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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA 
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“Whipped” March 30, 2000 Beaten and bleeding here on your threshing floor, I feel as if I am your ever-present whore. Take as you please all that you want. Leaving me helpless, empty, and distraught. Oh how I wish to gain my freedom from this tyranny, From the talons of you, my tormentor, who have no sympathy. My hated lover, you defiantly ignore my every plea. Yet, still you’re here, beating, pulling, taking everything of me. Even up until my very last breath. Then a memory from a time long before Bursts open my heart’s lonely bound door. I had ignored, that incessant knocking that I had heard, But in my last breath, I opened what I had never wanted to unfurl. Yet, what I now feel is as nothing ever in my dreams My heart is growing pure and washed away clean No longer do I feel the talons and teeth ripping and grappling at my soul. All I feel is love, peace, and grace making me once again whole. It will be a longer walk though, to unify my flesh. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
WOW! What a surprise to see you! Good surprise it is! The tormentor sure does have no mercy...Thank God for His grace and His willingness to always pick us back up! Great to see you posting again!  It's been a while and I'm trying to remember...was it Moses? [This message has been edited by WhtDove (edited 03-30-2000).] |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
ouch painful poem..love the ending..nicely done! |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Hey Whtdove, yeah my nickname is Moses. Funny how people never forget that! Thanks, I just got into the writing mood tonight and this came out. You know how I am. Lately I haven't been in the mood for writing poetry. I have written a fairly descent short story though. If you want to read it, email me, and I will reply it back to you. Thanks for the encouragment. Chryl, Thank you Jfreak |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hey, BC.... nice to see ya... This is a a pretty intense work - with a great finale... We'd like to read your short stories too, ya know.. That's what we've got a Prose forum for. Don't be such a stranger round these parts..  |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wonderful use of words in this, sir. It is nice to 'read' you again.  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Yep, I'll email you, but you should post your story in Prose too! |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Good to go everyone. I will definately put the story in Prose. Within the next two days or so. I will let you guys know. Thanks for the encouraging words all you gave for this poem. Jfreak |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Well, this poem is very nicely written!  It's heart breaking,  but the fact that you found your salvation in the end makes it all so wonderful. I suppose a good word for it would be bittersweet...? well, I THINK I'm pretty sure of who this about. am I right? keep posting! Hope to see some more soon! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ "Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves." "Bleeding hearts release tears of fire" "work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent writing...James |
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