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* So Far Away with a Sunburn *
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* So Far Away with a Sunburn * |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas 
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* So Far Away with a Sunburn *  I'm one of those stars, you barely can see surrounded by millions much closer than me - I'm so far away, my light's just a wink Far off in the void of deep darkness, I blink... It's so very cold, out here all alone that brightness they shine with - I've never known. Can anyone see me - does anyone care? I desperately blink, but it gets me nowhere... How did I ever get so far away, from the rest of the stars - did they push me away? Or did I make this choice, to be here by myself, a dim little light on the very back shelf.....? Does something inside me cause me to be shy, where I stand all alone in a corner & cry? Wanting someone to touch me, but cringe if they do wanting someone to reach out to me, like you do... I want to be seen, yet refuse to shine bright - Scared to mingle with other stars there in the night... So alive, yet so timid - what's so wrong with me? I break down and cry when you reach out to me... I know I am safe with you, please pull me near Reel me in closer to those that I fear... Retrieve me from distant dark galaxies lost I want to be seen - no matter the cost. I want to be close to the stars that shine bright so maybe on me, they can shed some warm light. You reach out to me, and you say it's not hard, Help me feel safe, so I'll let down my guard. Everytime I have been close to someone They lash out and burn me, intense like the sun... No wonder I've drifted so far out to sea - a dim little star, no one sees me, but me........ - Written for my newfound brother, who has shown me safety, and is helping to reel me in, from my fears of being alone and misunderstood. He knows my heart, and my void. Thank you Robert - thank God for fishing poles, and you.  |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Absolutly lovely. Kind of sad, but it warmed my heart. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
From where I sit I see one star that shines brighter than all. Me thinks it's just looking the wrong direction.  If you turn around maybe you'll find your the first and brightest of all.Michael [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 04-14-2000).] |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Effigy - Glad I could warm you...I'm trying real hard! Michael - LOL at you! Think I'm just turned around, 'eh? Hope so, cause if not, that means you're further back there than me! Maybe we both need reeling in! Thanks man. |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Out of millions of stars In the heavens above We call a few ours And give them our love. It seems like a haze We all try to see through Of the stars that I gaze, I'll hold on to you. So be there for me And share with me your light And together we'll see Through darkest night. Thank you for letting me be there for you. I'm glad I can help if only a little bit. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
and thank God for Brothers! Very sensitive poem your have written. I'm going to put an extra long line on my casting reel and see if i can catch a lonely star. More wonderful writing from a talented pen. A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Where's my telescope?....lol Very touching poem pFF You just keep getting better and better keep 'em coming Jeffrey |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I have to agree with Michael on this one. . . take another look. . . I see a bright star too. . . Wonderful poem.. . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I too see a bright star in you, Femme. It can be so easy to feel as if you're the dim, distant, forgotten one, but even if just one person understands you, the light begins to glow brighter. Truly beautiful work, I can relate to this a great deal. *Krista Knutson* As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins. ~*Albert Schweitzer*~ |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Just have to say this poem seems very unique to me, just as unique as the poetress who wrote it. It has a very lovely feel to it, as you mature I am sure that this star will find the special path that God intends for her to travel, and I wouldn't be surprised if her light sparkles a tab brighter than all the rest. God bless. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Robert - Oh...you've helped more than just a little - and thank you for the nice reply here! Love you too big bro! Danny - Good luck with your....er....pole! LOL Jeffrey - See me now? I'm winking! LOLSven - *blushing*....why thank you sir!  Alwye - I've always thought you and I were alot alike in our emotions...so I know you can relate - it's tough sometimes, but you're right. I did find one person (besides my bro) who knows me and understands me - and it has helped alot. I don't feel so disconnected, you know? Thanks girl! Septsong - I like being unique! I still have a long way to go, but I'm trying to head that direction...down that path you speak of. Thank you for your encouragement. It always means alot to me when you reply. I value your wisdom, and concern. |
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Richter_9 Junior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 41Whereever I happen to be at the time |
Perhaps you are gleaming so bright you simply outshine all around you. You are not alone out there, this much I can assure you. A star so bright must hold many wishes, of that I am certain also. Rich |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
[delete] [delete] [delete] Have you ever gotten on the message board whle you were a little intoxicated? And then figured out that you were saying things you probably shouldn't say? Or might regret? Or simply things that might give too much aaway? =) Anyways... I have... as a matter of fact I just did... so I'm going to leave it at a simple compliment on your poem. I really enjoyed it and I really like the "cosmic" medium to so much of your poetry... I might even venture to say that everytiem I look up the starts I think of you..... buuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuut... I looked up at LEAST once tonight and thoguht "GOD PLEEEEASE let them stop spinning"... soooooo.... anyways... I love the way your words carress my screen... keep it up! < !signature-->"The storm rises up when the shadows descend every beat of my heart every day without end I will stand like a rock I will bend till I break till theres no more to give if thats what it takes I will risk everything I will fight I will bleed I will lay down my life if thats what you need every second I live thats the promise I make" I have no idea who wrote this... tell me if you know. =) [This message has been edited by WhiteNite (edited 04-15-2000).] |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Richter 9 - - Er...Rich...if that is what I shall call you...your words are very flattering indeed. I know that even with all the millions of stars out there - there always seems to be those scattered few who aren't as bright and noticeable...those particular stars have always caught my interest... WhiteNite - - ROFLMAO at you being intoxicated! Looks like your friday night was far more exciting than mine! I had to work! ACK I'm curious as to just what all you deleted sir! LOL Thank you for thinking of me... I caress your screen, 'eh? That sounds like safe....uh...caressing to me. About all you can get from that, is *static* & *dust* !As long as it washes off - hey, it's harmless! LOL |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Richter 9 - Hey, I reread what I just said to you - that wink at the end was not to imply you are one of those *dim* stars, and so on...I do love what few posts you have shared with us - and your poetry is in no way dim or less than others, by no means. In fact, it rings very familiar to me...it's your style, your words...that's all. Keep 'em coming, and keep on shining bright! WhiteNite - Hey, have those stars stopped spinning now sir? Need some Tylenol for that whopping hangover you must surely have ??  I'll be in touch, ok? hehehe Might have to wipe some of that harf off your face that's still there!  Ewww....ROFLMAO |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Dont you know pFF? All us here at passions have telescopes! We can see you bright as any star Excellent poem. |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
So you want to know what I deleted? ME TOO! [lol] I can barely remember typing what I did. The stars stopped spinning shortly before the room started. =) [G] Nope.. no yucky stuff for me. I did have a hangover though and thanks for the offer, but Alka-Seltzer baby! It's the only way to go.. read the box sometimes. "For OVER ENDULGANCE of food and BEVERAGES"... It's got asprin for the pain and it settles your stomache too... just drop 'em both into a shot of water and down it real fast and in about 30 minutes you're ready to work... ("Assuming you could keep it down blech!) Which is fortunate sense I had to do that work thing today. =) As for the fun part... 'eh... it was better than being here but I probably would have gotten more from reading poetry than I did from that bottle of Paisano. But it was fun to watch the little bubles rise from the Alka-Seltzer. =) Anyway.. still recovering kinda... I need food! Later... and hey.... I'm sober.. and I STILL think it it was a great poem! "The storm rises up when the shadows descend every beat of my heart every day without end I will stand like a rock I will bend till I break till theres no more to give if thats what it takes I will risk everything I will fight I will bleed I will lay down my life if thats what you need every second I live thats the promise I make" I have no idea who wrote this... tell me if you know. =) |
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Brent Hotchkin Junior Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 42Florida,USA |
Dear PFF, WOW your words have touched my heart once again. If I might add there is nothing dim about the light you shead. Although I must say once again I can relate. |
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