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Pot-O-Gold (repost for Claire with deepest sympathy)
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Pot-O-Gold (repost for Claire with deepest sympathy) |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648
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If wishing it could bring you back to me Beside me here then you would surely stand My heart would sing in three part harmony If once again you graced my lonely land. If wishing were the balm to heal this pain At last my heart so light would sing a song Of joy replacing sorrow's sad refrain And dance a happy jig my whole life long. But wishes can't do anything at all And dreams, I know, can't change a single thing Reality has cruelly come to call And missing you's the only song I sing. At rainbow's end we'll meet again, I'm sure That pot-O-gold that I am longing for. For Mom and Dad, in memory. ------------------ 12/99 |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
moving and wisdom filled tribute Denise, beautiful...and I'm sorry for both your losses and Claire's...as this dedication speaks of. take care,jm The stars shine so bright, now's the time I close my eyes - soft wind touch my face, Cool sand upon the place where I once kissed you And held you close. Now I will reach for the stars... Because Oh my love, that's where you are... Though the storms of black night rage on I still see your face I still feel your lips on mine And though my heart feels all alone without you I still hear you sing to me I still hear your voice on the sea... vertical horizon |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Denise, this is absolutely beautiful... the 3rd verse in particular just wrenches my heart! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Denise, this is a lovely poem. It so perfectly says this truth and so well. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you, Janet Marie, Suthern and Martie for your kind words. They are appreciated. Denise |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Denise this is beautiful! I can see this on a hallmark card! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Oh Denise, thank you for posting this...this is such a beautiful, touching poem for your parents...these words speak so poignantly of your love for them. What a treasure this is! Thank you, in earnest, for sharing these words with me right now, Denise. This is such a thoughtful gesture, and I love your beautiful poem. Many hugs to you, my friend. ~ Claire |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
D~ I was walking through this open woods and came upon this poem. Very nice. There is one teeny word that I would offer a suggestion on, (as I am reading The Seat of the Soul by Gary Zukav) but rather than point it out here, you may e-mail me or bring your poem to the calm waters of the Critical Analysis group. By the way, I think that the names on this Web site are misleading. Instead of "Critical Analysis" for example, I think it should be called a "Mentoring Group". A critic is somebody who is trying to shoot someone down. A mentor is someone who is trying to help someone. And instead of "Open 6" the name should be "Friendship Forum" as the title "open" implies that anything goes. Whereas "friendship forum" would imply that it doesn't- it's a forum of and for friends. Anyway, I liked this poem, for what it's worth. (Just one little word) best regards, bboog |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Denise this is lovely....beautiful...very touching...you should have your own greeting card company..it would touch so many lives and hearts! "Love is not love Which alters when it alteration finds, Or bends with the remover to remove. O,no! it is an ever-fixed mark....William Shakespeare |
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christies heart Member
since 1999-08-10
Posts 189NJ, USA |
This is touching and very well done. We need to keep some form of faith and this expresses that so well. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I love seeing reposts of my favorite works... Thanks, Denise..  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Denise - I remember - how lovely it is...  - you thoughtful thing you.K'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
What a beautiful, touching poem. Thanks for reposting this |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you all for your kind comments. I'm glad you found it touching. Claire, I hope it brought you a measure of comfort. Bboog, see you in CA!  Denise |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
This was so beautiful and sweet like sugar! Nathan |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
-denise this was simply beautiful! it touched my heart in a way that i can't even begin to put into words. but you said exactly everything i feel. i miss my mom desperately too. but just think, they are in heaven together. take care and god bless! love ya amy ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you so much, Nate and Amy for reading and commenting. You're a sweetie, Nate! I'm glad it touched you and brought you comfort too, Amy. Denise p.s. I am going away for the night....will be back late tomorrow.....see you all then! Happy posting!! |
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