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*** You can't catch a Shooting Star ***
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*** You can't catch a Shooting Star *** |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas 
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*** You can't catch a Shooting Star *** ...He shot across the sky a shooting star that flew so high and there alone I stood in awe, at all his majesty I saw... ...It was that darkened day he took my very breath away with just one pass across my sky I knew with him, my wings could fly... ...I could not catch him though and as I stood, I saw his glow dissipate there in the night along with all I thought was right... * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * ...A shooting star's just that a star that flies, & won't come back you cannot catch them in the air so stand in awe & simply stare... ...The moment's brief, it's true but now I know my star was you - I never really knew your name but made a wish on you, the same... ...You still fly across my sky and I will always wonder why I couldn't catch you in my dreams, Stars aren't for catching though, it seems... * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * by poetFemmeFatale April 11, 2000 ** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
What an original idea---and a another beautiful poem. The best things to love are those we can't catch---catching changes free things. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
...I could not catch him though and as I stood, I saw his glow dissipate there in the night along with all I thought was right. ------------------- ...The moment's brief, it's true but now I know my star was you - I never really knew your name but made a wish on you, the same... -------------- girl this is perfection... i love this one!!... love the star metaphor and as always your deep emotions. very nice poet-girl  take care, jm Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Your on a roll today! Marina |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
It is my hope that we all have a special shooting star just for us. Jame |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
stars are for catching though difficult it seems but reach out and you will see they are the keeper of your dreams pFF, just a little something for you. loved your poem. A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Deb Lynne Member
since 1999-08-19
Posts 180Where blue skies meet blue ocean |
You're words are worth waiting for! Loved this one! |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
This is beautiful. Perhaps we may never catch our star but I think it's worth the chase.  Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
so full of beauty, and a lovely way to see a star again Kathleen |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
so full of beauty, and a lovely way to see a star again Kathleen |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Stars are really beautiful, but they don't compare to the beauty of your words Jeffrey |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Wow. I love poems like this... here the next line flows so perfectly with the last that you can almost read it before you've seen the words. Thanks again for the inspiration... now if I could just stop reading long enough to write a little I might be ok. =) "The storm rises up when the shadows descend every beat of my heart every day without end I will stand like a rock I will bend till I break till theres no more to give if thats what it takes I will risk everything I will fight I will bleed I will lay down my life if thats what you need every second I live thats the promise I make" I have no idea who wrote this... tell me if you know. =) |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
pFF, Wow....deep words and thoughts. I love it!!! Hope you catch one soon. Excellent job!!! Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
You know, perhaps one shouldn't chase stars that are so far out of reach when so many that shine so brightly fall right passed their grasping hands... Just thought to ponder... Michael |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 This is great...and yes the elusive shooting star, so many poems written for it but still remaining just out of reach...the most beautiful things in life often are. Wonderfully written. Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Gen this is wonderful! Never know, those stars have to burn out sometime, and come down ya think? May you be standing in the right place when it does |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Gen...perhaps all stars aren't meant to be caught...but here's hoping you find yours soon |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Martie - - Yes, when something is "caught", it's no longer "free"...good point. There is a certain beauty to freedom. Thank you. Janet Marie - - LOL at how you call me poet-girl !! Marina - - You know ME! LOL I know...back to Adult...(sigh) JmLee - - I'm trying to cling to that hope too...I'll "cling" with ya, ok? LOL Danny - - You almost made me cry with that one...thank you sir. DebLynne - - LOL You been waiting on me? hehe I'll type faster next time! EagleOne - - I'm WINDED from the chase! Argh! IrishRose - - Thank you - I plan on reading more of your writing...what I read last night was wonderful! Keep it coming! Jeffrey - - You make me blush...thank you for your sincerity, it means alot. WhiteNite - - Stop reading & start writing already! My thumbs are tired of twiddling!! ROFL Lone Wolf - - Me hopes so too! JUMPING HIGHER....!! Michael - - Thank you for the ponder...I catch your drift. Butterflies d.c. - - I'm gonna buy a taller ladder !!  WhtDove - - Nice thought you had there, but I can't help but laugh! I've been bonked on the head a few times before, and that's what I see happening! Ruth - - I do believe stars belong in the sky - if we catch them all, their glow would fade, and all that would be left is darkness up there. Thank you girl! Thank you to everyone...I know I seem to be running around in circles here, writing alot of "blues"...still dusting myself off & whining, as some say! LOL Bear with me while I regroup, ok? Soul-searching does seem sniveling at times, I guess...sorry. I love all of you who have believed in me. Thank you. |
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Richter_9 Junior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 41Whereever I happen to be at the time |
Shooting stars are wild things, like the stare of the serpant or the cry of the Banshee. Though all are mystical in their own right, though all hold a mystical allure, inevitably all seem to be a call to tragedy. Rich [This message has been edited by Richter_9 (edited 04-13-2000).] |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~PFF This was lovely!! I really liked the metaphors and imagery you used. The whole poem just seemed to flow together like the shooting star you speak about. Some things aren't meant to be caught. That's what makes them mysterious and enchanting. But I know you will find your "star" someday. And you won't need to catch it....it will already be yours. Take care, AMY ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
wow...I hadn't even read this when I wrote star-crossed. Forgive me for not being up-to-date so to speak, but don't forget to keep your feet on the ground while your reach, sis...it's a long fall. |
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weaubleau Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 101MO |
you're amazing. i've yet to find a poem with your signature that i haven't been in awe of. thank you for sharing all of your beautiful writing. |
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weaubleau Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 101MO |
you're amazing. i've yet to find a poem with your signature that i haven't been in awe of. thank you for sharing all of your beautiful writing. |
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