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****Rememberance****
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****Rememberance**** |
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amber Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 240los banos, ca, 
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Asking the wind so long ago, All the answers that I should know, Trapped inside, nowhere to go, Just becuase I loved you so. Somewhere beyond, where we stand, Hearts secure, hand in hand, Stars aligned inside the soul, Overwhelmed, to much to know. Falling free into your grace, Your love such an awkward place, Still lost in you without a trace, My insecurities, now erased. Kiss me soft, here and now, As if not to wonder how, Thoses vacant tears have washed away, Everything I ment to say. The crystal promises in your eyes, The beauty in your hearts diguise, Break down my souls last defense, Satisfied with sheer rememberance. Only after trying so hard to let go, did i realize how much i wanted to hold you forever> Amber and Ellis forever and always |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Amber This is another for the "A" folder, you know that one..? It's where I get all my new ideas from. This one is really good. As my kids say... A-plus Very Cute |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
What a tender, loving, haunting poem. I know you to be the queen of haunting verses, but this one has a note of hope, and I love that. You are an excellent poet, and my husband and I both love your work. How do you get the meaning and rhyme to flow together so well? When I try to get my meaning to rhyme, it loses its meaning and intensity. When I try to get my rhyme to have meaning and intensity, it melts into mediocrity. I guess I just don't have that gift. Yet... for I will never give up trying !!!! Bravo for you, my friend! |
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amber Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 240los banos, ca, |
This is so purdy Ambs...Yep, we both know you're lost sis...lost in love I mean!!!  Love you!!! Only after trying so hard to let go, did i realize how much i wanted to hold you forever> Amber and Ellis forever and always |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Amber, this is absolutely beautiful! *sigh* Denise |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Must agree with Rosemary. Such nice work with the rhyme. "Stars aligned inside the soul". what great expression. All so well done. A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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amber Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 240los banos, ca, |
thank you all so much. Lucky- you always seem to enjoy my work and i thank you deeply. Rosemary- i honestly dont have an answer for you as much as i wish that i did. It seems to come from somewhere deep inside my soul and it just wraps itself together. I thank you deeply for your encouragement and your husband. I have missed you both very much. dysynder- I always have your commemnts to look forward to, ever since my first day here, thanks so much. Tanya- you posted under the wrong name by accident, people probably think i am nuts replying to mysefl. Well thats okay....I..knew that it was you. danny- thanks so much i appreciate your taking the time to read and comment. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Amber~ It makes me happy to see the joy in this poem. I enjoyed your thoughts. 'Satisfied with sheer rememberance.' Lovely, lovely line. (I recognized Sis's ink .. she was so enthusiastic !  )~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) This is beautifully written and written straight from the heart as all wonderful poetry is. Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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Ashley2314 New Member
since 2000-04-04
Posts 2USA |
This is so beautiful. The words go straight to your heart! |
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