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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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River of joy, river of sorrows Take away my yesterdays, give me my tomorrows River of life, river of death Bring to me the things that I have not attained yet River of my heart, river of my soul Let your life flow through me help me reach my goal River of my body, river of my mind Help me to seek these things help my body to find River running deep, river running wide Take my wishes with you across the time, across the tide River ever flowing, river never ending Take my heart with you as it begins its mending -------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Sven, I love it. The river image is nice and this was very well expressed. Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Well done. I enjoyed you poem muchly. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sven....I can feel the river flowing with your words....each ripple and sigh of the water. Nature is a wonderful thing and offers much inspiration. This is an excellent piece. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) This flowed like the river...strong and swift. I loved it!! Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
OK, I am becoming very concerned about both our poetry lately. I think we are becoming to too mushy lately.Ha Ha What we need is real good adult poem, that will cure this ailment! Marina |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
We all have 'many rivers to cross' on our life's journey Sven, well written!!  There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Lovely |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sven~ I found this poem to be absolutely fascinating. 'River running deep, river running wide Take my wishes with you across the time, across the tide.' Lovely thoughts. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Thank you all. . . Elizabeth, I have this thing for bodies of water. . . Mike, thank you muchly!! LW, go outside and take a walk, then come back and tell me about it. . . Butterflies, thanks! I did try to make it flow well. . . Marina, it's all your fault!! And what's wrong with being a little mushy? Isis, one wide river, my friend. . . Hoot, thank you.. . Marge, fascinating? Now you're making me blush.. . ----------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sven, Good words, good thoughts, good poem. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sven....the river is powerful yet gentle. No matter what it keeps on flowing towards whatever it is that is drawing it on. I guess the lesson would be look ahead to what could be, not back to what was?? Am I close here? The river has always fascinated me....it is almost endless like the sky....no definite beginning or ending. Could it be that way maybe? Let me know... Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Oh sure just blame me for everything!!! And exactly how is it my fault?? Marina |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
It's amazing how moving waters can smooth the roughest and sharpest stones over time. Hang in there, those waters are healing too, BTW. If your hearts floating in there somewhere, you'll be ok.  Beautiful poem sir. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
You've embarked upon a lovely, rhythmic swell with this poem, Sven. A beautiful undercurrent of devotion and desire. ~ Claire |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
River of my heart,River of my soul.Nice verse!!!! I loved it a lot.Keep up the good work |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
well done! |
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Shelley Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 263Ohio, USA |
I'd like to fall into that river |
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