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Virtual Café |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Breathe ~echoes~ ~echoes~ ~echoes~ of timeless captivity chained, in tendrils; painted orbs of green and blue tongues sweetened platinum smoothe declaiming: daily dreams divulging: doubts dramatic trust given-taken o'er rims moistened from lips sipping in the corner of a parlor in an unseen village town nestled in the center of our virtual café Hope the dream. Wish the future. Live the now. [This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 02-13-2000).] |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Christopher this amazes me. I love that last part! trust given-taken o'er rims moistened from lips sipping in the corner of a parlor in an unseen village town nestled in the center of our virtual cafe Awesome my friend! <*\\\>< When you can't make up your mind Which way is right for you, Stop and softly ask yourself, What Would Jesus Do? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
A study of meditation, Christopher! You simply amaze me with your ability to go so deep without drowning...I wish I could down- load your brain...Awe-inspiring, both simple and complex...What are you doing later? |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
What a presentation  |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Becca - Thank you, kinda just "fell out!" LOL Serenity - Methinks you give me a tad more credit than I deserve! Believe me, a trip into my head would leave you terrified!  Ruth - Thanks, miss you my friend! |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
oops [This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 02-13-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Nope. No. Nay. I meant every word. |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I warned you.... LOL... Anyone is free to e-mail me at anytime! I won't promise a speedy return, but you can try! Either click on my name in the Prose or English Workshop sections, or click on the following: [email protected] [This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 02-13-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Ooooohhhh! Now you have made serenity squeal with delight! You are indeed a talented man. |
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Dusk Treader
Moderator
Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
It only took me a full hour of staring at the screen to reply.. that's pretty good for me, I swear! Oh, the poem? I have to agree with Hoot and add that the presentation is very unique and seems so very interesting and fun to read! Great poem Christopher! A writer's soul is on paper etched. In flames I shall not be consumed, but reborn. -- Abrahm Simons |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Thank you Abe... It means more knowing you travel here seldomly! [This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 02-13-2000).] |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is a virtual cafe, isn't it? You do it proud, my friend...  |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
What am I going to do with you? Sigh! This is wonderful, Chris. The poem, the feelings, the presentation.....a complete package. I shake my head in wonder at your talent.  |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Ummmm....What can I say about this piece. It is almost sensual in it's reading. I love the image of the lips moistening the cup. Someday I will be able to write a free form verse like this (I hope..lol). Great job my friend.  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Christopher- What mesmerizing thoughts portrayed with allure. You are an extrememly talented man. The virtual cafe of your mind would be a fine place to share a cup of Latte. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Chris, this is great. The words lead you on, giving pause at just the right time. I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Christopher, amazing! Your recent work has taken a turn towards the ethereal. Absolutely divine! Not only do the words just fall off the tongue, but with your formatting they fall off the page as well. A visual masterpiece. I love the echoes. It shows the power of a single sound, breath, spoken word. I love this! It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Nan- It is and thank you! Sharon- Geesh! Stop it already... I KNOW!!! Marilyn- With your talent, you'll probably do it better! Marge- You too! You're making me *blush* again! But thank you! All are welcome in this virtual café, so pull up a seat and have a cup! Mistikman- Thank you, I'm glad it flowed of your lips! Tara- You too!!! Geesh! Thank you for the support! I'll pay you later! (wink-wink) |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This was virtually delicious Chris... Your presentation was great...I bow to you poet!!!!hehe Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
This must have slipped by me Such an effort in words and style Well done there Sir. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
This is very nice indeed, I echo all the above! Er...I noticed you said something just "fell out" ?? ROFL I have that problem too sometimes! hehe I do plan on digging up some of your other works I've missed while away. There's always a nice little surprise hidden in them I don't want to miss. Show yourself more often, would ya? T-girl** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Christopher this is so smooth and enjoyable to read. James |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
I really enjoyed this Chris, great and different imagery. Bravo my friend Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Come while away with me in idle languishing, indefinate clarity, and perpetual nothingness which is the Virtual Cafe. Dang Chris, where is Rod Serling at - he should personally introduce you poems you know. "tongues sweetened platinum smoothe" What a line. Well done, my friend, as always. michael |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
What a convincing picture you have painted here! I am seeing a cafe all in chrome and neon -- LOL -- but that could just be the room spinning on me again. Excellent work in any case, and I thought the changing colours was well done too and added much. --Me Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Quite an apt description, eh? Masterfully done, m'friend. 'orbs of green and blue'...very cool.May I never be too busy to help another's load, Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed. --Author Unknown |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
It's me again, here to plead guilty to a drunken and vapid response that in no way did justice to the poetry contained herein. (sheesh -- I should be a lawyer!)  After a patient explanation, I think I have grasped most of what I was missing in this (thus my noncommital reply LOL). "Breathe" was an excellent first line, it set the stage for the rest quite well, I thought ... The abrupt change of theme in the midst (between being chained and being in a cafe) works very well, I think, to explain the duality of the situation, though I wonder why you chose to use such a strong reference to captivity (makes it sound unpleasant or unwanted). As I so clumsily stated before, I enjoyed the cafe scene very much (being partial to them myself, go figure!). You captured the cozy and intimate atmosphere and the sensuality of sharing a latte with someone you feel a connection with -- vanilla latte, of course. Quiet conversations, Hushed tones, leaning Forward, smiles that frame the words And reach the eyes ( Whispers floating between, Charged Like living things, on Breaths of Warm vanilla ... Any better..? --Me Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
this is great, glad I didn't miss it...you could rename pip to this....virtual cafe....great job! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
HUSG |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
oops ... [This message has been edited by Skyfyre (edited 02-16-2000).] |
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Oscar Wilde Junior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 31San Francisco |
Hope the dream. Wish the future. Live the now. I am. You are such a marvelous poet! Your biggest fan, O. |
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