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All about you? |
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Cassanova Junior Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 39Turlock, Ca. |
All about you You chased away My dreams With your priceless Fairy tales You cheated me Of happiness With adulterous ways You never denied You locked my hopes Inside an iron box Threw the key into "Gone-for-good" Forever to be lost But, Recently you see, I’ve learned a precious Bit of knowing: Despite your Protestations, Your actions, And your words… It’s never really been, All about you. [This message has been edited by Cassanova (edited 04-12-2000).] |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Cassanova~ Welcome!(great name) This is fantastic!  -SEA |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Excellent poem! Welcome to the family.. please check your email for something special from your new friends at Passions!!! |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Cassanova, very nicely expressed - welcome to the family!  Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Welecome to Passions This was a very good poem How true it is never"all about you" Life and Love is a 2 way street. Hope to read more of your creations kitkat |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Welcome to passions! I think you will see that most if not all of us are a kindred spirit. good first post Jeffrey |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Cassanova (Jason): This piece is raw with emotion -- with loss and bitterness, pain and a scathing sense of betrayal -- and you conveyed all of these powerfully and well. I must say my favorite part is the ending -- you wrapped it up nicely with a touch of hope for healing. It does the spirit well to hear a happy note after such a heart-wrenching dirge ... Well done, new friend -- you are in good company here. --Kess Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Great poem, Jason! Welcome to Passions! Denise |
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mete out Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 270england |
***cassanova, wow. this poem realy developed from a heart felt infringement upon your soul and self, into a very strong piece. well done and welcome topassions. i'll be watching...  I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it. |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
BRAVO - well said! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Welcome~ This is a great poem and I loved the end line~ It's never really been about you Tracie~ Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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weaubleau Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 101MO |
great way to introduce yourself! you will love it here. everyone is wonderful. great writing. hope to read more of it soon. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Welcome to Passions!!! Woa,,,could I ever feel this...big time relate! Great entrance! "Love is not love, till you give it away" mianna86@yahoo.com |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Welcome to Passions! Nice writing. A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Cassanova Junior Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 39Turlock, Ca. |
Oh WOW! Thank you all for such a kind welcome... I was kind of hesitant to print anything up here...LOL, wasn't sure whether I'd get booed down or not! Thank you for making me feel welcome! Jason |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jason~ Gosh, I like this so much. Threw the key into "Gone-for-good" Very descriptive ... you seem to have turned a corner with 'It’s never really been, All about you.' Welcome to Passion's. No 'boo' ... just welcome! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Cassanova, Welcome to Passions. A very good first post!!! Indeed, It’s never really been, All about you, Insightful! INclan |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Loved the last line...good writing..and welcome! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Cassanova, this was a beauty, wish my first was this good. genius ending. Parker |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
See Jason? I TOLD you that you'd get a warm welcome!!! Your poetry is too good not to!!! Welcome bud, enjoy and don't show me up, k?  |
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Lone Ranger Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 92Salvador , Bahia , Brazil |
Cassanova , excellent name! and what a poem!I should say that you have a gift... keep the good work! "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free It was always thus and always thus will be" Prof. Keating Dead Poets Society |
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