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Martie

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0 posted 2000-02-16 04:00 PM

Blame this Down sky

The sky is dripping
and I listen
as if it
held the secret key
that lets joy in
or locks it out.
This down sky
feels like something
that has crept out
from a corner with
tactless thud and blunder,
that does not belong
in my soaring.

I know the feathered lightness
that was sun’s transparent splendor
just yesterday in bejeweled longing
when sweet bliss dwelt with me
and my heart fluttered
with scented magnolia zephyr.

See me melt in this dark sky
and rain pieces of salty feeling.
It is the wet that ceases fluttering
and drowns this crisp heart sound
in muffled treachery.

Clear me into blue
for my heart cries with missing
and time won’t wait for wisdom
that tears write.

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 02-16-2000).]

Balladeer

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1 posted 2000-02-16 04:15 PM

Let me be the first of many, I am sure, who will say how beautiful this piece is!!

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2000-02-16 06:06 PM

Let me be the second to say I enjoyed this poem. Good paint and well done. *L* Sy

Corazon
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3 posted 2000-02-16 06:11 PM

ok and third one is a charm *g*....as is this poem....rainy days and hearts, and wisdom that tears write....wow....great poem

Martie

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4 posted 2000-02-16 08:53 PM

Hey, #1,2 and 3----you guys a great!! Thank you for reading and for your thoughtful replies.

HelmutB
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5 posted 2000-02-16 09:07 PM

I know I'm late
but now I'm here
I guess I almost made # Vier (four, sorry the German is better for the ryhme)
A lovely poem, you did it again Martie
Well done
Thanks dear

The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Martie

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6 posted 2000-02-16 09:39 PM

Helmut, I love your German. Thank you for speaking it to me so sweet.

Denise

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7 posted 2000-02-16 11:38 PM

Beautifully done, Martie!

Denise

Martie

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8 posted 2000-02-17 12:40 PM

Thank you Denise. I've missed seeing you and sure glad you are back!

Meadowmuse
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9 posted 2000-02-17 12:47 PM

"It is the wet that ceases fluttering
and drowns this crisp heart sound
in muffled treachery."

I love how you give nature so much presence in your work, Martie. This one's a treasure.

Claire

Martie

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10 posted 2000-02-17 10:15 AM

Thank you Claire. I treasure your replies.

passing shadows
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11 posted 2004-05-21 03:27 AM

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