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The Jackal
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

0 posted 2000-04-01 12:49 PM


your really on a roll
says your monster in control
your taking uncertain risks
and at the sight of you
we all just cant resist
pudgy sense of urgency
life is safer on the outer rim
its only part of the could have been
pretend your dying.. pretend your hiding
with pictures in the sea
washed ashore
whispering nothing as a final plea


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INclan
Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024
Indiana, USA
1 posted 2000-04-01 07:44 AM


Jackel,

An interesting creation.  This struck me as a desperate plea for acceptance.  The subject looked more like a class clown. The poem rings some sad overtones in me....for people out on the fringe.  Well written!

INclan

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
2 posted 2000-04-01 09:43 AM


Your words are always full of deep meaning and truly make one think.
Lost Dreamer
Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow
3 posted 2000-04-01 10:08 AM


Intricately woven spider web
crawling into silk capturing
dancing spider approaches
seeing a message threaded
tightly within poison eyes
piercing face appetite drooling
reaching to grab meaning
as trap door opens mouth
fighting the wrath of black
spit molecules bare resistance
as scroll of poetry lines
a path of least detouration
founded a poet with words
grabbing and playing
like a fiddle fingers intense
musically entrancing
the intrigued audience attending.

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