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Your Majesty (from Open #2) |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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I linger there upon your shore And long to linger...evermore And gaze...forever...at your sea -Such captivating majesty. Your rolling waves crash on the rocks And dance about your weathered docks; Gulls swoop and soar above each crest Inviting me to dream...to rest. Your 'Lovely Ladies' line each street And charm the hearts of all they meet And bid them graciously to stay; Abide beside the ocean spray. I long to gaze upon your sea -Such captivating majesty; Upon your shore I long to stay Forever...always...fair Cape May. (Note: the 'Lovely Ladies' are beautiful Victorian homes for which Cape May is famous.) |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Denise, very desciptive! Wonderful poem! <*\\\>< When you can't make up your mind Which way is right for you, Stop and softly ask yourself, What Would Jesus Do? |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sounds like a place I'd love to go to. I miss the ocean so much. Maybe my hubby will take me for my b-day this year! Beautiful poem!  -SEA |
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Denise
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Thank you, Rebecca and SEA for reading and for your kind comments! (I wish I could read and reply to more poetry but things seem to be getting worse. I have been trying to get back into the Forums for about an hour and I was just now able to. Sooooo frustrating.) Goodnight everybody  |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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This is where I am going tomorrow everybody!!! Yippee!!! Finally!!! The first time in two years!!! I am so excited!!!  Denise |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Have a wonderful time, Denise. Bring some poems back with you |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
a lovely poem, denise! And, I'm very envious, would love to go too! Cor |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Denise - Your poem is a picture postcard, just beautiful....Hope you have a wonderful trip!!!! Bonnie |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Can I get in your suitcase....please!!! This got my wonderlust going big time. What a lovely description. Have a wonderful time! |
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Denise
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Thanks Balladeer, Corinne, Bonnie and Martie! I'm glad you liked it! I'm just going on a day trip but I will make the most of it! Wish you all could be there too! Denise |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
D~ Nice poem. I think that you are missing the smell of the water though. The sea has that certain smell - you can almost taste it, don't you agree? Also, the second line contains "linger" a word you've used on the first line. Perhaps, "My gaze lingers on your shore, My eyes long to drink it evermore" or something even more catchy? Tinker around a little bit more, I think best regards, bboog |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Denise ... I can see why you are excited If it's half as nice as you've portrayed here ... then I know you'll have a wonderful day Beautiful poem Rex}<{{{{o> |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Denise, Have a wonderful time, this poem was a delight. *L* Sy |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Thank you bboog, Rex and Seymour! Glad you all liked it! bboog- there's nothing like the smell of the sea, that's for sure....perhaps another poem in the works to capture that! I purposely (I rarely repeat a word in a poem) used the word linger that way for emphasis...to catch the sense of my desire to never leave. I like your suggestions though they are good! Perhaps I will use them too in another poem! Thank you for the inspiration! I need some! Rex- it's even more beautiful than words can capture! Thanks! Sy- Thank you so much! Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Denise...this absolutely sings itself instead of being read. By the way, I can't wait to see those 'Lovely Ladies' with you |
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Denise
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Thanks Ruth! I can't wait either! Denise |
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