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The Dream I Dread (serious poem i guess)
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The Dream I Dread (serious poem i guess) |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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I was just enjoying a midday’s lazy sleep < !signature-->The kind where so often I dream bout Meryl Streep But then as I was clutching for my absent wife The dream came I always dread; the album of my life Photos of times I miss flashing before my eyes Their speed of arrival reminds me how time flies First I saw my mother she seemed to be so real We were laughing loudly high on the ferris wheel I saw Grandma tending the flea market table She’d let me make the sell as if she wasn’t able An old picture of my Dad at the football game Before a stroke made him forget his very name I began to watch myself crying in my bed Watching my friends leave me some for the dead Then it all circled in on the home I left behind I left for a better life I thought I’d never find Then a picture of a phone hard to understand Why was ringing incessantly then was in my hand Relief struck me for these times I do really miss Smiling as my wife said, she just called to blow a kiss All Day I Dream About Stanzas!! [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 04-14-2000).] |
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NamelessOne Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 197Biloxi MS |
Great poem with a cool ending ,i liked it |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Walt, This is so becoming of you. You should write "serious poems" more often. ...but don't quit writing the funny ones yuh Jeffrey |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Wow. So sad, it captured me the hole way throuhg and I like the ending too. A good reminder a little love can make all the pain in the world go away. "The storm rises up when the shadows descend every beat of my heart every day without end I will stand like a rock I will bend till I break till theres no more to give if thats what it takes I will risk everything I will fight I will bleed I will lay down my life if thats what you need every second I live thats the promise I make" I have no idea who wrote this... tell me if you know. =) |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i'm glad ya'll liked it  All Day I Dream About Stanzas!! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I like this too, Walt. Its poignancy brings the reader right into the dream with you. Thanks. ~ Claire |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is a very touching poem, Walt. Very well done! Denise |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I echo Denise ... very touching, indeed, Walt ...... "This is where you will win the battle .... in the playhouse of your mind." Maxwell Maltz |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Well said and super finish. Brought some memories back to me. Funny how some moments in our lives are seldom appreciated until reflected upon. Really enjoyed reading this poem..good job with the rhyme also. A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Excellent poem walt, and the ending was just perfect |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
...Sure am glad she called....  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Walt this is very touching! Awww...good thing it was your wife yanno? Or you'd be in trouble  Excellent work! |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Walt, This is great, i enjoyed it. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thank yuh for excusing the bad meter and lookin past to see whats in the poem yuh yuh yuh All Day I Dream About Stanzas!! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Bad meter- my BUTT!!  This was one of the best I've seen from you...shows much heart dear...loved the ending!!!Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
Hey maaan!! this one's pretty sweet! because i know you...i have a little bit of an advantage to the insight and where you're coming from. later, cruz |
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Gossamerwings Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 207 |
This is wonderful! I loved every line! Superb, sweet ending! Gossamerwings ;) |
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