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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 2000-04-14 01:29 AM


I was just enjoying a midday’s lazy sleep
The kind where so often I dream bout Meryl Streep
But then as I was clutching for my absent wife
The dream came I always dread; the album of my life

Photos of times I miss flashing before my eyes
Their speed of arrival reminds me how time flies
First I saw my mother she seemed to be so real
We were laughing loudly high on the ferris wheel

I saw Grandma tending the flea market table
She’d let me make the sell as if she wasn’t able
An old picture of my Dad at the football game
Before a stroke made him forget his very name

I began to watch myself crying in my bed
Watching my friends leave me some for the dead
Then it all circled in on the home I left behind
I left for a better life I thought I’d never find

Then a picture of a phone hard to understand
Why was ringing incessantly then was in my hand
Relief struck me for these times I do really miss
Smiling as my wife said, she just called to blow a kiss


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 All Day I Dream About Stanzas!!




[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 04-14-2000).]

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NamelessOne
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1 posted 2000-04-14 01:32 AM


Great poem with a cool ending ,i liked it
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2 posted 2000-04-14 01:34 AM


Walt,
This is so becoming of you. You should write "serious poems" more often. ...but don't quit writing the funny ones yuh

Jeffrey

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3 posted 2000-04-14 01:52 AM


Wow.  So sad, it captured me the hole way throuhg and I like the ending too.  

A good reminder a little love can make all the pain in the world go away.

 "The storm rises up when the shadows descend
every beat of my heart every day without end
I will stand like a rock I will bend till I break
till theres no more to give if thats what it takes
I will risk everything I will fight I will bleed
I will lay down my life if thats what you need
every second I live thats the promise I make"

I have no idea who wrote this... tell me if you know. =)



wayoutwalt
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4 posted 2000-04-14 07:17 AM


i'm glad ya'll liked it  

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Meadowmuse
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5 posted 2000-04-14 11:11 AM


I like this too, Walt. Its poignancy brings the reader right into the dream with you. Thanks.

~ Claire

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6 posted 2000-04-14 11:16 AM


This is a very touching poem, Walt. Very well done!

Denise

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7 posted 2000-04-14 11:22 AM


I echo Denise ... very touching, indeed, Walt ......

 "This is where you will win the battle .... in the playhouse of your mind."
Maxwell Maltz

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8 posted 2000-04-14 03:48 PM


Well said and super finish.  Brought some memories back to me.  Funny how some moments in our lives are seldom appreciated until reflected upon.  
Really enjoyed reading this poem..good job with the rhyme also.

 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.


Mistikman
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9 posted 2000-04-14 05:54 PM


Excellent poem walt, and the ending was just perfect  
Nan
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10 posted 2000-04-14 06:03 PM


...Sure am glad she called....
WhtDove
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11 posted 2000-04-15 12:17 PM


Walt this is very touching! Awww...good thing it was your wife yanno? Or you'd be in trouble  

Excellent work!

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12 posted 2000-04-15 12:28 PM


Walt, This is great, i enjoyed it.  
wayoutwalt
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13 posted 2000-04-15 11:27 AM


thank yuh for excusing the bad meter and lookin past to see whats in the poem yuh yuh yuh

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devina
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14 posted 2000-04-18 04:43 AM


Bad meter- my BUTT!! This was one of the best I've seen from you...shows much heart dear...loved the ending!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...


cruz
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15 posted 2000-07-20 11:53 AM


Hey maaan!!

this one's pretty sweet!  because i know you...i have a little bit of an advantage to the insight and where you're coming from.

later,
cruz

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16 posted 2000-07-21 03:15 PM


This is wonderful! I loved every line!
Superb, sweet ending!  


Gossamerwings ;)

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