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SorrowsMystress Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 178I'm a wanderer, a nomad...I don't live in one particular area, Just wherever I end up. 
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Had I known Had I known that the heart breaks slowly, dismantling itself into unrecognizable fragments of misery.... Had I known the heart would leak emitting it's ache with a vulgar visisbility Into the dress-up dining rooms of strangers..... Had I known that solitude could stifle the breath, loosen the mind, and force the toungue against the palate..... Had I known that lonlieness could permeate, winding itself around the body in an omnious and beautiful cicatrix..... Had I known- I still would have loved you. Your brash and violent beauty, Your heavy comedic face And your knowledge of sweet delights. But from a distance I would have left you unfrequented for the delectation of those who Wanted more and could care less.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hi and welcome to passions...and WOW your poem makesquite a first impression.this is very well written and expressed..packs a punch with you choice of words..and that last verse is perfection... grat job, take care, jm she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough, and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in. ...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me... and I feel like somethings gonna give... and I'm a little bit angry. matchbox20 |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!  You certainly Know how to make an entrance, this is breathtaking, you have tapped into such strong emotion. Your work is such a gift...thank you for sharing it!!! Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
WOW! This is a stunner! But from a distance I would have left you unfrequented for the delectation of those who Wanted more and could care less.... This is nigh on perfect - and an excellent ending...welcome to Passions!  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
WOw, this is a powerfully written piece packed full of emotions and a grand entrance to our site. Welcome to passions...looking forward to reading more  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is an excellent piece of writing, Sorrows. Denise |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
You are a very wise person, SorrowsMystress, and I hope things look up for you soon. Welcome to Passions! Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SorrowsMyst~ This is a very powerful, thought-provoking piece of writing. Welcome to Passion's ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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tulip Member
since 1999-07-04
Posts 320unknown |
Wow, what a powerful piece! Welcome!!! |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
I agree...very powerful..wonderful first post..and welcome to Passion! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
A sincere welcome to you! It is good to read such well crafted free verse. I will be looking forward to reading more. |
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Tatianna New Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 1 |
Your piece speeks of true feelings. This piece hit me very hard. I've been through similar situations, and it speeks of feelings that should be universal. I hope to see more from you. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi SorrowsMystress, You have caught my mind with your words so full of power I am very, very impressed. You are a welcomed friend here. Cerenity |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Allow me to extend my greetings as well, and to say that I agree with everyone else -- this is a very powerful piece of writing. Wonderfully done! Welcome to the passions family!  ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
First, welcome to Passions. Hope you like it here as much as I do! Secondly, wow this was one heck of an entrance piece. powerfully written, emotions captured perfectly, and poetically breathtaking. i will look forward to reading more of your work. for now take care.amy ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
SorrowsMystress, I must mirror all the other comments, wonderful job. Great choice of word useage. Yes and the ending was perfect. Parker.... look forward to reading more. |
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