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RAM
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since 2000-03-24

Posts 153

0 posted 2000-03-29 01:10 AM

Desert Spring

Morning paints itself
across the tops of foothills.
Night's chill retreats,
having never found purchase;
the bonding of skin to skin
ensured this.

Laughter paints itself
across the tips of your smile.
Day's warmth is foretold
in your eyes - in my eyes.
Dawn's envious strokes
attempt to match the colors we see.

Passion paints itself
across the valleys and foothills
of our dreams -
across the rise and fall
of head on chest.
Peace strecthes,
yawns
and weaves itself
among our ever willing,
labored breaths.
We rise.

© RAM 3/15/00

CherylLynnMckee
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since 2000-03-28

Posts 215

1 posted 2000-03-29 01:17 AM

I love the way your love and nature competes in this poem. Nicely done!

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

2 posted 2000-03-29 11:46 AM

This poem is wonderful. Not only is it well crafted and flows very well, but your word choices and the imagery you create from them is incredible. It's soft, it's sensuous, and it works all the way around. Wonderful work

Mike
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since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

3 posted 2000-03-29 01:42 PM

First of your poems I've read. Well done, I enjoyed.

Panthers Chrysalis
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since 2000-03-25

Posts 51

4 posted 2000-03-29 02:12 PM

What an interesting way to describe a peaceful love....

I enjoyed it!

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2000-03-29 02:30 PM

I love the images you have created....sweet, soft. Well done!! A pleasure to read!!!

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Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

6 posted 2000-03-29 03:32 PM

Sweet and sensuous, just like the poet.

Corinne

RAM
Member

since 2000-03-24

Posts 153

7 posted 2000-03-29 06:19 PM

Thanks, Cheryl, Hoot, Mike, Chrys and Wolf.

Corinne, Thank you so much. However, the extent to which this is sweet and sensuous is wholely attributable to my muse being so sweet and sensuous.

Rick

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

8 posted 2000-03-31 12:12 PM

Lovely poem....tell your muse to inspire more!!!

RAM
Member

since 2000-03-24

Posts 153

9 posted 2000-03-31 01:51 PM

Thank you, Poet. Alas. Our muses work hours of their own choosing, don't they? LOL When we're really lucky, though, they walk with us throughout our days. Bless me, Muse, for I have penned. It's been twelve hours since my last profession.

Come whisper words into my pen;
come fold me into song.
Then, as the melody unfurls,
we'll share each morning's dawn.

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