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The Crying Clown
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The Crying Clown |
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gilbert_6 New Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 3 |
In a vision I imagined a clown and on his face he wore a frown. His makeup was smeared on his face, somehow he didn't belong in this place. I sat down beside him to ask him why he was so sad, and why did he cry, but then he turned and I looked in his eyes and knew he couldn't go on living these lies, of smiling and cheerful thinking when inside his heart was slowly sinking with the world's pain and contradiction wishing his smile was not merely fiction, but genuine and in some way real making happiness a feeling he could feel, not something he put on in disguise to hide the sadness behind his eyes. Then the clown turned and i could finally see that the sad clown with a frown was really me. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Welcome to Passions, Gilbert. Excellent poem! Please check you email for a special welcome! I look forward to reading more from you! Denise |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This has the potential of being an excellent poem. Welcome, Gilbert. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Gilbert~ Welcome to Passion's Wearing the face of a clown, laughing on the outside ... crying on the inside ... has to be difficult. You've explained this very nicely.  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very nice entree... Welcome to Passions..  |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!  What an entrance you make...This is beautifully written and so touching. You've used the style I love as well...the "final blow" at the end. I can't wait to read more. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Good poem (Marge what is that person spraying!?) |
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gilbert_6 New Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 3 |
Thank all of you for the comments and support. Please feel free to criticize, I am wanting to become better, so any suggestions would be appreciated. Thanks again, this site is a blessing. gilbert_6 |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
welcome to passions  |
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