Open Poetry #6 |
No title... just a father's perception |
Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
And there she stands In stone defiance To my answer Jaw set firm Chin down The dark eyes of rage Piercing out from beneath brooding bangs Body rigid Arms straight Each fist clenched too white Wanting to strike the anvil of anger A foot stomps A puff of fury She starts to tremble As madness seeks expression Standing at the brink Out sticks a tongue A face is made And laughter explodes My answer still stands But she's to busy Giggling from tickling To care about What she can't have This is better |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
This poem is so precious, I remember those days. You sound like a fabulous Dad. |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
Works like a charm doesn't it...the tickle monster still works on my five yr. old...This poem is wonderful..And I am smiling! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is a gem, Andrew!!! Big smiles here. *S* |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Andrew, Thank you for giving me a reason to smile today. Brings back fond memories. This is an excellent piece. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is WONDERFUL. Full of love and life and fun. I was giggling by the end of the poem. How marvelous that you could put this into words. Bravo, on the poetry and on fatherhood Liz |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is delightful, Andrew!! Denise |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Oh man if this isn't my 13 year old and I to a T!!! Great poem, Andrew. Speaks volumes about never forgetting to love your child even when bumping heads...LOL Wonderful message. Michael |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
-Andrew... You sound like a wonderul father...quite similar to mine! This was lighthearted and fun, but also held a very lovely message. I think you have this fatherhood thing down pretty well. Thanks for sharing this! Made me smile. AMY ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Andrew~ Oh my ! I just had to send this to my daughter. Reminded me of the day we were eyeball to eyeball and I suddenly realized she was taller than me ... I immediately took charge and said 'Sit Down !' ... and we both started laughing with what we'd discovered. What joyous moments are shared in those moments of 'parenthood'. Thank you for this adorable reminisce. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Andrew, I have had the privilege of reading several of your poems that have dealt with your family and your family life and I must say they, and you, are truly blessed to have each other. Wonderful writing, sir. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Andrew this is so sweet. Those times you and they can laugh about it are just precious. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Bravo!!!! This is the best way to end the battle of the wills...lol I loved your view and you images were colored of course with the face of my own 8 year old angel especially the tougne...lol Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Scott, this is so sweet and loving a glimpse of family touching truth. I loved it! |
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weaubleau Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 101MO |
it's so true... that was me and my neice just last week... |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Thanks one and all for your kind words... I'd also like to say thanks to my own parents who are wonderful people. They raised me to be the father I am today. I'm glad I was able to bring smiles to some and fond memories to others... I couldn't ask for more. Peace to you all. [This message has been edited by Andrew Scott (edited 04-06-2000).] |
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Lady in Red Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 147 |
You've managed to capture one of those precious moments in a poem. Your love for your family shines bright here my friend. Thanks for sharing this. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Applauding this piece sir! LOL I find myself getting so frustrated at times...it won't be long, and my 5 yr. old son will be taller than me! Argh! This gave me reason to laugh, and learn from your doings. It's hard sometimes - to remember to "love" in the toughest of times. Thank you. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Definately been there, done that one Well written my friend |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Dear Andrew....now then....is this your daughter or your wife?......LOL...nice job...miss ya...hope life's doing you justice son......take care....Love Toe... |
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