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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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Tubing and arms and cracked headlight eyes. Mirrors and circuitry under scorched dust. There isn't much order left to their bodies. Just piles of metal shining in the dark. Shadowwires grow from the flashlight's glare -- In the beam I catch a flatplated eye. A circle shining like a coin on the floor; Near my footprints making a path twice defined. Pieces lying everywhere without description or function. Can dead electrons find a stream to orbit within? Does energy still pulse within remaining wires? Can long-hardened oil lubricate movement again? Fallen for some unknown cause, Built by some unknown maker, Seen over to fulfill their task And then left destroyed. If they can never live again Are there digital flowers I can pick and place In due respect of their motionless state? I'd like to find a pixellated rose or binary tree. I can only imagine and hope (for me) They were destroyed in an event of importance, significance. It would be a shame to think of this warehouse crypt Not as a memorial, just a rusting test case. |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
I thought maybe I had fallen asleep and dreamed that I just read a poem about a burial ground for robots. What a poem I was actually feeling bad for the scraps of metal left to die alone amongst themselves. Then I get to the end with the "I'd like to find a pixellated rose or binary tree." and thought wow the thought that went into this poem, I really like it, great job.  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Positively RABID for meat tonight... Your imagery is Par Excellence, tonight! er-- this morning? "A circle shining like a coin on the floor. near my footprints making a path twice defined..." Once again, a concert for one in my livingroom! so much here--too much to pick at. LOVED IT. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Lost Dreamer, Thank you. You made me smile really wide tonight. It's a great compliment to hear that you thought you might have been dreaming -- the sort of separate, unearthly yet grounded logic that is dreaming. I just had the image stuck in my head, and wanted to write without really explaining why or how or what. I appreciate your response. serenity, You made me smile, too -- just that first line alone got me laughing. Which must it must be bedtime. Thanks for reading. Oh, and by the way, over there, it's morning. Over here, it's still night; barely. Mike |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I enjoyed reading this..it sounds so interesting I want to visit this place. What City and what State? James |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Mike, this is absolutely filled with image after robotic image ~ so well assembled! I like it very much. ~ Claire |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Shadowwires grow from the flashlight's glare -- In the beam I catch a flatplated eye. A circle shining like a coin on the floor; Near my footprints making a path twice defined. ---------------- I can only imagine and hope (for me) They were destroyed in an event of importance, significance. It would be a shame to think of this warehouse crypt Not as a memorial, just a rusting test case. --------------- OH that mind of yours!! superb imagery very cool, you are. jm |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
James, Well, I'm in Northridge, CA, if you want to visit the place where my imagination lurks (and strikes). Thanks, Claire. JM, Much thanks to you, also. And I have to go three for three. Thus: Mike |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Ah Mike....a vivid display of modern (as modern can be in electronics, modern this second, scrap metal the next ) machine in poetry Nicely written |
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