry is rubbish because it is exelent |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Chris, you've brought this scene to life, and wonderfully so. Claire |
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jascanvey Member
since 1999-12-26
Posts 130England |
Chris, this is very sad. I must admit a thunderstorm makes me feel this way too. I loved the poem, thanks for sharing it. |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
This is very touching Chris. I too have been there, and I think you've said it very well. "Sometimes I find that writing about things, whether something that happened in my life or in the life of a friend or even a casual acquaintance can sometimes help others to understand their grief, or maybe just help to realize we are all just human. " This is one of the greatest benefits of exercising our skills and talents as writers, it provides such an outlet for us. I will look forward to reading more of your work. |
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Rosalind Palafox
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MemberPosts 88 |
*sobbing*It's okay. i've felt the pillow against my face so many times. "Love knows hidden paths."-German proverb |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
This is the first of your work I have had the privalage of reading. It is very heart felt and I enjoyed it. Though pain is something we don't like to write about, it is a fact of life. Write it tends to purge the pain from our souls. It does not have to be a personal experience piece for us to elimate that pain we see around us everyday. Well written, I hope to read more of you in the future. |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Thanks everyone for the kind words. This really means a lot to me. Chris |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Chris~ First of all, I like this. Next ... could this be one of those 'Dedication' things ? Yeah, I think so. I felt the dampness on the pillow as the 'outside' storm subsided. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
wow, this is incredibly sad Chris....but none the less, well written |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
A very haunting poem indeed CM...Maybe that next bolt of lightning will bring her back to you!!!!!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Well done! *S* |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh, the stories a pillow could tell. Very sad and well written poem. |
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ill_tactics Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149 |
this is a nice poem, all the memories of the ones you love, seem to creep up on you. I know that feeling, the smell of their cologne, or the image as you sit and think of them. Very strong. Keep up the words...Much love, One love, PEACE |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Thanks everyone for the kind words and praise. Glad everyone enjoyed it. Thanks Chris |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
I HATE pillows...darn tear stained fluffs!they're Evil things! I guess I related to this more than I care to admit... Extremely vivid..nice writing Chris... Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this aches |
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