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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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the window whistles the air too loudly and the radio is playing a song I can not believe someone paid money to record and the brakes on the car next to me are fingernails on blackboard and the comments said in jest by a friend now hover hauntingly too close to the truth and is that me that is thinking so loudly trying to hear my own insanity above the constant peck peck pecking of your if if if you you you don't don't don't... then you you you should should should leave. and you peck incessantly waiting for my yes, when what you really want me to say is no I do love you. but I don't. and your pecking is just a distraction to cover the hole you are digging to suck out the part of me that changed that no longer cares but cannot voice her reason for staying... but wait I have to silence this window this song this air this noise these ears these ears can take no more and for a second the resounding nothing brings relief and yes that would suffice it weren't for the peck peck peck [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 04-10-2000).] |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Big HUSG sweetheart, sometimes the pecking can be worse than the silence of the cogs going round and round, well in my case, cause the cogs have nothing to go round..ooops....sorry, just trying to bring a smile cause you need one..  HUSG |
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NamelessOne Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 197Biloxi MS |
Powerful stuff ,thank you i enjoyed it |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I like silence too...most of the time...nice flowing read Corazon |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Powerful writing Corazon! |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
RG sure is good to see you and yep you made me smile, and nope your cogs got more than most to go 'round....thank you for the hugs, and yep, I did Namelessone, thank you PS...yep, sometimes all the noises in the world combined with what's in your head can be too much...and lol maybe you can't stop *thinking* but you can reach out and turn off the radio *g* oops martie, you snuck in, thank you very much [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 04-10-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I liked this and the song would have to be Madonna singing American Pie....James |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
More Hugs coming your way, Corazon ... This is a powerful piece ... it's also a piece that I can relate to ... Better days ahead, is my wish for you ......... |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Wow, you must know the cacophony of voices in my head. This is so cool. You spoke volumes for those voices...*S* |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
When a poem drags me into the cacophony and I find myself wanting to scream "SHUT UP!"... I think I'd have to give that poem a WOW!... and the poet my heartfelt sympathy! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Well I'm not gonna be the one to "peck" atcha about remembering your heart hun...you've always told me that!! Just know I"m available for hugs at any point that you need em sweetie!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks all....your responses along with my writing never fail to help me heal...to get me to tomorrow...with a smile....thank you much... suthern....its ok if you don't read it more than once....its enough that I had to live it devina....hugs back, and nope...*you* are the sweetie! |
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pmc Junior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 48Germany |
Hello Corazon I felt your poem and I felt for you, I hope you can get the relief that you need. Take care. Patrick |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I've been there in the past too, Corazon and I'd never want to be there again. Your poem described it perfectly. Sending you some great big HUGS your way! Denise |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
There are times when silence IS truly golden! Nice writing! |
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