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rainchild
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since 2000-04-14

Posts 8

0 posted 2000-04-15 08:35 PM

The Storm Within

The storms of life are ragging.
Strong waves of fear dash high.
I feel my spirit sinking low beneath
the crashing tide.
With each new wave my mind descends
down to a dark despair.
I feel the cords of grief and pain
clinging, holding me there.
I cry for help yet no one hears,
no person heeds my call.
Or did I even make a sound?
Should I try swimming to the shore,
or go ahead and drown?

Jeffrey Carter

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since 2000-04-08

Posts 2367
State of constant confusion!

1 posted 2000-04-15 08:38 PM

Very interesting way of showing despair..most excellent writing skills

Jeffrey

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

2 posted 2000-04-15 10:40 PM

I'm sure everyone can relate to these feelings at one time or another. I love the sea imagery.

Denise

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2000-04-15 11:33 PM

Nice writing. I can feel your dispair, yet hear your cry for help. Very good job conveying your emotions. Welcome to Passions!! Looking forward to more.

Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

Alwye

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since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

4 posted 2000-04-16 12:53 PM

I too can relate well to this. Sometimes it's so hard to swim back to shore, isn't it? Powerful and well done work here.

*Krista Knutson*

As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins.
~*Albert Schweitzer*~

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2000-04-16 09:38 AM

RainChild~
A nicely written piece.
Raging storms can sometimes determine
our path by giving us challenges to
either fight against or flow with.
I liked the way you portrayed the struggle
in your writing.
Always swim to shore ...
there's an abundance of opportunity
waiting on the next wave of storm.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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