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Open Poetry #6

Rejection from a woman

Slashed soul
Member

since 2000-03-29

Posts 86
England

0 posted 2000-04-01 04:38 PM

Are you cut up?
why don't you talk.
something I said, what did I do..
stick the knife in you?

How do you feel, walls gone up,
hurt me bad, make me sad,
feelings in a blender,
heart in a grinder.

I'm coming to get you back,
save this ship of love from the rocks,
too late! I hear the sirens scream,
shattered nerves, broken dreams.

I wont listen to reason,
I wont listen to friends,
turn back the time,
let me start again.

-Rich-

(I just find this a good subject!-xxx)

Elizabeth

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Member Ascendant

since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

1 posted 2000-04-01 04:41 PM

It is a good subject! You have written quite a poweful poem here.

Elizabeth

"He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!"
-The Crucible

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06

Posts 3733
Michigan

2 posted 2000-04-01 04:45 PM

***Relating much to acutely***
This is very well written....you bring the nerves right to the surface with this one. Well done with so much style.
**Angel Wing Hugs**....Because they never ask for anything in return.

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