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The Storm About Me
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The Storm About Me |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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THE STORM ABOUT ME I lie awake in my bed rain harshly pounding the patio awning. Each little drop intent on robbing me of all sleep as I muse over them. Millions of them, billions perhaps, an endless sea of souls all of the same origin yet separate entities now falling headlong to their death. I ponder needlessly. Is it possible two of these droplets could come together in flight? If they did, could they stay united until they crashed unto the earth below as one? I somehow doubt it. What with winds swirling about, ever in a raging storm torn from the world they once knew the world that was shared amongst them How could it be? Lightning blasts ceremoniously across the sky. For a brief second I can vividly see the world around me. Then nothing, nothing but darkness. I close my eyes in hopes to recapture the vision and I count to myself. One thousand one. There, lightning strikes once more. The vision never clearly pictured in mind lost to a glare of red behind yet still unopened eyes. Michael Anderson It's the little things you take for granted, That'll mean the most to you when they're gone. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent writing, Michael. As always!  Denise |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Michael, I have never seen the rain that way. It seems so sad. Your words are beautiful. Thanks for sharing! -SEA |
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Wizzard Member
since 2000-02-09
Posts 209 |
Brighter day`s soon will come, And with a heart as BIG as your`s, Im sure Michael you`ll have no problem, Opening other door`s. Another nice writing. AAwww what the heck. From one guy to another,Happy Valentine`s Day Michael  Today is the first day of the rest of my life. And the begining of a new one. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
My gosh! You are getting prolific here! Rain never sounded like this before! Excellent! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
You've unraveled the mysteries of rain with this one Michael...and to think what beautiful things you come up with while getting no sleep at night!!  May your sleepless night always be filled with such thought...hauntigly poetic m'friend!!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Rain comes when angles cry So they told me when I was a kid I guess a lot of angles must have cried and all those tears have died This only can mean one thing for you And that is that the sun will soon shine too Nice poem with so much thought about a simple event that nature presents. Well done And Wizzard you are right, what the heck Happy V-Day  )The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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christies heart Member
since 1999-08-10
Posts 189NJ, USA |
This really touched me. Storms have always meant something to me. Usually memories and often times storms have been a symbol of terrible anxiety.  This seemed to touch on that. Very nice poem. Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians Native American prayer |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Michael, excellent indeed!! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Michael~ When the storm subsides the thunderous memories remain. We gather and share the sunrays until the next coming of the rain. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You've put new life into a raindrop. Marvelous. Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Some powerful images here |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I loved this, Michael, especially your "ponderings" about the possibilities of two from the same beginning, falling separately, becoming one in motion and traveling to their end...a lovely metaphor. A striking title, also. Claire |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Micheal, Time and distance might help this storm, or just wade right in and call to the rain maker and ask how this storm ends. You may already know the answer, but I you're not getting a direct answer to your hopes than maybe the rain maker is just as confused. Ask and you shall know. If all those emotions were true, then you owe it to each other to be clear, fair and truthful. The fair thing to do is to make things very clear, and accept the final answer. Then maybe the friendship can be salvaged, but acceptance is a must on your part. I feel your pain, been their. Otherwise just disregard what I just said as the wisdom of a fool. Good luck, and may the rain maker who's always watching clear up this storm for you. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Well I must admit I still find it suprising my free verse is so readily accepted here. You all are probably just feeling sorry for me, huh? Wizzard, doors will always open I am sure, but walking through them is where the problem will lie for me. Devina, there many other things, (better things), I'd just assume be dwelling on at night...LOL Hopefully soon I will be writing of sunshine and smiles instead of rain and tears. HelmutB, I think I'm probably any angel's most feared assignment. I doubt many would cry for me. christies heart, Storms have always been quite symbolic of the world of emotion I live in. Dark and raging...many times uncontrollable and almost always with those I share my life with just wishing for the storm to pass, even though by all factors, I am the storm they are wishing away. I'm glad you could relate so well to this poem. Marge, walking in such Darkness it's easy to get lost. I fear there will be none to guide me to the sunrays you speak of. Haleyja, of all the things I hold to be true, which isn't much at this point, I never will doubt the Rainmaker or the path He has set before me. No matter what pains I have endured or have yet to endure, I know so long as I don't turn my back on Him, I will know what true love feels like in the end. Thank you everyone else for the compliments and replies. Michael |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
This is sensitive strong verse Michael - and I really like it - and am touched by it. an endless sea of souls all of the same origin yet separate entities now falling headlong to their death. Such a lovely description! Hugs K 'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Michael have faith in yourself! This is excellent imagery, excellent writing! It came alive before my eyes! EXCELLENT, EXCELLENT!!!!!!! <*\\\>< There's only two ways you can go... One way you can save your riches, And the other will save your soul. Rich Mullins |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Michael, my best to you. Very sad but lovely poem. |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Your portrayal is wonderful... I have always loved the rain... how sometimes invigorating...other times well matched with a somber mood... but mostly ...how rain washes away the old layers of life and leaves everything freshly cleansed...almost purified... Another one of my goofy thoughts...  )Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
A great soak. Mike |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
There, lightning strikes once more. The vision never clearly pictured in mind lost to a glare of red behind yet still unopened eyes. Great swirling images through-out this one. Impeccable as always. Jenny |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
I like your thought about "Is it possible two of these droplets could come together in flight? If they did, could they stay united until they crashed unto the earth below as one?" I'll have to watch, really really closely.. HUSG Ouvrir mon coeur et âme |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
I have never seen the rain quite so sadly before. I am sorry for whatever storm rages in your life right now mIchael, believe me I am making my way slowly through one or two of my own. ) I would like to remind you one of the best things about the rain, one of the things I lov emost, is how fresh and crisp and clean and NEW the air is when its over. Hugs my friend. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I think I have been under the same rain cloud as you today. But, just yesterday, I was a silver lining. Wonderful writing Michael! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is beautiful, Michael... and to save you the wondering... I'm too busy being jealous of your writing talents to feel sorry for you! *G* |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
It never rains, but it pours, eh my friend?... um... somebody said that before, didn't they? |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you described it well |
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