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The result of telling my true feelings: "I know"
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The result of telling my true feelings: "I know" |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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Living life in a dream... It was secure, but unreal If love’s shadows were as sweet as they were I couldn’t comprehend how sweet Actually possessing it would be That’s what I thought yesterday Today, I took control For the first time in my life I stopped dreaming Instead of doing I made it known That I was in love I told him the truth That I would sell my soul For a kind word from him I guess I wasn’t deserving of him The day wore on And nothing happened Until... He told my friend “I don’t like her” And gave the poem back Rejection I thought I had gone mad I nearly threw myself From my second-story window Because I knew the pain from that Was nothing compared To the pain in my heart The pain is still there It will never leave I no longer live in a dream I shattered it And I f e l l into reality And I landed... Hard Do I regret it? I’m still asking myself Still dazed from the fall, I write this I don’t regret taking control I’ll never play “what if” again But I regret how it turned out... No more dreaming I guess it wasn’t meant to be But now, at least I know "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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SorrowsMystress Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 178I'm a wanderer, a nomad...I don't live in one particular area, Just wherever I end up. |
THIS IS AN AMAZING POEM!!!!!! To say the very least. I remember when I have felt this same way (many a times, oh so many times), but not once did I have the strength to realize I could move on, until it was too late. I've learned a lot of lessons in my life, and this was one I had to learn the hardest way of all. You have a finely tuned talent, a way to express others feelings (along with your own) through your poetry. Keep it up! :P |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~Lovebug... wow, this was fantastic!! i really liked both pieces that you wrote, the one before telling him how you felt and this one. i know right now it seems like the end of the world, but I am glad to see that you don't regret telling him the truth. i have been in this situation before, and i know it hurts like hell. we can say hell in this right? through writing we are able to heal, so it is my hope that you will work this out through your beautiful poetry. you have a gift for words. take care. amy p.s. try to S M I L E  < !signature-->~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ [This message has been edited by Aimster (edited 04-03-2000).] |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
LoveBug, The reality is this was too bitterly real. I feel for you, I've been there, it happens from the other side too. Sometimes we give into our emotions, when we get the sign. The problem is people often think that not telling how they really feel about you early will hurt you, so they wait and make it worse. People generally are cowards when it comes to confronting anothers emotions, or they are just decietfull. Get up brush yourself off... don't even look back its not worth you breath. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Lovebug, You write so maturely about the rejection, it's almost scary. At your age, I never would have admitted this to anyone. And you express it so well in this very heartfelt but well written poem. Very well done, lovebug. I'm so proud of you Liz |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
The important part is you followed your feelings...this time they took you to the wrong place...but these are the same feelings that will sooner or later take you to the right place. I loved reading this poem and I'm sorry it didn't work out for you. James |
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snuffy Junior Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 19 |
Hi, you beetle fan! Way to go....... I salute your honesty, and your expressive nature... There are many fish in the sea! But somehow (and I think it must be the polution), most of them are mutated, and lack any kind of sense! That was mean, right? I know..... but I myself am jinxed when it comes to love.... but, hey, I know there are a lot of good guys out there, right under our noses (let me see.......hmmmmmm.... all I see is my cat )Have fun with your friends, enjoy what you have, and things will be your way lovebug... |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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Mystress: This, too, was one of the hardest lessons I have learned in my life. Thank you. Aimster: Thank you for your encouraging words. Haleyja:Thank you Liz: I feel that I should be honest with my Passions family. Thank you jmlee12345: So true... thank you snuffy: Thank you "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Been there, it hurts, I know. Think of it this way though: are you any worse off now than before you asked? You still dont have a date with him. At least now you arent ignorant of his feelings and you can try getting over him. It will really only get better from here. And it isnt you that doesnt deserve him, he is just ignorant of the person you really are. Course, I also know that in spirit you wont believe a thing I am saying now, I know I didnt when people were saying the same things to me, but you must try. Oh, great free verse too |
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