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BrazilianGirl
Junior Member
since 2000-03-26
Posts 29


0 posted 2000-03-29 06:08 AM


This isnt a very good one but when you have a relationship like mine sometimes words cannot come out as you want... I just love this person very much


I can feel your presence
I feel how your love can be present
even in your absence.

Today I stopped to write a bit
and what I write is for you

I want write about what the others
do not know and cannot see

I want to define you
I wanna compare you eyes with
the shine of the moon
And see in your smile the hope
for the future

I cannot write poetry and never could
I only have my feelings that's all I ever had

I hope in my words you feel my love
I wish one day you will realize
that my feelings made me remember
your love inspired
the words I today write
to light a little
part of your life

© Copyright 2000 BrazilianGirl - All Rights Reserved
**Angel**
Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 162

1 posted 2000-04-06 02:01 PM


That is an excellent poem. You can write poetry very well. Poetry to me is my feelings and that is what makes it good.

Keep writing!

Dawn Eclipse
Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637
The Horsehead Nebula
2 posted 2000-04-07 10:07 PM


That was a lovely expression of feelings.  Everybody has them, and you do well showing them, even in your poetry.  You write well!  I know what its like to feel like that, and i'm glad you are so happy.  

 Sometimes the most important things can't be seen with the eyes, but are rather felt with the heart.
*Cassie Roseen*


X Angel
Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521
Oregon
3 posted 2000-04-08 12:27 PM


Hi   I enjoyed your poem....but since it is a poem, I am moving it to the Open Forum so that everyone can enjoy it!
Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
4 posted 2000-04-08 05:18 PM


Essa foi uma surpresa. Esta muito bem escrito e repleto de sentimentos sinceros
Voce disse que nao e poeta, mas essa poesia e bem melhor do que muitas outras escrito pelos poetas americanos
Parabems.
Liz

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
5 posted 2000-04-08 05:25 PM


Lovely writing..I enjoyed the line...I hope in my words you feel my love..I wish one day you will realize...that my feelings made me remember...your love inspired the words I write today...Very powerful...I was touched..I can feel you love thru your words.  James
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6 posted 2000-04-08 06:59 PM


BrazilianGirl~
Your poetry is lovely.
Your heart is writing with you and
that's what it's all about.
Your images are profound.
Wonderful piece of you.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


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