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jbowie Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 135BANGOR (that OR) ME |
Her sarcasm fell and slapped against me like a cold lump of lard and I remembered that her thumbs were to short, like toes and her hair was not naturally red she just set out bear traps not really much to say about that just see ya later I don't need this |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
She just set out bear traps....that is one great line.. I've met that gal and those bear traps look so innocent 'til you stick your foot in. Great poem, sir. |
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Enola Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 138England |
I've seen those traps too, they really hurt. see ya later I don't need this ... how I wish I could have said that. Nicely done. The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Yowsers....some powerful stuff here  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Nobody needs that! Great poem, James! Denise |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Yikes - Talk about a bad hair day, huh??? |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
James.... Great poem you got here! This held some really powerful emotions, and you captured it so well on paper! Amy ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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jbowie Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 135BANGOR (that OR) ME |
Balladeer- I'm suprised that ya liked it, at least it had one good line Enola-sometimes you just have to kick them to the curd (and is your name derived from the a bomb dropper) Hootie rn-I just don't understand, I did not have any idea what I was writing until it was done Denise- thanks and that's damn straight Nan- well not all of us get to the beauty parlor every day Amy- thanks, and here I thought it was just silly |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Straightforward and strong ... some folks just don't get it. ~ Claire |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
A vivid picture....hope she's not your wife! |
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