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Slashed soul
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since 2000-03-29
Posts 86
England

0 posted 2000-04-01 10:32 AM



In the office I walk, I see, the strangers scattered all around me.
Nameless faces, hearts hidden from view, I am looking for somebody too.
The hum of computer, the click of keys, short skirted woman,oh yes please!
Outline of face, study the lips, moving downwards towards her hips.

Fantasy island, here I come, lounging in the burning sun, pretty woman come with me, bring a friend - make it a three.

Tangents of passion, whirlwinds of sin, am I the one who you let in, through your door of objections, desires and trust, body so hot dripping with lust.

My heart on a platter, my love in a tin-I am the lover who never gives in, through fog and crystal i'll be true, for the someone I need is someone like you.


-Rich-

*S*






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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-04-01 11:43 AM


ahhh rich, so many women, so little time  
this is a really cool poem, I enjoyed the visual of you sitting at work watching the skirts go by...(typical man) LOL
but kidding aside this is well written, good choice of vocabulary and phrases too

My heart on a platter, my love in tin, I am the lover who never gives in, through fog and crystal i'll be true, for the someone I need is someone like you.

very cool.*S*
take care jm


 she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough,
and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in.
...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me...
and I feel like somethings gonna give...
and I'm a little bit angry.
matchbox20

CherylLynnMckee
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 215

2 posted 2000-04-01 12:21 PM


I agree with Janet.. well written..typical male lol..great poem!

 

Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
3 posted 2000-04-01 04:09 PM




Rich,
You created a very nice distraction in my day...lol..Big of heart and imagination I see  

My heart on a platter, my love in a tin-I am the lover who never gives in, through fog and crystal I'll be true, for the someone I need is someone like you.  

Humor or not I loved this part best!


serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

4 posted 2000-04-01 10:02 PM


It seems, indeed, that you are a man used to having his way!  (Who could resist?)  Talent, wit, and persistance...and not to mention--intrigue...Well done, you passionate playboy, you!
Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
5 posted 2000-04-01 10:17 PM


Rich....wow....is it hot in here??  LOL.  I loved this!!!  What more can I say??

 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

snuffy
Junior Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 19

6 posted 2000-04-02 12:51 PM



I think everyone is drooling over you now!
heehee

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